Why Swarthmore?
Please write a brief statement telling us why you have decided to apply to Swarthmore in particular.
Ever since I joined high school, I have always given different answers to the career interest that I wish to pursue. I have interests ranging from Neuroscience, web design, computer engineering, aeronautical engineering to economics. I therefore wish to go to a college where I will have freedom to explore the multiple academic interests I have and also get the advice required from the professors and the students academic mentors. Swarthmore will offer me the platform to find where my career interest lies. I have also always desired to get into a college that not only greatly focuses on books but also gets me socially connected. Swarthmore will provide me an array of opportunities to venture into many clubs and organizations as the Black Cultural Center, where I will implement my desire to be socially active. The Phoenix or the Daily Gazette will be a great opportunity to express myself through writing and even drawing in the comics section. Coming from Africa, I will have a great chance to share my diverse experiences too. With people from diverse places, I will get to make new friends, learn more from them and also share my experiences with them. Being around great people with diverse interests is really exciting, since I will get the urge to learn from them too. Having fun is also a part of my interest in college. With the ever active athletic body in Swarthmore, I will have an opportunity to join varying sports and show my SWAT spirit by cheering for the Phoenix. This will help me grow both intellectually and socially. Through the study abroad programs and internship opportunities, I will further learn more and put whatever I have learnt into action.The trio-college consortium with Haverford and Bryn Mawr together with the cross registration with University of Pennsylvania will also offer me a chance to learn more through the many interactions with different people. Through the New York Cares, I will be able to give back to the the people who deserves it.
Hey watermark!
I think your essay is great! The ideas you have are kind of generic but the fact that you included information about the college and how you back up your ideas with additional experiences makes your essay great and great to read!
Just one note, you repeat Swarthmore a few times in the beginning. It's not a really biggy but maybe you can say "The School will provide me..." in the 5th sentence =). I just don't like repetitions and stuff in my opinion.
Good luck and good job =)!
Thanks.
I will make a change to the errors and also look into your essays also.
I think your essay is good. It gives you a chance to show who you are even more. You may want to look at the word choice...
Help with mine :)
I love that it touches on all of your experiences and interests. I read it three times and couldn't find any new mistakes. Congrats and good luck :)
Help with mine?
I couldn't fine any mistakes in yours! It flows really well! Good luck :)
Mind helping with mine?
Thanks everyone. I will also try to help you with your essays.
Good luck everyone.
