Whether different levels of IQ decide students to have access to different education or not has a matter of debate.We can outlineThis essay will discuss some benefits and drawbacks of this controversy.
Well you should provide a better hook for your intro, rather than just a general statement (according to Dumi the moderator here), therefore your readers might feel more attracted.
It is important to realize that those who are of high intelligence and gifted in studying require more challenging curriculum,because they have better comprehension ,learning and adaptive ability. (you should write a topic sentence rather than go directly into your idea. It is strictly required in IELTS writing) This allows students to study at a pace that matches their own ability,regardless of the negative peer pressure. Meanwhile,despite of separating students by ability,intelligent students are more likely to communicate and interact with their peers,and establish common goals.
On the other hand,some people argue that the downsides of placing intelligent students in separate classes are obvious.Selecting students according to their IQ levels are not equal to these students in low-level classes,whichwho may lack confidence or loseand interests in their study.In addition,more experienced and qualified teachers are assigned to high-level classes,embodying the inequalities in learning opportunities.
Considering these factors,the good way to solve this dilemma is that placing intelligent students in regular classes,whileprovided that they are providedsupplied with more advanced s elective courses.It is possible that different IQ levels students will achieve their potential(why? You should not state anything that you haven't mentioned in your body paragraph) .
Well, your essay is not yet specific because you haven't provided many examples or evidence, which should be improved :D
By the way, your vocabulary should also be improved. And remember to state your opinion clearly in the intro, and then in the end because, with this essay, you haven't stated your opinion yet. You stated a solution, but the prompt didn't ask you to, instead, it asks you YOUR OPINION ON WHETHER YOU SHOULD PUT THEM IN DIFFERENT CLASSES OR SAME ONES! Stay alert or you will lose marks in the section: Task response in IELTS :)