Happiness is a hard -to-define word, especially when it comes to the factors that create this term. One of those things is money. Many people consider it a pragmatic part, however, who can ensure the happiness of human beings without money?
First, 'No money' means 'pressure'. The poor often suffer from stress in their struggle with life than the others. They have to pay for things needed for standard life: tax, insurance, houses or even food with a question on their mind: 'What will I eat tomorrow?'. Besides, if they have adolescence in family, these children will perceive another somber scene. There are many statistics done showing that studying among rich students, these pitiful teenagers are likely to escape from peers, and live on their self-isolated-own. Little by little, they will be under the impression that they are completely unimportant, and hide in their cover regardless of outside society.
Moreover, not only haunted in mental systems, people lacking of money are forced to go down with diseases. Given that they are even reluctant to spend money buying things they need, they have little exposure to nutritional food. Besides, most of the poor's houses do not meet the requirement of a good living condition. They tend to be dank, dirty, and full of viruses which could be an ideal for diseases to outbreak. As a result, the chances are that the poor are the first to be infected. Under the luxury of treatment of hospitals, they become much poorer, especially if that disease turns to be terminal such cancers. Spending more money, getting less healthy, happiness is impossible to be born in minds.
In conclusion, money partly contributes to the happiness of our life. I believe without money, happiness merely means 'happy-less'.
This conclusion is a bit short. You should summarize the points you have mentioned above in order to gain the best score.
Next time, remember to include the type of tasks you are doing, for example: IELTS, TOEFL, SAT... so that it is easier for us to assess your writings.
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the complete prompt must be written to help us when we review your essay. I just guess this task is agree-disagree based on your introduction paragraph.
Happiness is a hard -to-define word, especially when it comes to the factors that create this term. One of those things is money. Many people consider it a pragmatic part, however, who can ensure the happiness of human beings without money?
You can structure your introduction paragraph followed this approach; 1. Hook : here you can write a sentence which catches reader attention. 2. Background : you should paraphrase the question. 3. Thesis statement : here you can state your view as general which will be explained in the body paragraphs.
Moreover, in the task of agree-disagree, standing at both views can help you to reach high score.
