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People should listen to others criticism and think if it's to worth accept it


EricGreen 1 / 2  
Aug 14, 2011   #1
Please pick out any mistake I have made. And revise this article, Thanks a lot.

Topic:Do you agree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept others' criticism cannot succeed.

Some people argue that those who do not accept other's criticism cannot succeed because such people would not learn from the criticism and they are more easily to satisfy what they have achieved. However, as far as I concerned, I totally agree that people are supposed to accept other's suggestions or criticism. It is also critical for us to judge whether such advices or criticism are suitable for ourselves or not and to keep learning from the criticism.

In many cases where a team is working together and every team member has his/her own part, every member's job is vital to the whole project. When there are some new employees who are not very familiar to the project, it is easy to find that they are more likely to make some mistakes. Many members who are more experienced would give some suggestions and even criticism to new members. It is no doubt that these suggestions and criticism are beneficial to the whole project, so members are supposed to accept these suggestions and think about how to avoid such mistakes happening again. Moreover, although the advices are not required to be remembered or recorded on the notebook, it is necessary for members who want to be successful to fully accept such advices or criticism and even restore them in the deep heart.

However, it is not say that every suggestion or criticism is right for all the time. It is absolutely true that some advices are totally wrong and we are supposed to keep our own choices and not to change due to the advices. J.K.Rowling is the best example to illustrate such a point. J.K.Rowling, who wrote the famous book-Harry Potter, her first book had been rejected 12 times by the press for that they think this kind of book which tells about magic world would not be attractive to people. If J.K has accepted this criticism and gave up for keeping on writing Harry Potter, it would be a loss for all the people.

In a nutshell, people are supposed to listen to other's criticism and at the same time think about whether it is worth to accept it. The success belongs to those who accept the right criticism with the whole heart .
ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Aug 14, 2011   #2
whether such advices or criticism IS suitable

In many cases where a team is working together and every team member has his/her own partrole

Moreover, although the advices are not required (advice is an uncountable noun

However, it is not say thatIt could not be said that every suggestion

Eric, your example about Harry Potter's author is so logical and reasonable, nice...

You are a good writer, Good luck

Mahsa,
OP EricGreen 1 / 2  
Aug 14, 2011   #3
Thank U, Mahsa.
I have another questions about this eassy...
First is this essay too short to make my opinion clearly elaborated.
And how about the logical points about this topic, are the points unreasonable or a little strange for this topic.
greenfish16 1 / 12  
Aug 14, 2011   #4
the essay is okay but can still be improved. your point on the Harry Potter story is very good. but the points in support of the criticism part is not well explained and its shallow at best.

"Some people argue that those who do
not accept other 's criticism cannot
succeed because such people would
not learn from the criticism and they
are more easily to satisfy what they
have achieved. "However ", as far as I
concerned, I totally agree"==> I don't think you should use however to begin the second statement, since, you are simply agreeing or reinforcing the first statement. 'however' should be uses when you are contrasting a statement.

and finally, you need to improve your conclusion. maybe something like this...

"In conclusion, although constructive criticism can most times be beneficial, one has to objectively and critically examine criticisms before accepting or rejecting them. Criticisms albeit constructive ones can result in improvement ans personal.development and may ultimately lead to success."

mine may be worse. am just trying to say that yours can be better.
cheers
OP EricGreen 1 / 2  
Aug 14, 2011   #5
Thanks a lot, Jerry.


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