TASK 8 MAJOR SUBWAYS OF EUROPE
Subway is the most important requirement of a developed country. A successful country can be clearly seen by scanning the means of transportation, subway becomes a benchmark of how great is a country. The greatest and most crowded subway in the world is located in London, Paris and Moscow.
London has constructed the subway for the very first time in 1863 overtook by Paris and Moscow in 1900 and 1935. London has an unusual means to construct the railway called cut and cover, which means the road has been dug, the rail has been laid, tunnel has been built and the underground has been buried. At the first day the subway in London operated, 30,000 riders were transported. Subway was also an intrinsic mass transportation in Paris, to rival London, Paris has been erected a fully colorful architecture subway with shorter route but carried away numerous passenger everyday. The third biggest subway has built in Moscow which decorated with statuary, painting and mosaic. Subway has not been utilized only as a mass transportation but also as a military headquarters and a bomb citadel for the society when the World War II had happened.
Hello, Rosa. It is a pleasure to read your summary. Here are several inputs on your essay:
- ... by scanning the means of transportation,.(better to put a full stop here or you may use connector "because") Subway becomes a benchmark ...
- ... subway in the world is located in London, Paris,(a comma is necessary) and Moscow.
- ... the rail has been laid, the tunnel has been built,(please put a comma) and the underground ...
- ... mass transportation in Paris,. To rival London, Paris (...) carried away numerous passenger every day .
Paying attention to the punctuation marks will enhance your essay. I am looking forward to review your essay again. Keep practicing!
What's up there!
got some ideas here for your essay.
1) ... clearly seen by scanning theits/their means of transportation,. (you need to end your sentence there if you do not put any conjunction afterwards) S ubway becomes a benchmark of how great is a country is . (put the "be" in the back of the sentence when you use noun clause just to differ it from Interrogative sentence)
2) ... the very first time in 1863; overtook by Paris ...
3) London has an unusual means to construct the railway called cut and cover, which means ... (not sure what to comment from this sentence, but if you mean to explain a sequence then it is messed up)
4)AtIn the first day the subway in London operated, 30,000 riderspassangers were transported.
Hope it will help
Hallo rosadesiana,
I would like to tell you about correction for your great writing
these following corrections for you:
Subway is (...) requirement of a developed country (development country).
... by scanning the means of transportation,subway becomes a benchmark of how great is a country (inappropriate sentence because it's not coherent ). The greatest and most crowded subway in the world is ...
London has constructed (Suppose to be Past perfect "London had been constructed") the subway for the very ...
... which means the road has been dug, and the rail has been laid,then tunnel has been built meanwhile underground has been buried.
... mass transportation in Paris, to rival to London, Paris has been erected a fully gorgeously colorful architecture (sound's little bit weird double in meaning ) subway with (...) numerous passengers everyday. The third biggest subway had built in Moscow which is decorated with by statuary, painting and mosaic.
Note
Pay attention about grammar, preposition, use appropriate conjunction to connect the sentence separated by coma in order to elaborate your sentence
Viel Gluck
Regard
Ifan21
Hi rosadesiana.
I have a suggestion for you.
When you have already written the head, you shouldn't write it again at body column.
TASK 8 MAJOR SUBWAYS OF EUROPE
Hay rosa, may i help you
TASK 8 MAJOR SUBWAYS OF EUROPE
... subway becomes a benchmark of how great is a country(you can use "the country is") .
thankyou happy writing
