Intended Plan of study and the kind of job you plan to seek after return

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Professor Holt, thank you so much for your contribution to my post. Please I need urgent help with this essay before the closing date.
Thank you in advance.

Here is the Title of Proposed Research:

Skill Acquisition Centers As A Tool for Poverty Reduction and Rural Development in xzy

The scholarship question:
Describe your intended plan of study and the kind of job you plan to seek on return to xyz country.

My answer

The harsh effect of poverty and unemployment heightened by the present economic recession has become alarming in xyz. The growing poverty among rural dwellers has caused increased rural-urban drift, which has compounded the present loss of jobs in the cities due to the recession.

The problem of youth's unemployment and rural poverty has indeed become a national crisis. The xyz government both at the Federal, State and Local level has redoubled efforts through the Ministry of Labour and its agencies especially the National Directorate of Employment (NDE) to combat the menace of unemployment and poverty within the society. One of such commendable policy is the creation of the Y-Power programmes targeted to train Youths who are graduates in skill acquisitions scheme; and also emphasis being placed on Skill Acquisitions in rural communities to stem rural-urban drift.

In the stride to save the economy from recession and avoid looming depression, job creation has become the most important policy of the present political administration. The government through the Minister of labour has outlined her plans to create over five hundred thousand (500,000) jobs in zzx through skill acquisition. However, the emphasis and targets of the programme are towards the Youths who are graduates from tertiary institutions and rural dwellers.

As a xyz, who has seen the negative effect of unemployment ravaging the country, it has become imperative for me to join the government in the fight against rural poverty and graduate unemployment. And I believe that I can effectively contribute in the aspect of policy making through a postgraduate knowledge and practical skill in zxy (course).

It is a fact that a government striving for development should place emphasis on comparative study of the economy of other nations. And I believe that if I am considered for the scholarship position, it will provide an avenue for me to develop and consolidate my comparative administrative knowledge in the field of xxz (course) which I have acquired in my first degree to contribute to national development.

My objective during the course of my study will be to focus on administrative policies that have created jobs in the country of my study. The policies adopted and implemented that have halve rural poverty and unemployment in such country will be the knowledge I will strive to acquire in the pursuit of my degree. I will also strive to develop knowledge on how to advance and modernise existing skill acquisition centers and programmes in rural communities in order to encourage participation.

Upon the conclusion of my study, I will return to zxy to seek employment with the Ministry of Labour and its agency of National Directorate of Employment (NDE) in order to help develop policies which will focus on job creation through skill acquisition with in the country.

Finally, I believe the knowledge I will acquire from the study will enable me to design and implement job creation programmes that will promote employment, poverty reduction and wealth creation in xyz both for graduates and rural dwellers.

@knockout Here is my feedback:

I guess you have given too much emphasis on introduction. You can start with a short intoduction citing the conditions in XYZ. In the other paragraphs you can substantiate what job will you seek. You can use relevant pieces of information which you have mentioned in the beginning.

Your inended plan of study should come first and how you will use it to seek a job is the main idea. you have mentioned too little about it and that too in the end. To me this answer lacks coherence.

Hope this helps!

Knockout, when you write a Study Plan in relation to future job opportunities, you must first consider the national problems that your country is facing, the government policies and programs in place to help alleviate or solve the problem, then finally, the role that you can play through your relevant employment in bringing attention to the problem along with possible solutions you can enact. So the content of your essay should be as follows:

1. Thesis Statement - Focus on the national problem, which in this case is Poverty. Explain the related government policies and programs that relate to a possible solution to the problem. Explain the field of work that you are hoping to get into with an overview of how you hope to solve the problem.

2. Study Plan - What masters degree did you decide to enroll in? Explain how that relates to your idea of helping to alleviate the poverty problem in your country. Indicate why the university you have chosen has specific benefits towards the fulfillment of your plan.

3. Solution overview - Explain the relevance of the skill acquisition center to your proposed solution. Relate the solution to the importance of your study plan. Make sure that the importance of your study plan is reiterated.

4. Job Plan - Discuss how your choice of job will directly assist you in implementing your probable solutions. Indicate the length of time that you will probably need before you get the opportunity to build your skills acquisition center.

5. Conclusion - Summarize the paper with the repetition that you look forward to attending the university under the masters program and that you are excited about seeing your plans come to life with their help.