Bruce
Jun 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / Should the criminals in jail be educated?---IELTS [4]
please help me check it. Thank you very much :D
Never in history was criminals' rights so emphasized as in modern society. In the past, the punishment for the criminals is to put them in the jail with being deprived of many personal right and political right. Today, however, an increasing number of convicts are provided with adequate education and working opportunities. Personally, I incline towards the latter practice.
To begin with, it is obvious that the offenders in the jail are entitled to basic human rights. Despite the mistakes they made, they have rights to be educated and working. In fact, most of them will return to society in a few years. The vocational trainings in the jail provide convicts with a legal way to earn their bread and butter after release. Education also helps them to reshape their justified values and stops them posing new threats to the society.
Besides, making the convicts work could release the economic burden of prisons as well as the whole society because they actually pay for their living through working on their own. If the criminals not working, governments would have no choice but spend part of the taxpayer's money on the operation of prison, which would directly minimize the expenditure on public facilities and education.
That is not to say, however, the traditional ways of punishing criminals have no merits at all. After all, a stricter rule of punishment would pose a deterrent effect to those who have the intention of committing crimes. Yet, the modern way to punish them is more humanity and takes the long-term possible implications into account.
Taken all together, criminals could also enjoy basic human rights and we should help them develop both emotional and physical wellbeing.
please help me check it. Thank you very much :D
Never in history was criminals' rights so emphasized as in modern society. In the past, the punishment for the criminals is to put them in the jail with being deprived of many personal right and political right. Today, however, an increasing number of convicts are provided with adequate education and working opportunities. Personally, I incline towards the latter practice.
To begin with, it is obvious that the offenders in the jail are entitled to basic human rights. Despite the mistakes they made, they have rights to be educated and working. In fact, most of them will return to society in a few years. The vocational trainings in the jail provide convicts with a legal way to earn their bread and butter after release. Education also helps them to reshape their justified values and stops them posing new threats to the society.
Besides, making the convicts work could release the economic burden of prisons as well as the whole society because they actually pay for their living through working on their own. If the criminals not working, governments would have no choice but spend part of the taxpayer's money on the operation of prison, which would directly minimize the expenditure on public facilities and education.
That is not to say, however, the traditional ways of punishing criminals have no merits at all. After all, a stricter rule of punishment would pose a deterrent effect to those who have the intention of committing crimes. Yet, the modern way to punish them is more humanity and takes the long-term possible implications into account.
Taken all together, criminals could also enjoy basic human rights and we should help them develop both emotional and physical wellbeing.