University of Delaware Essays; me as a student, being treated unfairly, great accomplishment

University of Delaware Common App Essays

Writing Questions are Optional: Provide a short response, 200 words or fewer, to each of these prompts.

Q1. Anticipate what it will be like for you as a student at the University of Delaware. Both in and out of the classroom, where do you expect to feel most comfortable and where will you need to stretch?

When I was a freshman in high school I was not comfortable since there were sophomores and upperclassmen in my classes and clubs. In addition, I had my own schedule of classes and clubs that were much different than my friends. I felt out of place. Yet, I got more comfortable since people had the same interests as me. In engineering class, I loved when I got to talk about creating different designs and learn how to use Autocad Inventor with classmates and friends. Also, I enjoyed when I got to learn different games every year and how to design a robot with members of the Roxbury Robotics Club for competition. I not only made friends but prioritized myself so I would not get off track from academics and made sure I would be active in clubs and sports I liked. If I was a student at the University of Delaware I would be comfortable in my classes clubs where people have the same interest with me. Also, I would have to stretch when I have my own personal schedule and prioritize myself throughout college. I at first it would be hard but in time I would be more comfortable where I am.

Q2. Relate a personal experience in which you were denied an opportunity or treated unfairly. How did you resolve the situation? If that were to happen during your college experience, what would you do?

It was not a great feeling when I was not playing Friday night under the lights. I could not do anything but cheer. I was ready but not for varsity. That was my junior year of football. That coming offseason, I worked long hours in the weight room on bench and squat to show my strength. I also worked on my catching ability since I did not have the best hands on the team. That coming season I was one of the strongest backs in the lineup and showed my coaches that I was able to play varsity. During the 2016 season, I had a position where I started every game. I got to start on kickoff and play special teams on punt. I was also second string running back for the team. If I was denied an opportunity during my college experience, I would approach it the same way I did in football. I would work hard until I get the opportunity again or get what I want to accomplish. And if I fail, I would continue my hard work.

Q3. Describe an accomplishment that took a great deal of time and/or effort on your part. What motivated you to persevere when it got challenging? Who or what did you turn to for support, and how was that helpful?

Eagle Project
All boy scouts who continue till they are eighteen have a commitment. My commitment to remain a boy scout is that I wanted to be an Eagle Scout because I wanted to show how loved scouts. To become an Eagle Scout I had to work on a service project. My service project was to restore a food pantry for Trinity Lutheran Church. The pantry had to be restored since the church needed to collect more food for the homeless. This project took two years in which I planned, executed and reported the project. The hardest part was getting the project approved since all the paperwork took a long time. The Boy Scout council would return my paperwork to me because more details would need to be added to planning. This meant I had to take inventory of all the equipment I would use, safety guidelines for everyone who I would work with, and steps if the project got delayed. With the help of my troop members, friends and family got to finish this project within a week. I could not do it without them since they helped me be a leader and supported me the whole way with my commitment.

Self-Appraisal of your academic performance: Your academic performance. With Delaware's increasing selectivity, grades of "B" or above are expected. The Admissions Committee expects that you will take advantage of this question to explain any grade on your transcript that is unusually low or varies significantly from your usual performance in the section below.

Chemistry
Chemistry was my most important class junior year because it was my hardest class. My goal was to get an 85. Yet, I ended the year with a 78 average. I was not pleased. It did not reflect who I was and how I earned that grade. Yet, put the work in for Chemistry just like football. I tried my best every class. I asked for problems every day from my teacher, spent every night on Khan Academy and made detailed study guides for every chapter. Even though I did the work, I could not accomplish the right grade because I could not understand some concepts of chemistry. It was just hard for me, unlike other classes. Chemistry was tough but I have learned to not give up even though I did not get the grade I wanted. I had to accept a below par grade which was better than failing.

Hello Nick, the rules here on EF is one essay per thread. So I will just be providing a response for only your first essay. The others should be on seperate threads.

MY REVIEW: From the prompt they want you to write about university of Delaware weather you have visited the campus before or not so it's okay if you write with the information you learnt about UDelaware online.

It's a 200 essay word limit and you should use it wisely. The prompt is strictly all about UDelaware and you writing about your high school experience will really make the reviewer toss your essay in the trash. The prompt is not asking you to relate to a past experience but what you will like to do while in University of Delaware. So to produce a much better response, write about academics and extra curricular interests.

Towards the end of your essay, I was relieved you have finally decided to address the prompt but I just got dissapointed because " Also, I would have to stretch when I have my own personal schedule and prioritize myself throughout college. I at first it would be hard but in time I would be more comfortable where I am."

What you did was just to repeat the essay prompt.

Rewrite your essay and please don't write about your past experiences but what you expect to make you happy or interest you while studying at University of Delaware.

NB: THE REST OF YOUR ESSAYS SHOULD BE ON SEPERATE THREADS

Nick, are you familiar with the University of Delaware? I am sure that you have some sort of backgrounder on the extra curricular and academic offerings of the university since you had to complete an ample amount of research before you decided to apply for admission there. So you pretty much have an idea as to what kind of academic and extra curricular activities the university offers its students. It is based upon that information that you should write your essay. When you are asked where you think you will feel most comfortable in the university, the response could be anything from "In my dorm room" to "The school cafeteria". The reasons can be as varied as you want it to be, you could say something about a habit of eating while studying or just wanting to hang out with friends in the common areas of the dorm.

With regards to where you will need to stretch, this has more to do with the kind of extra curricular activities that you have in mind. Stretching in this instance has to do with your character development and community service or civic mindedness. How do you plan to become a better participant in the community? What interests do you have that you can stretch into a way that you can be of a positive influence on others? Think along those lines.

As Chizram pointed out, the problem with your essay is that you misunderstood the prompt. The response no longer has to do with your high school experience. It has everything to do with your forthcoming experience in college. There is no need to identify whether you have visited the campus already or not. In this case, such information is irrelevant. Your familiarity with the university can have come from anywhere and the reviewer won't care. What will matter to him, is that you actually know how you can enjoy your off academic hours at the university.