Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@Holt Thank you very much
I will change part which is need to rewrite

Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@d2ny
Wow thank you
This is very helpful

Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@Holt
I rewrited my self introduction.
I still don't sure about how to start and how to end my essay.
Please take a look again.
Thank you.

I was born in 1994. When I was 3 years old my parents went to Korea to work. So I was raised by my grandmother and my parents returned in 2006. Now I'm living with my parents and my younger brother who is 9 years old. In my opinion, my grandmother established today's who I am. I am outgoing, modest and hardworking person. I have been participating in social activities a lot. For example, I joined ballroom dancing competition, and mathematic, physic and other subjects competition in general education school. When I was in university, I was in responsible for secretary of class and member of debate club and organize debating and speech competition in the university.

My life motto is "Where there is will, there is a way'. I had proved it to myself because I participated in lot of competition while I was studying in undergraduate university. Competitions that I prepared was turned out very well, in opposite if I didn't prepare well the results were bad. I think life is about choice. We can't have anything we want. If we choose something on the other side we lose some other thing. So main thing in life is make a good choice. But how we know was it good or not. In my opinion, It'll depend on how happy you're now, and how much do you regret. There is nothing easy in life, choices can be wrong. It can't be right all the time. If we learn from our wrong choice and won't make same mistake again it means we are improving and learning new things.

I was entered in elementary school when I was seven years old, and graduated high school in 2011. After that I entered "Mandakh Burtgel" university's Banking economy-accounting class and I graduated in 2015 spring. As I mentioned before I was secretary of class. So I was in charge of organizing my classmates for university's social activities and other competitions besides academic study. During my undergraduate study, my biggest competition was "The 18th National Accounting Competition" which was held in the 4th year of Mandakh Burtgel University. Participating in this competition was the one of biggest goal I had, because this competition verify the most successful student in accounting study field. 3rd year of university, I hadn't prepared well and I couldn't even pass 1st stage. And next year I decided to try hard and I prepared very well so I selected one of 5 students who are represent university and we won bronze medal for team and I distinguished TOP10 personally. This result gave me lot of encourage and confidence. In undergraduate university, I got more knowledge and beside that as an individual I became more responsibility.

Now I'm working as an accountant at "Altan Joloo Impex" LLC. At first, I was in charge of recording sales and inventory. After working 6 months, I started to present tax reports and financial statements. This work helped me to improve as a professional accountant and confirm my education about what I learned from bachelor degree. Although after I entered job I developed my personal knowledge and other individual skills, I realize that I still have lot to learn. So it reminded me that when I was in last year of high school, I decided to get bachelor degree in Mongolia, after that study in graduate study in abroad. Because studying in abroad will be advantage for my career opportunities, increase my language ability, meet new culture, national and make a life experience. I couldn't afford to learn in abroad by personal finance. So I was looking for a scholarship and, first time I knew about KGSP in 2011. At that time I was 1st year of my university, so I decided to submit my application to the scholarship after I graduate Mandakh Burtgel university.

Life is very unpredictable and full of opportunity. This scholarship will be one of biggest opportunity in my life. And I don't want to waste this opportunity because it is provide with full scholarship and studying in Korea will be a big investment for my future.

I always wondered about Korea because my parents were working there for about 10 years. When I was kid I wanted to know about what kind of country were they living and working? So my curious in Korea became increased year by year and it leaded me to interest in Korean TV programs, dramas and songs. Because of these I continued to learn about Korean culture and language. As more to know more I wanted to go Korea and me most known country after Mongolia is Korea.

On the other side, Korea is one of leading country its development and its environment. Studying in there is like to kill two birds with one stone for me. Because I will get high education with scholarship in developed country that I always wanted to go.

Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@Holt
okey thank you

Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@Holt
I have a question.
You advised me to write about "What work did they do there that kept them there that long? What did they tell you about Korea and how their life was there?"

Actually my parents worked there illegally and work in factory or cleaning service etc.
Is it okey to mention these?
But they always say that living Korea is very nice.

Graduate / Self introduction for Master degree in different field from undergraduate degree. [5]

Hello

In my opinion, section about Japanese man and 2nd paragraph are not that necessary.
And you should mention about your character and add some awards that you achieved during undergraduate school

Scholarship / "Where there is will, there is a way" - my motto. Self introduction for KGSP [15]

@Holt
Thank you
They came back from Korea about 10 years ago.
Since then they are living in Mongolia, So that is not much problem.

Scholarship / To be a business woman who is able to help the world. Self introduction for KGSP 2017 [4]

Hello

Is there more achievements during your undergraduate years?
Many people advised me that not write much about high school, it's better to write about academic study.
So in my opinion, you should add more achievements during in your University.

Hope my advise help you.