Writing Feedback / Differences between Mongolian and American Foods [NEW]

hi all!! first of all i wan to thank you all EF team workers for helping us and encouraging us to write correctly. I'm an international student from Mongolia. First i came to the USA i got lots of difficulties to speak and write. But many people such my friends and teachers and wonderful people helped me out to face this troubles. i'm getting better than before. my first example needs a correction. please feedback my essay as soon as possible. here it goes

Differences between Mongolian and American Foods

I have been studying in the United States of America for the last six months. While studying and living in the dorms, I adverted to the differences between Mongolian and American foods. In this following essay, I will compare and contrast the qualities of Mongolian food to the food of the American. I go to the Food Court three times a day and I choose my meal myself. While observing the menu, I got conclusion that American diet is based mainly meat and potatoes. By this I mean everything is meat and some sort of side dish that is high in carbohydrate. Some examples of this would be turkey and stuffing, roast beef and mashed potatoes, and hamburgers and French fries.

In my opinion, Americans concentrate on seasonings more than Mongolians. Americans like to add or improve flavors of food by using spices, salt, herbs, and condiments. That is why American food is more delicious than Mongolian food. The Mongolians don't believe in using much seasoning. The main method of cooking the meals of the Mongolians is boiling and steaming, considered the healthiest method in cooking by researchers the world over. For example, Mongolians make one of the most popular dish Buuz, made from beef and flour especially steamed mutton dumplings and Suutei tsai, which is a kind of salty tea, made from a combination of hot water, mare or yaks milk, butter, rice, lots of salt, and possibly some tea.

The Americans have a many different food choices. It is hard to make the best choice to promote good health. So Americans use many foods which can cause troubles for their health. For example, fast foods delicious prepared and canned foods. The

Mongolians don't eat fast foods as much as Americans because prices for imported foods are higher than other foods. For example, In Mongolia only wealthiest people can afford them usually and any kind of meat is cheaper than other food. The Mongolian national food contains a lot of meat which are buuz, huushuur and bansh. The reason for Mongolian fatty, high protein food is that the nomadic Mongolians traditionally need the winter flab to get through their long and cold winters. This means a diet heavy on meat and dairy products, the latter when sour in the summer time thought to clean the stomach. It isn't just about meat though. Mongolians do also eat cereal, barley and natural fruits and plants native to the country.

In conclusion, first I came to the USA I didn't realize that I would miss my national food at all. But after all I missed my national food a lot. Of course, there are lots of differences between American and Mongolian food. But national food is the most delicious food for you forever. If I were American person and were in Mongolia to study, I am sure that I will miss my handmade American food.

Writing Feedback / Two different methods of losing weight [2]

this is my contrast and comparison essay. i think my essay needs some help on conclusion and body. please help me to find out errors. please help to review this essay

Two different methods of losing weight

Today thin equals to beautiful. Every magazine or newspaper advertises many different kinds of diet pill or exercise equipment. Lots of people want to lose weight and be healthy. Sometimes if a person is overweight there might be some health problems such as: kidney, asthma or high blood pressure. We want to live long and happily, but it depends on how we live and how we treat our body. Therefore we have to know the best recipe to keep fit and healthy. What is the best recipe to be thin and healthy? In this essay, I will compare two different methods of losing weight which are exercise and diet pill.

I was overweight when I was in high school. It seemed hard to lose weight for me. I was the best student at school. That is why I had to concentrate on study not body. My father suggested me exercise plan. He started to instruct me and I lost 10 pounds in 3 months. I felt more comfortable with my outfit and I became healthier than I was before. Now I go fitness center four times a week, because to do exercise usually makes me happy and healthy.

Exercise is a key to be healthy and to lose weight safely. There are many advantages of exercises. First of all, exercise gives me ability to go through my day with less relative energy expenditure. Second, exercise helps me to maintain and strengthen muscles and to burn calories. Many people break up their exercise throughout the day, because they started too fast. Starting too fast causes discouragement. It is important to begin slowly.

Every day millions of people spent millions of dollars on weight loss supplement. People want to lose weight easy and quickly like my brother Chris. My cousin's husband Chris took diet pills for 6 months and he lost 20 pounds. The result was unbelievable but it was too expensive. After losing weight he just stopped to take pills again, because he found out disadvantages of diet pill. He couldn't sleep at night and he got liver damage. After three months later, he started to gain weight day by day. There are many magazines and newspapers which are advertising diet pills for every person who has weight problems. Some people are succeeded on weight loss by taking diet pills but it didn't work for every fat people. My brother was a true example which means diet pills help for some people. To take a diet pills, you have consider your health and its effectiveness.

Exercise is the best method for losing weight. To lose weight safely, all you have to do is eat healthy foods and do exercise often. There are a lot of diet pills that make false claims about boosting your metabolism. Exercise is the only way to alter your metabolism. The amount of energy you expend determines how quickly your body burns calories. If people maintain your healthy diet and exercise routines for the rest of your life they will lose weight and keep it off. It takes a lot of hard work but losing weight is not going to make people a better person. It will not magically change persons' life. It is a good idea to maintain a healthy weight.