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May 10, 2015
Writing Feedback / Best change in my hometown? Establishing companies to make a lot of job vacancies and employ people. [4]
If I had a power to change one thing about my country, I'd try to establish some companies to make a lot of job vacancies and employ people especially who are poor and unemployed.
With making job vacancies, poor people can get a job. Moreover, plenty pf illegal jobs will be removed we won't see any vendors in whole of the country anymore. Furthermore, the percent of the crimes will decrease. Because, most of the criminals happen when people don't have any financial support.
Unfortunately, there are a lot of graduated people who either their job is unrelated to their skills or are unemployed whereas they have spent some years in universities and studied hard, but they cant find any ideal job.
In conclusion, if i had a chance to change one important thing here, it would be the lack of job vacancy that it could help our society as well.
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Hi everyone!
I am studying for the TOEFL exam. I would be grateful if you could help me to improve my writing :) Thanks...
If I had a power to change one thing about my country, I'd try to establish some companies to make a lot of job vacancies and employ people especially who are poor and unemployed.
With making job vacancies, poor people can get a job. Moreover, plenty pf illegal jobs will be removed we won't see any vendors in whole of the country anymore. Furthermore, the percent of the crimes will decrease. Because, most of the criminals happen when people don't have any financial support.
Unfortunately, there are a lot of graduated people who either their job is unrelated to their skills or are unemployed whereas they have spent some years in universities and studied hard, but they cant find any ideal job.
In conclusion, if i had a chance to change one important thing here, it would be the lack of job vacancy that it could help our society as well.
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Hi everyone!
I am studying for the TOEFL exam. I would be grateful if you could help me to improve my writing :) Thanks...