SOME PEOPLE THINK WHEN RECRUITING, COMPANIES SHOULD AIM TO TAKE ON PEOPLE WHO ARE INNOVATIVE AND ABLE TO WORK INDEPENDENTLY WHILE OTHERS CONSIDERED THEY SHOULD RECRUIT PEOPLE WHO ARE ABLE TO WORK IN A TEAM AND FOLLOW INSTRUCTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.
Developing of companies is affected of capability, skills and loyalty by employees. Some organizations have regulation to recruit workers who have the highest creativity and independent habit when working. But other argue, when recruiting people who is accepted are able to work in team and rigorous in operation. This essay will discuss both opinions and personally, I strong believe that people who want to recruited in a companies are depend on the capacity and the purpose or critrion needs to be prioritized more.
To begin with, there are several factors why the company usually accept worker who have innovation and working individually. Firstly, the creativity ways carry a rapid increase and development of them, because they could solve any problem that are unsolved as of now. For instance, a programer , they can find a new design pattern has resolved many issuees software and also optimized them, so that it helps their company more survive in the world industry. Secondly, working individual on some procedure helps to reducing the risk of error and miscommunication. For example, a designer tend to alone when work because they have leeway to take ideas and big creativity which is created by theirself.
Secondly, accepting workers who have capability in work team and able to follow the organization systems is considered able to work in industry level. It is because in a industrial position would be more efficient than one working alone. Team work helps people when there are any difficult and it can be solve together.
to sum up, even in some companies do not recruit employees who are work independently but I believe that firms where creative production needs candidate with innovativeness and ability to work indepentdently. On the other hand, employees who able work in team and follow the system their company are appropriate for position in operation line. (307w).
Reski, apart from the above-mentioned feedback from one of EF members, I would like to mention your weaknesses in order to make you able to strengthen them in the next practice and not fall into the same mistake. I hope the detailed descriptions would help you achieving a better quality of an IELTS task 2 essay.
- First of all, you have quite a lot spelling errors. This would not bring any benefits towards your final grade. You should proofread your essay by looking up certain difficult words that you think you are unsure about it. Many spelling mistakes would lead your band score to 5 or even worse than that. For instance, those spellings errors are "critrion" > "criterion", "issuees" > "issues", "programer" > "programmer", "theirself" > "themselves", "innovativeness" > "innovation", and "indepentdently" > "independently". Quite a lot isn't it?
- Second, punctuation is also one of the essential assessment criteria of IELTS writing and capitalization is included. Try to look at the last paragraph, the phrase "to sum up" is not capitalized properly.
- Then, as you might know, I have given some feedback to several members of this forum concerning the rule of academic writing. Mentioning "but" in the beginning of the sentence would make your essay becomes less academic. This is because "but" is considered as one of coordinate connectors. Therefore, my suggestion is that you can just switch "but" by using "However/Nevertheless" and many other cohesive devices that related to "contrasting" ideas.
Hope this helps :)
