Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at the best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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Fact:Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine.Opinion:at the best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous.Task:To what extent do you agree with this statement?2. Always focus on the details in the question and consider topic restrictions
Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine . However, at the best these methods are ineffective , and at worst they may be dangerous3. Then, simply rephrase the question
Is the use of this medicine ineffective and dangerous?If the answer gently says "YES", then explain "WHY", or vice versa. For this part, I recommend to look at both sides if possible. If you speak in favour of this issue, then findings from the journal Pain Medicine, that some older people tend to use alternative more frequently so as to cure chronic illness, can be used to support your argument. However, more than 2% older population in the USA reported to cause spontaneous bleeding after consuming Gingko biloba are strongly against the former one.Presently, alternative forms of medicine are the most popular in the rural area and cities. Usually ,a person who gives alternative help (uncommon phrase. This mislead readers about the content) will give inexpensive tax for their patients, (run-on sentences. Stop here) it is one of the wayways for them to make other people interesting with their action (this vague idea) . But,(However, ) sometimes the medical patient ( what do you mean by this? do you mean the patient's medical history? or what? Please check it)do not thinking with its risk ( unclear idea) . EventhoughEven though not all alternative medicals make dangerous risks for the patient.
This introductory statement failed to represent the background information and thesis. If you could, then redo it.
In my view, people who live in the villages or cities they will choose the alternative medical rather than going to the doctor. It is because doctor's tax will be more expensive than alternative treatment.This paragrapgh, will explain about some of bad alternative treatments and dangerous risks for the patient (This adds no value. Omit it) . First of all, people who have disease such as stroke or blind will choose going to resource medication. (watch your verb use and syntax) They will call a person in an alternative medical place "the doctor" , doctor (use this phrase: medicine man/ witch-doctor, to describe the idea) will give some therapies with traditional medicine ,where some of them do not know about specification of the disease. And they do not know what are the effect for long term. Some of them are illegal places, they will take much profit from their patient. In fact, they do not give expensive price for their treatment, but when per day they get 100 patients , they will get much money from customer. It is all about education from the patient and their family to choose which one is right and wrong way.
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On the other hand, people who have good education and some knowledge about healthy range will choose the right way to keep their body health. For example for stroke or blind people, they will choose going to the doctor to get some operate or going to the other alternative such as physiotherapy, chemotherapy or acupuncture. By this way, the therapist are people who understand specifically about their disesase ( spelling problem) because they learnt before in the school and have good competency on their job. And ( And can't be put in the first sentence.) the patient must not to be afraid with the dangerous risk of the therapy because they can handle and was thought before giving therapy.
It's not about why educated people prefer going to medicine man, but why alternative medicine is dangerous. You are off-topic.
To conclude, people have to choose the right way to get health for their body. Eventhough ( spelling problem) Write: Even though , the tax is expensive , that is ok (this sounds informal speech) if they will not get more dangerous risk for long term in the future, so people can enjoy the life until die.
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