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Jealousy -- a bad human habit!


stranger4ever 8 / 29  
Apr 27, 2010   #1
Jealousy Essay

Have anyone ever wondered why there is too much jealousy in this world? I believe that it is a bad human habit! But, what is jealousy? Jealousy is an emotion and typically refers to negative thoughts and feelings of insecurity, fear, and anxiety over an anticipated loss of something that the person values. Such as relationships, friendships, or love.

Jealousy is considered an advanced emotion, it is consisted of three basic emotions. Which are anger ,sadness ,and disgust. There are many kinds of jealousy. One of these kinds ,and the worst, is teen jealousy. And this a fact! And it is really complicated. Not that I have been through it, but that's why they invented TV, right? To be able to see life in different ways and different point of views. Even I read about jealousy in newspapers and magazines. An example of teenage jealousy, there is a new girl in high school who is smart ,beautiful, and loves helping others. We all know that crap thing about the homecoming queen. The other girls will be jealous because they now that all of the students will vote for her so they plan doing something bad to her...so the story will end with at least one of both parties hurt and broke, but it probably be the mean girls. William Penn once said: but a torment to themselves. Another type of jealousy is friendship, which breaks the each friends heart and leaves an ugly scar that would never get cured. For example, in Julius Caesar '' a play by William Shakespeare'' Cassius and Brutus were best friends, and Caesar was going to be crowned a king. But Cassius was jealous , so he played with Brutus mind and convinced him that he would be a better king. So the two loyal friends turned to jealous enemies and killed him. As we are busy being jealous, others are planning fiery plans about how to destroy us. A wise man once said that ' Envy is a waste of time'. And that's true.

I blame jealousy for everything bad that have ever happened during the past two thousand and ten years. From war to loyalty to common sense. As Elizabeth Bowen once said' Jealousy is no more than feeling alone against smiling enemies'. The problem is that the enemies are no more smiling, their smile turned into loud annoying, horrible giggles in our faces. Who knows what they will be able to do as we remain in jealousy.

thanks 4 reading
shalini singh 14 / 23  
Apr 27, 2010   #2
negative thought doesn't make sense here because you don't think of getting harmed by that person you are jealous of,instead you feel insecured that you will lag behind in the fields you consider them as a compititer.

And this a fact! which is really complicated

At few places expression and sentence formation is the problem,Its not clear what you are trying to say.Paragraph are not properly formed
Phoebe Su 5 / 15  
Apr 27, 2010   #3
I suggest you have 3 points for your essay. 1 paragraph 1 point.

- Point
- Example
- Elaboration

It will make your essay more organised and convincing.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 29, 2010   #4
Such as relationships, friendships, or love.

This sentence has no subject. It is incomplete. do it this way:
Jealousy is an emotion and typically refers to negative thoughts and feelings of insecurity, fear, and anxiety over an anticipated loss of something that the person values -- such as relationships, friendships, or love.

That way, it is all one sentence.
However, I don't think it is an accurate definition of jealousy! Jealousy can occur without a threat of loss.

Here is a run on sentence:
Jealousy is considered an advanced emotion, it is consisted of three basic emotions.
Do this instead:
Jealousy is considered an advanced emotion, because it is consisted of three basic emotions.

:-)
OP stranger4ever 8 / 29  
May 2, 2010   #5
Thanks for commenting, though I wished, if there was any good comments!
alswn95 11 / 28  
May 2, 2010   #6
I've noticed that you use contractions. Do not use it in a formal essay.

e.g. don't
It should be written as do not.
vivien_wang 9 / 31  
May 3, 2010   #7
though I wished, if there was any good comments!

I think you provide us a very good topic. It's very thought-provoking. Well, maybe you are too young to understand jealousy. It's not necessarily all bad. I would like to say, under many circumstances, jealousy stems from ---- anger? no, anger is the father of hatred, resentment ---- love. I mean, sometimes jealousy can help us to realize whether we care about someone, or love someone. It's not wrong to be jealous. The thing is, it is important to learn how to keep it in good control. :)


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