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There are several reasons why nuclear technology is really worthwhile for humans life


anonym28 3 / 4  
Mar 23, 2017   #1

ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF NUCLEAR TECHNOLOGY.



Currently we are frequently seeing an announcement or news regarding the renewable energy of nuclear technology either in the TV media or in newspaper. Although this power bring about plenty of drawbacks in particular to people live and environment. However, this also has benefits to human life for a long time due to the fact that it has declined a waste of natural resources.

There are several reasons why nuclear technology is really worthwhile for humans life. Firstly, fossil fuel like oil and gas are running out at this present time, instead of this, nuclear is able to replace this energy. Taking an example, according to the specialist, this power could be replace the use of natural resources such as coal, oil, and gas. Another reason is that they could help to reduce carbon emission and green house effect which accounts for global warming. Furthermore, these are the merits of nuclear technology that tremendously integral to human life.

However, this power also has many negative impact neither on the environment nor human life. Refers to the investigation of Observer, people are worried that terrorist could steal these radioactive materials and uses it in a wrong ways. Moreover, there is no way to decontaminate this radioactive material up to now. At last, it is important to note that it's more safety to generate energy from solar, wind or water power instead of utilize nuclear.

To conclude, despite the fact that nuclear technology bring some benefits for human. However, it also has many disadvantages for human and environment.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Mar 23, 2017   #2
Ahmad, I am afraid that although you wrote a little more than 250 words, the essay that you developed was so improperly discussed that you cannot get a passing score for this essay. The only possible score for this would be a 3 based on a number of reasons. Please take note of these observations and apply the suggested changes to your future practice tests.

First of all, there is a clear misunderstanding of the prompt requirement. The original prompt for this required you to take a stand either in agreement or disagreement with the point of view that "The benefits of nuclear technology far out-weight the disadvantages." Since you improperly represented the prompt paraphrasing, you immediately failed the task accuracy portion of the test. It should not be difficult to get a better score in the TA portion. All you have to do is write your paraphrased prompt and then immediately compare it with the original prompt. If your prompt does not follow the original format, then your paraphrasing is wrong.

The second problem with your essay is that you did not take a clear stand in agreement or disagreement with the prompt. This should have been represented in the paraphrased opening statement as a part of the discussion outline. You instead referred to research sources, which were not clearly identified as such in the essay. This caused another failure on your part in terms of task accuracy.

The third problem, is that your grammar range and accuracy is highly problematic. While it is possible to make sense out of what you have written, its presentation could use some improvement. The reader might decide to stop reading your work simply because of the grammatical errors that you have in the essay. Try to use simple sentences that depict a clean English sentence instead of trying to be complex and causing the reader undue stress.

Finally, your conclusion is too short. It has to be made longer, at least 3 sentences in order to properly wrap up the discussion by presenting an updated summary of the previous information presented. If you work on improving all of these points in your next essay, you should manage too show some improvement and perhaps, a slight increase in your score as well.
yuukinohan4 9 / 24 6  
Mar 26, 2017   #3
Hi @anonym28
First of all, please insert the prompt so that essay forum members are able to give you required solutions. However, i will give you several suggestions.

taking an example, according to the specialist, this power could be replace the use of natural resources such as coal, oil, and gas.

you managed to use research sources in your body paragraph, but it is unclear because you do not include the exact and clear sources that may be a journal or article from news.

In your body two paragraph, the final sentence does not balance your explanation
In your conclusion, you are able to conclude essay based on your thesis statement and main ideas rather than just write normative sentences.
In academic writing, please avoid using contractions.

hope it helps you


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