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'get out of this car right now!' - UF narrative application


tmg0114 1 / -  
Oct 31, 2012   #1
Not sure if I am on the right track at all and I am open to any advice

In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

"Tara Marie, you better get out of this car right now!" My mother demanded as I locked myself in my car. I was parked at my brand new high school's parking lot where I refused to exit the car. My Mom wanted me to go into the gym where volleyball tryouts were being held so I could be on the team and she was highly determined to do so. I on the other hand was being stubborn because I have played volleyball for many years and decided to give up after I recently moved to South Carolina. I thought to myself, "I am the new girl and no one is going to talk to me or pay me any attention. All the girls are going to be amazing and much more skillful. Why would the coach want a new girl on the team when this team has already bonded together?"

Usually I have no problem being "the new girl" because I have been the new girl at eight different states and eleven different schools but today was different. Today I forgot how easily I make friends and how well I adapt to new places. I forgot I was no amateur at moving across the country every two years due to my Dad being in Army. My parents have raised me as a much better child than I was coming across as today.

My Mom began knocking on the glass window, "You're going to be late and make a bad impression and you will regret that", this was my cue to get out of the car or else. I uneasily opened the door, still fearful to walk through the gym doors. I took my time as my Mom tried rushing me and when I walked into the gym every single girl in there stopped what she was doing and hustled over to greet me as the Coach called out my arrival. I must have heard thirty different names as each girl shook my hand and welcomed me to my new school, Blythewood High.

This was such an important event in my life because it was the one-day I went against everything I knew, I ended making the varsity team and I had nothing to worry about. Due to this day I will never again forget what I have always known about myself, I know I am an easy person to get along with, I give my 100% all the time, and I always adapt well to new places. I am not afraid to admit a weakness because I know I can grow stronger by doing so. This will affect my college experience tremendously because I will go into college head on and be the person I know I am capable of being versus being the person I was right before my volleyball tryouts.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Nov 15, 2012   #2
My Mom wanted me to go into the gym where volleyball tryouts were being held so I could be on the team, and she was highly determined I would do so.

I on the other hand, was being stubborn because I have played volleyball for many years and had decided to give up after I recently moved to South Carolina.

Usually I have no problem being "the new girl" because I have been the new girl in eight different states and eleven different schools, but today was different.

My Mom began knocking on the glass window, "You're going to be late and make a bad impression and you will regret that". ---Start a new sentence here.

This was such an important event in my life, because it was the one day I went against everything I knew, and I ended making the varsity team and I had nothing to worry about.

Due to this day I will never again forget what I have always known about myself, I know I am an easy person to get along with, I give my 100% all the time, and I always adapt well to new places.

Lol, I like your ending! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)


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