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Define the highlights of your most crucial accomplishments or tasks inputs.


Trouvaille 05 1 / 1  
Feb 22, 2017   #1
Describe the highlights of your most important achievements or contributions. These can also include your work experiences. If you have any outstanding talent (e.g. national sportsman/sportswoman, musical/artistic talent, run a successful business, outstanding community service), please include them as well. (Max : 300 words)

small things with great love



Looking back at the summer of 2009, the year I began middle school .I felt my life was in the incipient stage of chaos at a construction site .Yet the buzzing sound of students voices clashing in the hallways was mellifluous to my ears.As the days fleeted away attending classes and devouring new knowledge, I had an epiphany of the harsh reality around me that I had failed to perceive for many years . Our science teacher informed us one day that one of the janitors was expecting a child soon but she did not have the sufficient financial condition to get admitted in a hospital for the child birth. The immense risks endured by a women during a child birth in my country was a rising and common problem. Hence living in the horror of the situation in front of us was heart-rending . Our teacher came up with the solution to do fund raising through a bake sale at the school. As the school began to know about our cause, more volunteers joined. In the end the bake sale was an epic success.For me the most unforgettable moment was when we handed over her the funds, as she came up to our teacher and hugged her tightly with happy tears rolling down her face. Then she came to us and prayed for our wellness to God. Her joyous face made me feel that I had saved many lives yet I only contributed my time .A small gesture of kindness rippled a result of lifetime happiness . As Mother Teresa said, "not all of us can do great things, but we can do small things with great love".
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Feb 22, 2017   #2
Trouvaille, the approach to the response that you have taken is good, but does not really work to your benefit. The lack of influence upon your application comes from the fact that the contribution you decided to speak of is one that belongs to a group activity instead of a personal contribution or accomplishment. The reason that this has to be a personal act is because your nature as a person is being called into question. The reviewer wants to know the kind of person you are in terms of being considerate of others and how civic minded you are. Are you the kind of person who is civic minded and aware of his surroundings? How do you deal with the world around you? Academically speaking, are you someone who is focused on achieving the best results from your studies regardless of the cost? What kind of person are you when it comes to your ability to do notable things in your life? Are you proud of these personal achievements or are you a simple person who does not see it as a personal achievement but rather a contribution towards the betterment of a cause? These are some guide questions that can aid you in presenting a more relevant and impressive response to the prompt requirement.
OP Trouvaille 05 1 / 1  
Feb 22, 2017   #3
@Holt
Thank you for the review.
But can you suggest how can I make it more personal ?
Or the types of information I should add?
Any Add ins to the essay are welcome
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Feb 22, 2017   #4
As I mentioned in my previous response, your contribution should be something that has a personal meaning to you. The academic achievement needs to reflect a unique aspect of your personality as a student. Even a simple talent on your part can help to respond well to this essay. You just have to make sure that you portray a side of your personality that was not presented in your previous prompt requirements. Do you have any special recognition that came from your school? If you have an award, an honor, or an achievement that the school recognized you for, then discuss that in the essay. If you don't have any then think about your extra curricular activities, do you have any accomplishment there that can be discussed? For example, were you personally, able to achieve some sort of objective in the organization? Specifically, were there any projects that you took the lead on that resulted in a positive result for the organization? If so, then use that in the essay. There are many options for you to present, the only requirement is that you either led the group or you did this on your own. Otherwise, the shared experience does not help your application because you did not run point on any of the accomplishments.


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