melb 2 / 10 Dec 14, 2009 #1A base of noodles a sauce of cheeseAn American favorite, a neccessity!For its lofty pedestal many have contendedNone could match a taste as respected as splendid.The corndog tried the hotdog failedGreenbean cassarole, Apple Pie-None prevailed.Then one day its post was challengedThe haughty french fry demanded hommage.Eaten by millions everydayThe french fry tauted he pulled more sway.Though popping up in scores of placesHe left vacant some important spaces.Family reuniouns, get toghetersBirthday parties and many othersEaten for convenience and not for loveThe French Fry can never rise aboveThe place in our hearts reserved for oneA taste as welcome as the morining sun'Cause nothing in the world can pleaseLike a bowl of macaroni and cheese!!!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Dec 16, 2009 #2Nice job. This is your first poem? You are off to a good start. I wold not want to change anything about the poem, but I caught a misspelling:Though popping up in scores of placesHe left vacant some important spaces.Family reunions , get togethersBirthday parties and many others
OP melb 2 / 10 Dec 16, 2009 #3Thank You for the complement and corrections. Yes, this is my first poem. I had to write a poem for school. I think it took me about 6 hours from conception to perfection. Since then, I have written several more. I'll try to post them soon.
Jeannie 10 / 214 Dec 16, 2009 #4Then one day its post was challengedThe haughty french fry demanded hommage.It would not have dawned on me to rhyme these two words (challange and homage), but I slid right over it without so much as a hitch. Excellent "ear!"I also agree 100% that the french fry can't hold a candle to mac 'n cheese! :)