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FAMU's FUTURE FIRST GENERATION STUDENT....HOPEFULLY......ESSAY PROMPT 2


DaTru3Life 2 / 4 2  
Aug 9, 2013   #1
Describe an activity, interest, experience, or achievement in your life (this could be a book, a movie, or an activity or experience at work, home, or school) that has been particularly meaningful for you.

Note: This essay can't be more than 250 words.

I have been involved in many activities, had many interests, experienced many things, and had countless achievements in my life. The achievement that was most meaningful to me is writing and self-publishing my very first book. Being around different people with different life experiences inspired me to write a novel that students my age could relate to or be entertained by. My novel "The Life of Kai (Part 1)" was an achievement that separated other students from me. The novel helped me transfer my thoughts along with other people experiences and create this interesting and mind-blowing story. This achievement does not only bring happiness to myself but happiness to my family. Now my mom can say "My son has written a book!" and feel like she is one of the greatest parents in the world.
temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Aug 11, 2013   #2
The novel helped me transfer my thoughts along with other people experiences and create this interesting and mind-blowing story.

people's

This achievement does not only bring happiness to myself but happiness to my family.

do not repeat the wordhappiness ... use alternative words..

BEST OF LUCK!!
faheddarmoch 4 / 5  
Aug 14, 2013   #3
this a good attempt of writing, but the introduction distracted me a little bit and need to be more specific and oriented. The other thing in my opinion, if you could dive a little bit deeper in the detailed of your experience in writing the book

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good luck and hope always for the best
OP DaTru3Life 2 / 4 2  
Aug 23, 2013   #4
Updated:The achievement that was most meaningful to me was writing and self-publishing my very first book. Being around different people with different life experiences inspired me to write a novel that students my age could relate to or be entertained by. My novel "The Life of Kai (Part 1)" was an achievement that separated other students from me. The novel helped me transfer my thoughts along with other people's experiences and create this interesting and mind-blowing story. This story tells about a life of a teen that's faced with all of these situations that may ruin his life forever. He has to suffer the consequences of his actions and hope that he does not loose anyone close to him in the process. Will he survive or will he end up paying the price of his mistakes? These are the questions that you may ask yourself while reading this powerful story. The novel does not only bring happiness to me but joy to my family. Now my mother can say "My son has written a book!" and feel like she is one of the greatest parents in the world.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Sep 17, 2013   #5
Note: This essay can't be more than 250 words.

I have been involved in many activities, had many interests, experienced many things, and had countless achievements in my life

... I think you can remove this line since you have a word count constraint. This one really does not add much value for your response. Talk more about the book. Tell them the challenges you faced when writing it and what it means to you now. What sort of impact it made on your life....


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