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Essay about the influence of the internet


OzRamsay 4 / 4 2  
Oct 24, 2017   #1

easiness of information availability



The widespread use of the internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before. How does this increase in the availability of information influence life in today's world?"

There is a buzzword named 'game-changer' which now ubiquitously applied to almost any conception that demonstrates any slightest glimpse of novelty and originality. Twitter, Ebay, Amazon, Facebook, Google..., this enumeration could be easily stretched and continued. Each one of them (plus much more unmentioned) is considered to bring to our life some unforeseen though very valuable shift. However, as far as I concerned, this is exactly the case of not seeing the forest for the trees. There is a discovery which became so familiar and accustomed to our eyes that it's colossal and enormous consequences went by largely unnoticed. The name of this discovery is the invention of the Internet which for last 30 years silently shattered and changed our world in almost any dimension.

The expansion of the internet presented humanity with an unprecedented possibility to learn and to spread knowledge. By the strength of the consequences the proliferation of the internet could be fairly compared possibly only to the discovery of typography. The latter invention helped humanity to spread the light on knowledge which then dispelled the darkness of ignorance of the Middle Ages. However, there needed several centuries to promulgate literacy among a very narrow slice of privileged people such as aristocracy. Nowadays, already half of the population has an access to the internet on the daily basis and the right to have an access to the internet is declared in the Declaration of United Nations. Of course, it is a vast distance between claiming the right, and it's actual implementation in real life; humanity has been still struggling to enforce the right to work and even sometimes the right to life in some corners of the globe. However, the pace of the changes allows one to hope that this time the needed time will be measured not in centuries but at least in decades.

For me, the internet serves as a wise advisor, who could be asked when no one can. The internet is not only the place where one can find answers, but it is also the place where one can ask questions without feeling guilty or ashamed. There are questions be it medical or personal which by some reasons we prefer not to articulate aloud and but still we eager to know the answers. Today the history of the search query could be considered as a most important record of the person's activity. One can easily bend the truth in speech or be flexible with facts in a resume, but the search history can always reveal person's authentic interests.

From my point of view, the easiness of the availability of information due to the internet has re-shaped our model of searching and acquiring information and irreversible recast our world, which can be clearly seen in the several nearest decades.

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As a non-native English speaker, I would very appreciate any highlighting of any mistakes. Thank you for reading!
Akosuah 3 / 2  
Oct 24, 2017   #2
I could not really get your essay from the initial stage. Probably you coming from a non-native English speaking country. Also desist from using more if uncommon words so you can express yourself well. It's difficult to understand what you meant to say.
Arcmec 3 / 6 2  
Oct 24, 2017   #3
However, as far as I am concerned,
which for the last 30 years
but still will be eager to know the answers
our mode of research and collection of information, leading to an irreversible recast of our world, which can be clearly seen ...

Am not an expert but i like to help any way i can
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Oct 25, 2017   #4
Ainur, there is a lack of clarity in the presentation of your essay. Don't get me wrong, I can somehow grasp the concept of the discussion and some of the points you are trying to make. The problem is that you did not properly develop your pre-writing style and outline prior to your actual writing. These are the reasons why your essay seems to be all over the place and without a proper direction.

The pre-writing considerations allow you to present all of the ideas that you want to present in your essay. Everything from A-Z may be presented at this stage. In the next stage however, you will need to whittle those ideas down. When you start to outline your work, you will need to consider the following:

1. What is your thesis statement?
2. Why do you think this topic of importance?
3. Do you have access to the necessary files for this research?

After you figure out those first 3 questions, you can begin to outline your research discussion:

1. State your thesis statement
2. Objective statement
3. Discussion 1 with evidence
4. Discussion 2 with evidence
5. Personal opinion (if required)
6. Concluding statement

What i presented above is a simplified version of a topic outline. It can work for your purposes because you just need to practice writing a research paper. When you finally write a real research paper, you will need a far more intricate outline. Use the above examples as your guide from when you write another paper. You should have some content improvement or focused discussion by that time.


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