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TED "Got a meeting? Take a walk by Nilofer Merchant"


Risty01 10 / 16 1  
Aug 15, 2016   #1
Most of people spend lots of time for sitting ever day in their office to do their jobs. Sitting seems to be like a normal habit because all people do the same thing. However, it drives some diseases such as breast cancer and colon cancer. Nilofer Merchant has considered about how to tackle such difficulties and she tried to make a movement known as "meeting with taking a walk". The idea started from someone who invited her to a meeting, but her friend just said, "I have to walk my dogs tomorrow. Could you come then?". This conversation has changed her mind, and she asked people to go on a walking meeting, to the tune of 20 to 30 miles a week. Besides, she has learned an essential thing to solve problems such as: getting out of the box will lead to out-of-the-box thinking.
JuanSebastianR 23 / 63 37  
Aug 15, 2016   #2
Hi Risty,

I hope this finds you well. Your essay is very interesting, and I love the idea of the walk meetings to promote movement.

First of all, does this assignment have a prompt? Please make sure you include a prompt or what you would like us to do, so we can edit the essay according to your needs.

... Most of people spend lots oftheir time for sitting ever day in their office to do their jobs., and it has become a normal habit for most.Sitting seems to be like a normal habit because all people do the same thing. ...

... However, it drives somepeople who sit for long ...

... are prone to
diseases such as breast ...

... Nilofer Merchant has considered about how to tackle such difficultiesthis habit;and she tried toimplementedmake a movement known as "meeting with taking a walk. " . ... Periods always go inside the quotation marks.

... idea started from someone who invited herwhen she invited someone to a meeting, ...

... "I have to walk my dogs tomorrow. Could you come then?". ... You don't need a period if you have a question mark inside the quotation marks.

... This conversation has changed her mind, and she askedbegan asking people to go on a walking meeting, ...

... Besides, she has learned an essential thing to solve problems such as : getting out of the box ...

There you have it Risty. Please let us know if we can further edit your essay, or if you have a specific prompt.

I look forward to working with you again.

Regards,

Juan Sebastian Rubio


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