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Posts by Taniad
Joined: Oct 16, 2010
Last Post: Feb 27, 2011
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Taniad   
Oct 16, 2010
Scholarship / Essay A:What Are The Most Important Qualities A Leader Must Have In Today's Society [4]

You are repeating ''leader" so often that your essay don't sound good.
Just read it aloud and you'll understand what I mean.

A positive attitude is another essential quality a leader must have in order to do well in office. A leader must see things in a positive light or else everything will not go as planned. For example, if a huge crisis was going on and a leader had a mind of a pessimist, he would scare "his people " into thinking the situation is way worse than what it really is. On the other hand, and optimist would look on the "bright" side and think positive and think of a way to overcome the crisis and assure "his people" that everything is OK. Which is something all leaders should do.

Respect is a quality that all leaders should have. When a leader is respectful, his people will respect him in return. The people want someone who looks out for their best interest as well as respect them. If a leader doesn't show respect or show that they care, no one will accept him/her as their leader.

A leader is a role model. One who sets positive examples for others. A leader who doesn't have the motivation, respect, and the right mind-set will not and can not do well in office. it's the ones who see the world as an optimist who will make great leaders.

I also consider that you should write better introduction: one sentences doesn't seem enoough for me.
I'm not a native speaker, so my suggestions might be wrong. You can take it or leave it. It's up to you.
Taniad   
Oct 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Clothing may influence the way people behave [2]

You shouldn't repeat expressions from the task writing your introduction. This shows that your vacabulary is not very diverse.
People behave grandly while wearing tails, while the same person act boisterously when wearing jeans and tee-shir.---Think about it! Also, I don't think we can say ''behave grandly''

Different events require different styles of dressing.
Like For example, a formal dinner require one to wear a suit, a meeting needs dressing in a day coat, while on a night out with friends a jeans is suitable.

Such distinction in characters was part due to her influential acting and part due to the irksome work of her stylist and designer. So, clothing can be used as means of representing representation oneself as a different person.

I'm sorry if make some errors trying to correct your essay.
Taniad   
Oct 17, 2010
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hi!
So you are from Africa. I find it really interesting. What do you think of living there? Do you like it or do you prefer to move somewhere? You know I'm interested because I have always thought that life in Africa is rather difficult and I want know if it's true. Just tell me something about your contry if you can, please.
Taniad   
Oct 21, 2010
Undergraduate / My Family, the most important thing in my life - My First Thread [3]

Besides being an entrepreneur, he is also a contractor.

Although he we often has have some quarrels with me, I always love him/I have always loved him.

Now I can be right here because of him too. Without my brother, I may be not might not be able to even turn on my computer (=P).

He's really worthy for of me.
With this family, I know life, I know love, I know care, and I know everything.---maybe I learn life,...
Taniad   
Oct 23, 2010
Grammar, Usage / poorer or more poor [8]

I've met both case, but I don't think they're both correct.
Please tell me which one is right.
Taniad   
Oct 23, 2010
Grammar, Usage / poorer or more poor [8]

I think ''more poorly'' is correct because I still can remember the rule that when a word consists of two syllables and ends with ''y'', we use ''more''

RyanVi16, thanks
Taniad   
Oct 24, 2010
Grammar, Usage / poorer or more poor [8]

Thank you everybody for your help.
I guess I should ask my teacher and make sure decisively.
Taniad   
Oct 26, 2010
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

I think it's great that you are such a patriot. I really like people who respect and love their country.
I'm sure in future I'll visit Africa, maybe even Kenya.

I didn't say that it's not an exciting place to see. But I don't think I was wrong when said that life in Africa can be challenging. What about all those diseases? I mean, you can't deny that there are some problems with the inhabitants' health. I know that AIDS is continent-wide there. But maybe your country is better than others, I don't know.

But don't blame me in ignorance because we all observed what was happening during the World Cup Football Championship in South Africa this summer. Don't you think that there's some problems with crime rate? Isn't it too high, hm?
Taniad   
Oct 29, 2010
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hi eastspringkim!
Wow! You're from Korea!? Cool!=)))
I'd like to visit Korea, not now, of course, but I might in future.
I was thinking if I know something about Korea and I realized that I know almost nothing about it. But I'm sure your level of awareness about Ukraine is the same, isn't it?

Are you from South of Noth Korea?
Taniad   
Oct 29, 2010
Writing Feedback / City or village - what is better? [3]

Nowadays the most active migrations come about inland. Basically, the resettlement is propelled by economic factors. Cities welcome commuters at their workplaces, and the picture is balanced with campers and cottagers forsaking the vanities of the urbs. Seeing no opportunities in the countryside, many villagers hive off to boroughs while well-off or retired townsfolk move to suburban houses.

In my view, it is not only personal preferences, but people's age and first concerns that determine their choice of habitation. For instance, parents preoccupied with their offspring's physical wellness would rather their children enjoy the environmentally friendly and less criminogenic outlands. Rustic peace and tranquility is another undisputed advantage for the senior citizens who choose to settle down in a rural homestead every here and there.

However, if you are an achiever who has always dreamed of the rush of city life, metropolis will suit you perfectly. Ambitions could be the main reason why young adults tend to take up the capital to accomplish their aims.

Hideous air pollution, traffic jams and overcrowding are obvious drawbacks of all urban centers. Car emissions and industrial exhaust affect town dwellers' health. According to recent research, the majority of Ukrainians have had some thyroid problems due to aerial contamination, the investigators assume.

In conclusion, both extensive urban areas and back-country have their pros and cons. While selecting a residence, one should bear in mind his or her personal prospects and priorities
Taniad   
Oct 30, 2010
Writing Feedback / Help-is-needed-Essay about Traffic jams- Causes and Solutions [5]

Consequently, companies started to invent/inventing every way possible ways of transiting from place to another, resulting in traffic congestion in many big cities. Cairo, in particular, has become one of the most crowded cities of all. Although there are some causes led to aggravating traffic congestion, but effective solutions to alleviate the crowd are still be offering on the table.
Taniad   
Nov 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / MONEY is not the most important aspect of a job in certain cases! [4]

Experiences and skills possibly gained are considered before an applicant make up their his or her mind./aplicants make up their mind.

Sometimes, it acts as a preparation for a person to find their his or her truly enjoyable career.

This especially influences students with many desiring es to get a part-time job while studying in university.

Soon enough, they feel bored and lose all the enthusiasm towards their job. In fact, some successful entrepreneurs, politician and artists tent to give up their current profitable job to work in totally different careers such as journalism, negotiation or writing, etc.

I quite enjoyed reading your essay, it seemed to me very clear and easy to read
Taniad   
Nov 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Pre-nuptial agreements. Do you think everyone should have it? [4]

Nowadays before getting married a couple will consider their marriage contract painstakingly, bearing in mind all the plausible outcomes of their matrimony. However, the opinions have differed and some still believe that it is love that counts while wedding.

In the estimation of most people, pre-nuptial agreement should be obliged to prevent the disadvantageous consequences that might take place after divorce. Nevertheless, the supporters of old views become known by strongly refusing covenants of marriage. To their mind, such contracts are not the accurate omens of the successful marriage.

The pros I see in the matrimonial alliance with pre-nups are that after a family split up, acquired property is divided equally between the two sides. However, at the same time, it seems that marriage contracts cause distrust which is the fatal factor for prosperous domesticity.

According to the law of Ukraine marriage relationship, rights and duties can also be regulated by pre-nuptial agreements. This legislation has been created quite recently and it has not taken on among Ukrainian populace.

In my view, people should be free to choose what they thinks is better for them and that is why I am opposed to forcing everyone to sign a marriage contract which is, in fact, a meaning nothing piece of paper.

Despite all the controversies around the topical issue, I believe that pre-nuptial agreement will finally become binding. People have always rejected innovations, but then admitted that they had done rightly accepting them, which is, I think, going to happen one more time.
Taniad   
Nov 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / Never, never give up: what a wonderful word [5]

Personally, I think you have some talents to writing essays, but it hasn't been developed yet.
I suppose you should try to diversify the vocabulary and grammar you used in the essay.
It seems that it's to simple, because of the poor grammar.
But cheer up! I really think you're a gifted person, you just need some time for improving your English.
Taniad   
Nov 18, 2010
Writing Feedback / should students have part-time jobs while studying? [3]

Some people claim that the main students' task is studying hard so that after graduation, they may get a good degree, which offers them a better opportunity for well-paid jobs. Nevertheless, I believe that great benefits, which part-time job provides, outweigh more than that. , generally, are more advantageous.
Taniad   
Nov 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / Pre-nuptial agreements. Do you think everyone should have it? [4]

thank you very much for your comments, auds
The reason why I didn't stick on one side is becouse I'm not really sure if it's good or bad to make pre-nups binding. This issue isn't very simple, becouse if it were, people wouldn't talk about it so much.

And I don't see the world in black and white that is why I agree that pre-nups can have a negative effect on a marriage, but only partly.
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