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Expectations And Criterias; "How can you benefit from the education at AUC?"


Raynaila 1 / -  
Feb 15, 2016   #1
I am applying for AUC in Egypt. I was asked to write an essay, 300-500 words, on how I'll benefit from AUC. Is there any errors, grammatical wise or spelling wise? Do my points achieve what I am trying to say or write about? Thank you! A quick honest feedback would do me a great deal!

When asked to write an essay, of 300 words, about how I'll benefit from AUC, I was at loss of words. However, after the idea drowned on me, I was surprised to realize that there was so much more to write. This question put light on my goals and expectations; it set it for me.

As we grow up, at around fifteen or so, we hear about universities and majors. They all differ; language, country and educational level. It's such a wide range, but again as we grow up, we set expectations and wants. With that, the so wide range narrows up to fit a criteria made within time.

I moved from one school to another. I remember I loved the friendliness of teachers in my first school, but I thought professionalism was required at more points -like "helping" students during a quiz. Moreover, moving out of my second school taught me that reputation mattered. The school went from good to bad, and everyone talked. They never had a teacher for an entire month, and therefore, we barely understood a topic. Automatically, and before I knew it, those were three important things I looked for in any educational system; professionalism, reputation and a system. In my visits to a couple universities, I saw that those three things were not achieved within small actions or talk. However, AUC excelled.

Then came the bigger issue; majors. We had visits to GES from many universities around the world, and heard about uncountable majors. I asked many about Architectural Engineering and many of the replies were "We have Architecture, but not Architectural Engineering ." Or "It's not the best we have." But I loved to draw. I, as well, enjoy looking at a building and always think "How do they do that?". I knew I had to join both those things together, Architecture on its own wasn't enough. Narrowing went my range.

One day, people were asked to head to the library if they'd like to study in Egypt. Everyone knew Egypt had really good universities, and so we expected to find over 5 colleges in the library, with books and cards, just like the other colleges or so. However, I was surprised to find that we were allowed 45 minutes with just one college; AUC. Everyone was impressed. There was a presentation viewing a wide range of facilities, video and Q&A. I remember every single question of mine, about architectural engineering, being answered. It impressed me. It was systematic, educational, professional, with a more than qualified certificate and yet friendly. It became my plan.

It didn't stop there. Small actions talk more than big ones. AUC did that. It did it through simple actions like a well structured website, a proper reception for parents and students or even by the "Caravan " YouTube channel and Student Union. I enjoy extracurricular activities and making a difference. I thought I'd stop after school, as I was in SRC, but AUC made this possible too. AUC became organizational and democratic within limits as well. It ticked off things I didn't know I was looking for.

I'm hoping for a quick reply as the essay is due.
Hiddengrace 6 / 118 68  
Feb 15, 2016   #2
Hi Rana! It seems to me like you are writing more about why you have chosen AUC than anything else. That's not what the instructions ask. You're basically giving them a very flattering but meaningless essay about how you found put about AUC and why you like the school.

Your first two paragraphs are unnecessary. They are obvious to the people reading this essay. The point of the essay is to think about your goals- they already know this. You are wasting valuable space with this kind of information. Your last four paragraphs talk about how you found out about the school and why you've chosen it. again, this is not what the instructions are asking of you. It doesn't say anything about you other than a detailed list of what you look for in a university.

They want to know what your plans and goals are in this field, and how AUC can help you achieve them.This is what you should be writing about. I don't even know what your chosen field is or why you are interested in that field. What is your career goal? What is your plan of study? How will AUC help you succeed more than any other college? What do they offer that other schools don't? Think in terms of programs, opportunities, internships, professors, etc... not in terms of how organized they are or what their reputation is.

If you revise your essay I'd be happy to edit it for grammar, punctuation, etc... mistakes. Right now, however, I think you need to focus on ensuring that you are answering the prompt correctly and showing them that you have researched and thought about how AUC will benefit you.


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