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Article Summary: Apple has a new way to get a cheaper iPhone


orestes 2 / 1  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Apple has offered its buyer new concept which called new sales program known as the Apple Certified Refurbished store to get a cheaper iPhone in the past ten years. The customer can buy refurbished iPhone 6s or iPhone 6s Plus via online market with price $449. If we compared to non-refurbished iPhone, the customers could save $100. Aside from selling iPhone 6s or 6s Plus, Apple has other products which were sale on its digital marketplace for refurbished devices such as Macs, iPods, and other items. However, there is still negative view from the public about refurbished product such as the fear of hardware malfunctions.

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Ucha MSN 17 / 26 4  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Apple has offered its buyer FOLLOWERS new concept which called new sales MARKETING program known ...
The customer can buy PURCHASE refurbished iPhone 6s ...
... other products which were ARE sale on its digital ...
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,797 4780  
Nov 10, 2016   #3
Orestes, the minute that you presented the negative side of the discussion, you should have followed up or added the positive explanation to the summary. That way your summary covers all of the important information within the paper. While there were a number of valid positive reasons to get a refurbished Iphone included in the article, you could have taken the time to choose at least one that you believed to be the most valid reason to get a 2nd hand phone. All you would have had to do was signify that you thought this was the best reason to support the decision to own a previously owned phone. By the way, the proper term to use is "digital marketplace" and not "online market". When summarizing articles, make sure to use the term used in the original article in order to keep the original statement as intact as possible while summarizing.
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Nov 10, 2016   #4
Hello My Friend
Let me give some inputs towards your writing.

please pay attention to your subject+verb agreement and conjunction. if you want to explain something using the next sentence, you should have the sentence which refers to

Apple has offered its buyer new concept which called >> Apple has offered its loyal customers new concept which is called
new sales program known as the Apple ...

to get a cheaper iPhone in the past ten years . >> it aims to give an opportunity for everyone to get cheaper price of iPhone,

The customer can buy refurbished iPhone 6s or iPhone 6s Plus ... >> for example, the buyers can purchase refurbished iPhone 6s or plus with price only $449, they can save money until $100.

Good luck


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