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TOEFL ESSAY ; Course grades are based on exams or based more on class participation?


muge 5 / 12  
Sep 27, 2011   #1
This is a Longman Essay Topic.

Hi everyone!! I am preparing for the toefl ibt. I am not good at writing.. either in my own language. I get maximum 20 point from writing sections and I can't impove it. Could you please check my essay and tell your opinions about it?

Thank you very much

Every univesity have various policies about grading their students. Do you think should course grades are based solely on exams or as in other classes grades based more on class participation? Different people give different responses to this question depending on their own characteristics, emotional concerns, personal experiences and even educational backgrounds. However, when it comes to me, I strongly believe that course grades should based more on class participations. There are several reasons for my perspective as follow in the next paragraphs.

The first and foremost reason is that class participation provides students to get wider informations about their profficiency. Since professors not only explain informations existed in the book, but also share their own experiences about their profficiency. Comparing to the students who are not joining to the classes, other student have wider knowledge. Everything is written on the books and also internet provide everykind of information. But in this case why do we need universities? Every student can reach these informations. But students joining the classes are more advantegous. Besides, getting informations existed in books, they can benefit from the professors knowledge obtained from different sources and experiences.

Just as the English proverb goes, , ''there are two sides to every coin''. There are some people who take the opposite view and say that exam results show everything and are enough to demonstrate the students situation.

In the second place, class participation gives some clues about students situation to the professors. Educaters can notice how the student progress and how much differ from other students. Genarally proffesors give some dueties to the students to observe their behaviours and knowledges about the topic. For instance, professors demand to work together in the class from the students to see how they organize or demand to discuss a particular topic with each other. In this case, the professor have an idea about each student.

Last but not least, exam results can measure only the information existing in the books. In addition, students may not show their ability in the exams. They have to have more chances to show their abilities and successes. There are students failing in exams but successing in the practice. And in the real life practice is much more important then the pure knowledge.

In conlusion, course grades should'nt based solely on exams. For t he good education system class participation is very essential. Students performance at classes, professors observations and proffersors explanations are also crucial things which every student has to experience in their educational life.
bahareh 18 / 50  
Sep 27, 2011   #2
Hi Muge;
I think your essay's format needs to get improvement, so if you want to take both sides of this essay and compare or contrast them, you should use trasitional words like; however, although , though,.... .

for example , you need to start the third paragraph with transitional words(however, although,...); and then you can combine two paragraph together like;
HOWEVER, . there are some people who take the opposite view and say that exam results show everything and are enough to demonstrate the students situation; just as the English proverb SAYS, , ''there are two sides to every coin''. Class participation gives some clues about students situation to the professors. Educaters can notice how the student progress and how much differ from other students. Genarally proffesors give some dueties to the students to observe their behaviours and knowledges about the topic. For instance, professors demand to work together in the class from the students to see how they organize or demand to discuss a particular topic with each other. In this case, the professor have an idea about each student.

I also found some grammatical errors that you should conceren about them.
Good luck
Bahareh
ziya 2 / 3  
Sep 28, 2011   #3
Every university HAS various policies about grading their students.

Do you think course grades should...

wider informations (information is uncountable)

I think you were hurrying when you wrote. Because you have some spelling mistakes.

Please, keep on commenting about my threads.
monamona 7 / 10  
Sep 28, 2011   #4
Hi
Your essay is quite much better than me . I am preparing for TOEFL IBT ,too. As my master told me the number of words should be between 150 to 200 and if we wright more than these number, the rest of our essay will be cut.
basawang 10 / 76  
Sep 28, 2011   #5
monamona,

There are No word number limits in Toefl writing task.

ETS will not cut our essays.

Nevertheless, time management is important.

We only have 30 minutes to write an essay.
OP muge 5 / 12  
Sep 29, 2011   #6
monamona

In the independent essay we should write at least 300 words.
In my opinion we should write 350 words.
I get 20 point before from the writing section of ibt.
Now I am trying to improve it. I need 23 24
But I do not know how can I make this..

Good luck


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