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IELTS: Intelligent students should be educated separately. Do the benefits outweigh the problems?


Summer_J 1 / -  
Aug 3, 2014   #1
Some people argue that teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them. Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both views and how do you think about it?

Whether different levels of IQ decide students to have access to different education or not has a matter of debate.We can outline some benefits and drawbacks of this controversy.

It is important to realize that those who are of high intelligence and gifted in studying require more challenging curriculum,because they have better comprehension ,learning and adaptive ability.This allows students to study at a pace that matches their own ability,regardless of the negative peer pressure. Meanwhile,despite of separating students by ability,intelligent students are more likely to communicate and interact with their peers,and establish common goals.

On the other hand,some people argue that the downsides of placing intelligent students in separate classes are obvious.Selecting students according to their IQ levels are not equal to these students in low-level classes,which may lack confidence or lose interests in their study.In addition,more experienced and qualified teachers are assigned to high-level classes,embodying the inequalities in learning opportunities.

Considering these factors,the good way to solve this dilemma is that placing intelligent students in regular classes,while they are provided more advanced elective courses.It is possible that different IQ levels students will achieve their potential.
SalMon 27 / 113 10  
Aug 3, 2014   #2
Whether different levels of IQ decide students to have access to different education or not has a matter of debate.We can outlineThis essay will discuss some benefits and drawbacks of this controversy.

Well you should provide a better hook for your intro, rather than just a general statement (according to Dumi the moderator here), therefore your readers might feel more attracted.

It is important to realize that those who are of high intelligence and gifted in studying require more challenging curriculum,because they have better comprehension ,learning and adaptive ability. (you should write a topic sentence rather than go directly into your idea. It is strictly required in IELTS writing) This allows students to study at a pace that matches their own ability,regardless of the negative peer pressure. Meanwhile,despite of separating students by ability,intelligent students are more likely to communicate and interact with their peers,and establish common goals.

On the other hand,some people argue that the downsides of placing intelligent students in separate classes are obvious.Selecting students according to their IQ levels are not equal to these students in low-level classes,whichwho may lack confidence or loseand interests in their study.In addition,more experienced and qualified teachers are assigned to high-level classes,embodying the inequalities in learning opportunities.

Considering these factors,the good way to solve this dilemma is that placing intelligent students in regular classes,whileprovided that they are providedsupplied with more advanced s elective courses.It is possible that different IQ levels students will achieve their potential(why? You should not state anything that you haven't mentioned in your body paragraph) .

Well, your essay is not yet specific because you haven't provided many examples or evidence, which should be improved :D
By the way, your vocabulary should also be improved. And remember to state your opinion clearly in the intro, and then in the end because, with this essay, you haven't stated your opinion yet. You stated a solution, but the prompt didn't ask you to, instead, it asks you YOUR OPINION ON WHETHER YOU SHOULD PUT THEM IN DIFFERENT CLASSES OR SAME ONES! Stay alert or you will lose marks in the section: Task response in IELTS :)
Jwala 3 / 8 3  
Aug 3, 2014   #3
Introduction - first line is really attracting. But second line should talk about your opinion as the essay question is a discussion+opinion type
Para 1 - should describe the advantages of high IQ students in separate class. But 3rd line is not align with this topic sentence. It should be good if you provide a short topic sentence. Paras should be combination of simple, complex and compound sentences. Your statements are mostly lengthy.

Para 2 - 'Selecting students according to their IQ levels are not equal to these students in low-level classes' is confusing. how come both can be equal? 'embodying' - can use another equivalent word.

Conclusion - No new ideas here

Overall, I doubt the essay has reached 250 word count. You need to add few examples to reach there.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Aug 5, 2014   #4
This introductory paragraph is too simple. You need some major changes. For this prompt, let's give a try;

Some people argue that teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them.

More attention should be paid to how to teach elementary school children . While some people argue that children should be placed together into a class, others claim that schoolchildren should be categorised into ability classes. These two ideas bring many pros and cons. Therefore, I believe that schools should divide the students according to their levels of IQ.


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