MY CONTRIBUTION FOR MY COUNTRY - Career Plan Question for Chevening

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I have finished drafting my essay for career plan question of Chevening. Please help me to proof-reading, check, and correct, also I am waiting for your constructive feedback, comment and what so ever to make it better.

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Chevening is looking for individuals who have a clear post-study career plan. Please outline your immediate plans upon returning home and your longer term career goals. You may wish to consider how these relate to what the UK government is doing in your country. (minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)

My goal after Chevening

Indonesia, which has three-quarter of marine territory, is establishing bilateral cooperation with UK in the field of maritime. It will develop coastal area through simultaneous construction of harbors, fish storage buildings, and water supply infrastructure to stimulate economic development by maximizing coastal potentials as well as creating jobs. One program that has been doing by MPWH is conducting specific water supply system for coastal area with reverse osmosis (RO). RO still becomes one and only water supply option for coastal area and small islands for now because PDAMs cannot deliver water to outer area of the regency. However, the management of RO is poor that leads to clean water deficiency. Hence, reliable and sustainable water management becomes a substantial part of strategic area development of Indonesia.

When I have finished my master study and returned to Indonesia, I am thinking of playing a role in helping government to make standard number of water supplied that can meet all sectors need and be adapted of population and area development escalation. I will do this by starting work in environmental companies, specifically in environmental management consultant firms for water. The knowledge and skills I attained from MSc in Water Management at UK would be the key factor to deal with problems and challenges regarding to manage water sustainably yet credibly. Furthermore, I could have comprehensive understanding on tackling water management issues by applying modeling analysis to simulate quantity of clean water for coastal, urban and agriculture area through various government projects. The sustainable water management is necessary for long lasting water infrastructure in Indonesia.

My other immediate plan is being a researcher on Environment and Maritime field of research at Indonesian Institute of Research (LIPI), a non-ministerial government research institution. The amount and quality of research are the main factors of national development. Through research, I can improve the quality of raw water that used to clean and drinking water and collaborate with multi-disciplined researchers to make innovation for better water sector development of Indonesia. In addition, it will enhance research and innovation as Indonesia and UK have solid partnership in the same field that will be profitable aspect for both countries.

Combining these two experiences working on private and government sector, I'm having long term goal to establish water control center in my hometown, Bali, which will function to control and manage water flow entire province. This center also will be used to be one of best practices on managing water for other provinces or regencies. It would motivate other governors managing their water resources through workshops and trainings from national and international experts, thus finally make sustainable water management all over Indonesia. I also propose to tighten Indonesia-UK partnership through this human resource capacity building. I strongly believe taking master degree in UK through Chevening would provide me with knowledge, skills, experiences and network relation I needed that could embark my future careers, even further contribute to better future of my beloved country.

Ni, the one thing that Chevening scholars prides itself in is having the network to help you achieve your post study plans. Since you will be going back to Indonesia after your complete your studies, you should create an essay that will direct the reviewer towards the fact that you plan to utilize the network that you will have created as a student by getting a job at one of the companies or NGO's or government organizations that have a direct tie-up with a specific project being undertaken by the UK in your country. You have presented a general idea of how you plan to work in the industry of water care but not really in direct relation to a UK based project. Before you continue to use this essay, I need you to do some background research on the projects and affiliations that the UK has with regards to the waterworks projects in your country. Pick the project that you feel you are best suited for after you complete this course and then chart a career path that will have you directly working in this UK backed project or organization. Mention that you hope to use your Chevening network that you created during your studies to help you pursue your short and long term career goals. Specifically, in seeking employment in a related field, within a related UK based organization or company. That way, you create the idea that your long term career goals will always involve Chevening and the UK in one way or another.