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The features of nursing profession. NURSING PROGRAM ADMISSION ESSAY


clr 2 / 3 2  
Jan 9, 2017   #1
The College of Nursing is committed to ensuring a positive, nurturing, and safe environment by respecting and affirming the diversity of individual's identities, backgrounds and points of view. How do you see yourself contributing to and supporting this commitment in the nursing profession? (PROMPT 350 word limit)

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Encouraging a working environment that supports differences allows for a greater chance of being able to embrace changes in all aspects of life. Possessing a fair and open mind toward others gives an advantage in many situations. Appreciating the diversity of individuals begins with yourself. Being aware of your own cultural beliefs and practices and recognizing that people from other cultures may not share them is an important concept for all people, especially health care professionals. As a nurse I will encounter individuals with unique identities, backgrounds, and points of view within professional and personal relationships. It will be important for me to practice from a holistic point of view; remaining compassionate and respectful of the differences that make people who they are. Adapting to their differences will ensure a sense of safety and promote mutual respect between health care professionals and patients. It is healthy and beneficial to learn from one another. By working as an aide in a nursing home I have gained lots of experience pertaining to diversity and I continue to learn new things during each shift. Asking others about their practices, etiquette, and knowledge is key to establishing effective assistance for patients and a successful working environment. Creating a judgment free setting encourages interactions for gaining new knowledge. Others' points of view bring new experiences and different perspectives that add value to your insights. Respecting all others and remaining sensitive and flexible when responding to them is necessary for establishing a positive and nurturing environment. Embracing the differences found in individuals' unique identities leads to harmony within all relationships.
zumbastrol - / 6 3  
Jan 9, 2017   #2
@clr

Chloe,
First, I would like to recommend you to visit the website or programs of this nursing college/ major. I want you to gauge all different opportunities this school provides apart from this nursing program. Then, it would be wise to instill those activities while writing this essay. For ex. a club could teach you to be respectful in individual identities or a community service would lead to nurture the lives of those in need.

Second, I can easily make corrections in your essay and believe me the ending is just a mess. Your essay suffered fluidity a lot because you didn't mixed complex and simple sentence together which in the end leads to bullet points rather a mercurial writing.

Third, your essay starts with Encouraging a working (...) health care professionals stand alone as four or five different sentences rather than an essay. Don't play with patience of your readers who constantly read your essay and find nothing. To improve the first sentences try to say all those things a bit concisely and tie it up with something like "your school/ program provides exactly this kind of environment in which I would explode( in a good way)."

Are you currently in this college and trying to transfer to a nursing major or you applying as a freshman? Also, mention the school name for which this essay is being written. I can assert you that you're a wonderful writer and with just a bit of direction your essay would be a bombshell! Plus, we can easily work in the conclusion to coat it the way admissions like it.
OP clr 2 / 3 2  
Jan 10, 2017   #3
@zumbastrol
Thank you so much for your feedback. I am currently not at the school I am applying to so I will be transferring to their nursing program as a junior. I agree that the ending is a mess. I had many ideas I wanted to include but was not sure how to arrange or express them. I would greatly appreciate more advice on how to improve fluidity and conciseness!
digaprasiska 10 / 27 6  
Jan 10, 2017   #4
Hello crl,...

I think your esay is really interesting but really general. You should make your article more specific especially at part As a nurse I will encounter individuals with ....

The more important part is your article really big. It will better to make it become 2 or 3 paragraph which each paragraph explain one topic from this question. The College of Nursing is committed to ...

Good Luck
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Jan 10, 2017   #5
Chloe, I apologize for what I am about to say because I am going to run in contradiction with the others who have already advised you. I feel that you have taken the wrong approach to the discussion. Since you are being asked about how you plan to embrace the diversity of your patients a nurse, it is imperative that you show the reviewer that you are already doing that in your current profession as a nursing aide at the home. Therefore, it will become clear to him that you already embody the traits that the university requires you impart to your patients in the future. So that will make you appear to be a stronger and more worthy candidate for admission to their university. You will be seen as a true asset to the nursing program because you can help influence the other student nurses to become like you in terms of learning how to embrace the cultural vitality of the patients that they will come across but whom you have already dealt with.


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