Writing Feedback / IELT T2- Punishments are neccessary to help children learn the right and wrong from early age [6]

Hello @lamabeto!. I appreciate your perspective on this issue. And it is my pleasure for me to give some comments on it:

1. you repeated the phrase " parents and teacher" quit much. I recommend that you can instead of them by using " parents as well as teachers".
2. If you can, you should provide an illustration of punishments abusing to clarify its consequences. It will probably make your viewpoint more persuative.

Letters / You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. The letter in this case. [5]

Hello @he227803!. I am here to give you some comments on your letter and I do it as a pleasure for me.

1. At the first paragraph, you mentioned the date is 13th of January, so I don't understand why at the last paragraph you want to know " Which date the seminar will be held" again? or you mean that "where will the seminar be held in London"?

2. At the last paragraph, you wrote: "It would be appreciated if you would tell me". We don't use "will" or "would" in the "if" clause. It should be: " If you told me". Moreover, I recommend that you should use the first conditional for it because this is an event that may occur in the future. So you should write: "It will be appreciated if you tell me". We use the second conditional to talk about an imaginary, impossible or unlikely situation in the present or future.

Please correct me if I have something wrong. Thanks a lot.