How did you choose Master of Agricultural Sciences The University of Queensland?

benefits of bacteria and molds

Graduating from Biology of Airlangga University, Indonesia, with field of Microbiology had given me ground understanding about the benefits of bacteria and molds, specifically as nematodes antagonistic agents. One of my research experiences during my undergraduate that was funded by Directorate General of Higher Education of Indonesia (DIKTI) entitled "Screening and Bio-assay of Mold Isolates from East Java as Controller Agents of Root Knot Nematodes (Meloydogine spp.)" enlightened me that; nematodes are likely to become a huge challenge facing Indonesian farmers in the production of agricultural crops; soil microorganisms have high potentials to tackle the challenge vary from ecological, molecular and genetic approaches. However, there is still not many further research in Indonesia related to it. In other hand, farmers tend to use chemical nematicide which is harmful for human's health, environment and micro fauna that are important for sustainable farming. Hence, I am applying for a master's program of Agricultural Sciences and plan to take research topic about "microbial roles in suppressing nematodes parasitism on agricultural crops" as an effort to protect agricultural crop with eco-friendly and sustainable methods. I am strongly interested to deepen my knowledge and skill in agricultural microbiology with ecological and genetic approaches. The output would be an advanced application of bio-nematicide to replace chemical nematicide. The University of Queensland and The University of Western Australia offer a Master of Agricultural Sciences program with relevant courses like Plant-Microbe and Insect Interactions, Plant Protection, Plant Pathology and Molecular Diagnostics in Plant Protection as well as prospective research topics provided by experienced experts as part of the program that are not available in other Australian universities. In addition, with my current profession as a microbiologist, I believe that I can engage myself into the program very well.

Agus, in my opinion, you will need to write a new response to the prompt because the discussion that you are presenting does not really represent the reasons why you chose to attend The University of Queensland. You should be discussing your current profession and why you feel that you need to upgrade your knowledge in line with the performance of your work tasks. From there, you have to delve into a deeper discussion about how you chose the university and what specific (non generic) reasons led you to choose this university. This prompt has nothing to do with your college days anymore. Focus on your profession instead. Unless, you don't have any and are one of those students who wants to go directly into an MS course? In which case, you will have a hard time justifying your reasons for choosing the university in relation to a career path.

Dear Holt,

Thank you so much for the feedback. I'd like to let you know that you are right. This essay has only a slight relevance with my current profession. In fact, I wanted to continue what I did in my college so I wrote about what I did back then. I am currently working as a microbiologist in a pharmaceutical manufacturer which is basically not related to my previous research experience nor my future plan. That's why I did not talk much about my current occupation.

@trayaa91
I'm applying to AAS too. Below are few comments on the current version of your essay:
-it is obvious one, but you should separate your essay into paragraphs;
-On the other hand, farmers...
I think the part you stated your reason for choice of university is good.
Good luck with your application.