The graphs present information about the number of two kind of fish which seized close to Westhaven and the number of trawling vessels in Westhaven during 4 years from 2008 to 2010. Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna and swordfish between 2008 and 2009. It was a slight increased, and followed in 2010 until 2011 tuna rose constantly. Otherwise, swordfish was fell in 2010 and went up rapidly in 2011. The number of trawling vessels, there was an upward trend from 2008 to 2011.
As can be clearly seen, between 2008 and 2009 the number of trawling in Westthaven increased slightly from 50 to approximately 55. After that, there was dramatic decreased by 10 in 2010, and reached peaked at 75 in 2011.
In comparison, the number of two kind fish, between 2008 and 2011 tuna was increased gradually from about 75 in 2008 to 100 in 2011. Whereas, swordfish from 65 in 2008 rose rapidly to 90 but fell quickly by around 20 in 2011. After that increased again to 90.
1. Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna ...
----->my suggest, in conclusion is you just mention about general trend and the most striking facts also please input the graph to make people easy to correct your essay. Here is my correction for grammatical sentence
overall, it can be seen that the number of two kind fish, such as tuna and swordfish increased slightly between 2008 and 2009. Then, the number of tuna was constant while swordfish fluctuated from 2010 to 2011. Besides, there was an upward trend of the number of trawling vessels over three-years period.
Hallo.. i want to give you some suggestion. First of all please put your picture of graph because people cannot know how to compare your essay with the picture..
... two kind of fish which seized close to Westhaven and the number of trawling vessels in Westhaven during 4 years from 2008 to 2010. Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna and ...
It was a slight increased , ...
1. SEIZED.. It is not VERB so you cannot make it in past participle form.. SEIZURE OR TAKING IS NOUN so be carefull when you want choose appropiate word.
2. After CONJUCTION, It must VERB and you put NOUN there
3. TWO KINDS not TWO KIND
4. It was a slight increased INCREASE ->> IF YOU WRITE INCREASED SO THERE ARE TWO VERBS IN ONE SENTENCE WITHOUT ANY CONJUCTION SO YOU NEED MAKE IT IN NOUN FORM = INCREASE = NOUN (ALTHOUGH INCREASE CAN BE VERB OR NOUN FOR THIS CASE IT MUST NOUN)
Hello Alfin, we met again and again.
... about the number of two kindKINDS(plural, because two, not only one) of fish which seized (...) vessels in Westhaven during 4 years from 2008 to 2010(DURING 4 YEARS BUT WHY YOUR DATA IS ONLY THREE YEARS??? ---> 2008, 2009, AND 2010) .
Overall, the number of two kindKINDSfishFISHES , tuna and swordfish between 2008 and 2009........... IS BLA BLA BLA ???? THIS IS THE INCOMPLETE SENTENCE.
It was a slight increasedINCREASE(Increased is VERB, Increase can act as VERB OR NOUN) ,
and followed in 2010 until 2011 tuna rose constantly. (WORST SENTENCE STRUCTURE. WHAT YOU MEANS THERE???)
Otherwise, swordfish was fellFELL(DOUBLE VERB)
in 2010 and went up rapidly in 2011. The number of ...
PLEASE STUDY ABOUT LINKING WORD TO MAKE YOUR COHESION BOOST !
GOOD LUCK
Hi, here are my suggestions to you
1. Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna and ...
You need to explain more what's going on the number of two kind of fish
2. It was a slight increased increase
3. swordfish was fell in 2010 ...
You can say 'swordfish fell in 2010
thank you
Keep writing
Hi alvin, below through my advice for you.
1.two kind ---> kinds
2.during 4 years from 2008 to 2010 ---> 4 years or 3 years? 2008 to 2010 or 2011)
3.Overall, the number of two kind fish, tuna and swordfish between 2008 and 2009. --> this is a conclusion? tou should explain more dude.
4.swordfish was fell in 2010 ---> double verb
1. ... the number of two kind KINDS of fish which IS seized close to (...) during 4 years from 2008 to 2010 .
2. Overall, the number of two kind KINDS fish, tuna and swordfish ... (WHAT DO YOU MEAN IN THIS SENTENCE?
3. It was a slight increased,... Otherwise, swordfish ... The number of ...
( IN THIS PART DON TOO MUCH SENTENCES, ONLY PUT THE INTERESTING POINT)
4. ... number of two kind KINDS fish, between 2008 and ...
(BODY 1 AND 2 SHOULD LONGER THAN OVERVIEW)
Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay.
(1) The graphs present the information (...) of two kinds of fish which seizedwas caught close to Westhaven ...
(2) Overall, the number of two kinds of fish, tuna and swordfish, between 2008 and 2009 (and then?) .
Overall, it can be seen that there was a constant rise for tuna caught quantity from 2010 to 2011 while the figure for swordfish caught went up rapidly in 2011. Furthermore, the number of trawling vessels had an upward trend between 2008 and 2011.
(3) .... there was a dramatic decreasedbyof 10 in 2010, ...
