New technologies have developed dramatically in the recent years. IELTS, task2 writing module

New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers .
to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

improvements in different spheres of our life

New technologies have developed dramatically in the recent years. It touched many people lives and impacted them in so many ways, one of the affected parts is buying and selling. It got a major scope of attention causing distinctive change in lives of consumers. In this essay I'll discuss ideas behind this revolution .

Firstly, no one denies the fact that new advanced technology inventions made our lives easier regarding advertising and commerce, making us connected to all new inventions as well as allowing us to transport goods easier, people are now more familiar with global companies and can follow new fashions, new cars' options created, cameras and every new technology developed regardless how far they are. However, many people still complain that lots of countries are transparent to that transformation as internet, that made this evolution possible, is restricted in their regions, even some of them don't know what internet is. So here the division is present and such generalization can not be made.

Secondly, part of this outbreak was due to social network involvement in which people can communicate and market their products easier and cheaper at the same time, sellers can now make a direct contact with the clients to take feedbacks, suggestions and complains in order to maximize the satisfaction of consumers leading eventually to development of business markets. Nowadays, many companies have evolved and grown using mainly social networks as a main marketing tool to their products.

To sum up, we are now more connected than ever, this has created an atmosphere that promotes creativity in the business activities that helped in improving it in so many ways. I believe that we are witnessing now a new era of buying and selling technology that will upgrade the way the consumer shops sharply.

@jason_alan
Hello, I think you should write your essay with topic sentences. This type of essay requires you to choose one opinion, you agree or disagree, and you have to express to defend your side. You need to express your personal opinion " I totally disagree with this point of view'' or '' I completely agree ...'' in the introduction. Then, you write the reasons why you agree or disagree and support it throughout your essay.

I, personally, think that you need to have at least 3 sentences for your conclusion.

Jason your essay will recieved a failing score of 3. That is due to your obvious misunderstanding of the prompt instructions. You are expected to merely agree or disagree with the given statement, justifying it to the reader based upon your personal experience or popular knowledge. Your essay changed the prompt instructions when you said that you would instead be discussing the history of the trend. . Review the instructions and compare it with what you wrote. You wrote an essay counter to the instructions given. One you make a mistaken in the prompt paraphrasing, you end up writing the wrong essay. So, you cannot be scored for the rest of the criteria since your work doesn't apply to the original instructions. You need to be careful when establishing the task accuracy representation. Make a mistaken there and you will immediately fail the test.

@jason_alan
your instruction is hard to follow. Check your grammar and tense plz
Have a nice day

Hello,
To be honest, I think your structure is good and I can understand what you want to express. However, you did not choose a side, which is the article requesting, without doing this, your following article are meaningless. This mistake can let you be evaluated as failed.

My suggestion, if it is hard to choose a side for you, it fine to stay in the middle. You have to reveal the statement that you agree this argument, but in certain situation, you disagree. Then discuss the advantage and disadvantage in following paragraphs. That will be a completed essay.

Hope it helps!!