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Parents have numerous influences to teach us what to do


axn1118 2 / 3  
Jul 7, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No matter how people discuss the statement that parents are the best teachers, there would be some arguments agree with it, while others do not. By virtue of personal experience, social phenomena and several research between parents and children, I prefer to agree with the statement. The most important reason and specific examples will be described below.

Firstly, parents effect our behavior. As we are unmature and young, parents always show us which way to go. For example, they teach us how to speak, grab our hands and teach us to walk. Also, they take care of us until we can do things alone, which we simutaneously learn from them. With parents' taught, we turn ourselves into independent people.

Secodly, parents share their lives with us connectively. On one hand, from children to adult, we grow up with parents by our sides. For instance, mostly, we see parents in our first sight. On the other hand, people who live together share similar experiences. We automatically become more and more alike to people who live with us for a long period, such as parents.

Last bu not least, parents are powerful to children. When we are young and unmature, we listen to parents. When we become teenagers, we are legally protected and controlled by our parents. When we grow up, we respect our parents for their giveness and careness. As the result, the advices from parents are more important than any other person.

Consequently, when it comes to agree or disagree with the statement that parents are the best teachers, the above arguements are considerable and influentable. Either people are willing to be effected by parents or not, parents still have numerous influences to teach us what to do. Therefore, I agree with the statement that patents are the best teachers.
dido272000 7 / 18 1  
Jul 7, 2013   #2
is it for IELTS?
No matter how people discuss the statement that parents are the best teachers, there would be some arguments agree with it, while others do not.

i think you should rearrange your first sentence to make it more impressive like: There have been debatable discussions on whether parents are the best teachers for their children.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jul 7, 2013   #3
.... I am with dido ... yes, you better start with introducing the statement to the reader. Then move on to expressing your own views.

Firstly, parents effect our behavior.

... effect? .... "influence" sounds better.

unmature

... this is wrong ... immature is the opposite of mature.

Also, they take care of us until we can do things alone

... until we can do things on our own / until we can take care of ourselves

which we simutaneously learn from them

.... I don't get what you try to mean by "simutaneously" ... anyway , there is no such word :(
temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Jul 7, 2013   #4
parents effect our behavior.

affect

As we are un mature and young

immature

With parents' taught , we turn ourselves into independent people.

teachings

we respect our parents for their giveness and careness .

these words are wrong..

parents are powerful to children

than..
you need to improve your sentence formation BEST OF LUCK!!
OP axn1118 2 / 3  
Jul 9, 2013   #5
Thank you very much. I really appreciate these replies.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 9, 2013   #6
Secon dly, parents share their lives with us connectivelycontinuously .

...you can present this idea more strongly;
Secondly, the parents do not leave us when we are in trouble and they are prepared to share everything they possess with children in hope of making a better future for children.

However, the rest of the stuff you've written in the paragraph have no relevance to what you say above :(
In your body paragraphs, you need to come up with valid reasons that can justify your position on the argument. Then you should back them up with good examples. That's is a requirement for this task.


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