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Name: moh jawahir
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mohjawahir   
Apr 1, 2015
Writing Feedback / As global trade increases, many goods are produced in other countries, transported long distances. [2]

As global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances.

Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays, there is a significant rise in world trade and this means that some goods which are consumed by people have to be made in other parts of the world, and be transported over long distance. While this trend has many benefits, I strongly believe that overall case creates several negative impacts.

There is no doubt that goods which are produced in other countries have many benefits. First of all, companies are able to minimize the cost of their production because they have not to pay an expensive price of workers. For example, most corporations from western countries tend to produce their goods in Thailand due to the lowest salaries of workers. In addition, it can advance the bilateral relationship between two countries such as developing their relationship in politic, economic, health and low policy. Companies also help the government to decrease jobless in their country. Evidence of this can be seen that many large industrial cities around the world have no more jobless. Likewise, long distance transportation also has some benefits. Firstly, it can create new opportunities for drivers. This is because all sorts of transports need drivers to deliver their good to retailers. Next, long distance transportation can add taxes of toll or street which cars use it. None of this would have had some benefits from these events.

However, the main drawback of producing goods in other countries is that it is going to decrease taxes of country house. This is because corporations will pay their taxes to the government where they produce their goods. For example, most companies from United States of America which produce their goods in Indonesia have to pay taxes to Indonesian government. As a result, The United States of America cannot get taxes from their companies. Whilst, long distance transportation makes bad pollution. This is because cars which they use to deliver the number of goods cause carbon emission. For example, most cars which in the street make out bad pollution are danger for human life. As a result, the number of goods which are transported over long distance are not really good for human. There is no more reason that this problem can create carbon emission.

To sum up, producing the number of goods can give many benefits for some corporations and the government because they can add their profits. On the other hand, there are many drawbacks which can damage human life. For this problems, Corporations and the government should make good environment and do not think just about their profits.
mohjawahir   
Apr 2, 2015
Scholarship / Participating in the Global Leaders Program will equip me with the knowledge and skills needed [2]

Learning is a never ending process for me, more over related to the importance of building self development, to create future great leadersgreat future of leaders to contribute to the developments of nation and the large community which I'm being part of. Becoming great leader need leadershipneeds leadership and I believe leadership is more than being in charge and managing people. Leadership is what separate good leaders from great leaders. It is the skills to create more new leaders
mohjawahir   
Apr 2, 2015
Writing Feedback / Friendship essay; As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend [3]

Last, be a good listener is the important and essential for a friendbeing a good listener is the important thing for a friend (important and essential are the same meaning) . what friends are for is, when sometimes a person cannot tell their parents or other people something then she/he come to their friend. if she/he feel down, ask them what's wrong, and really listen to the story or answer. Friends can give some help or advice while listening. listening show that friend care about she/he, Without listening skill, the friendship is empty.
mohjawahir   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Alternative methods of the world exploring [3]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching televisions programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you can learn by watching televisions programmes and films about it?


Globalization era makes people easy to explore the world where they want to know without visiting it. Actually, there are some alternative methods of getting it. As such, watching television programs and films is good way for some people to achieve more, and this is simple manner because people should not spend a lot of time and much money. On the other hand, for some others, visiting other countries is better which people cannot obtain some information just by watching televisions channels and movies which have not covered yet all about those countries. If I were to choose, I would rather visiting another country than watching televised documentary shows and videos.

For busy people, watching television programs and films is the best method to explore the world because they do not spend a great lot of time and much money. For example, workers who work in a full day for a week are more likely to choose this way in order to obtain more knowledge from other countries. As a result, workers enable to get both finishing their works and achieving lots of knowledge from other countries.

On the other hand, most travelers are really keen on truly visiting another country. First of all, this is because not all information is covered in television programs and movies. Taking scientists as an example, it is not enough for scientists to research without visiting it, so as that visiting it is a must for them. Also, tourists can learn foreign language and local inhabitants' culture when they travel to their destination. As such, it would be better for people to learn more directly to native inhabitants. Not only this, great moment will be spectacular experience for visitors because they actually can enjoy it.

Finally, visiting other countries is spending much time and lots of money. Because of this some people prefer to watch televisions programs and videos. However, there is no guarantee about the validity of televisions programs and movies. Furthermore, I would argue that it is better for people to visit another country personally.
mohjawahir   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move [4]

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Several years ago, living in the same place was familiar for indigenous people. As such, some people argue that staying in the same place makes them deliriously happy to live together with their family, but this makes them hard to get a lot of information from other countries. On the other hand, some others tend to move from one to another place due to trying to achieve a high standard of living, while they are going to be difficult to get a new job. Therefore, it is believed that there are same merits and demerits of these issues.

Happiness is a reason why some people are more likely to live in the same place because they can always gather with their families which will help them when they get some problems. For instance, parents can create quality time with their children whenever they want. As a result, all family members become closer each other. In contrast, gaining information is a problem of this situation. This is because it is seldom for people to travel to other places. Taking elderly people who lived in countryside as an example, they tend to choose living in the same place and rarely go to another place which resulted less information they get.

In the same case, people who choose a nomadic live face difficulty in getting job. This is because they are new comers, so as that they have to adapt at the beginning for seeking some occupations. For example, they have to apply for working at a company. Consequently, they need a long time to be accepted working in that company. However, this living choice is an opportunity to upgrade people's social level as people are able to obtain success in the future. As a matter of fact, in 2012, most Indonesian inhabitants from countryside moved to Jakarta which is one of big cities in Indonesia hoped achieving a high quality of life. A case in point, there is no doubt that this has improved people's lives specifically in the term of obtaining good health and well education for their children.

To conclude, although there are many drawbacks either moving from one to another place or staying in the same place, it is strongly believed that these principally give people good opportunities to enhance their live for movers and provide a happy circumstance for people who are enjoying in the same place. It is hoped that It would be better for nomads to be well-prepared all consequences in order to face all probable obstacles readily.
mohjawahir   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / The current phenomenon of purchasing books online [3]

In addition, stores that operate exclusively online can afford to dramatically reduce their prices. It is benefit for owners of store and buyers. For buyers, they can get cheaper books online. And for owners, they do not have toshould not buy a space for the actual store nor hire an army of employees to help the clients
mohjawahir   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities [3]

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Introduction

In some countries, buildings in a city represent local inhabitants' culture. Because of this, some people reveal that magnificent buildings have lost native culture which resulted more changes amongst indigenous people such hedonistic culture, and increase the predominant reason of global warming due to greenhouse effects. However, some others argue that tall buildings are able to attract most tourists so as that it increases a high standard life of citizens, and add taxes for governments' income. Therefore, I would argue that modern buildings give more benefits, but this is hard for people to accept any change.

To begin, native culture changes are essential problems for some people because they might loose the city's spirit which symbolizes the spirit of indigenous people. Taking Jakarta where is common with "betawi" Indonesian people called as an example, there is a significant change which caused citizens loosing their spirit because they have to adapt with most comers who bring their own habits. As the result, modern buildings which have replaced old buildings in Jakarta are automatically becoming problems for citizens and difficult for them to accept it.

However, the benefits of an attractive city with many spectacular buildings appeal most tourists in the world. Firstly, there has been a large increase in economic related the wealthy of citizens, especially hotel industry because all visitors who come in the cities need places to take a rest. In fact, in 2013, over 3 million tourists visited Jakarta to spend their leisure time, so as that they have to rent a cottage or hotel. In addition, tourists increase city councils' profit due to taxes which visitors paid. Not only this, local inhabitants can learn and practice foreign language from tourists such tourists from USA or Netherlands. Because of this, local people should not spend lots of money to learn more about it.

In conclusion, although some people argue modern buildings have changed their own local culture. I strongly believe that tall buildings which are built in cities are able to attract most tourists. Therefore, citizens and governments get more advantages which increase a high standard life of citizens and state' profit.
mohjawahir   
Apr 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Ethic and doing business internationally [2]

Japanese business executive rarely says "no", they tend to take a long discussion until their colleagues realize that the answer is truly negative.
mohjawahir   
Apr 8, 2015
Undergraduate / KAIST personal statement - O & A level results. [5]

I think that you should write from the beginning such brainstorming your idea or you can read some essays in the Internet before you write more.
mohjawahir   
Apr 11, 2015
Writing Feedback / Overusing of a common language encourages people to invent a new language for communication [3]

Should we invent a new language for people from different countries to use for the International communication? Do you think there are more benefits or more problems with it?

Using more languages is able to support international communication. As a matter of fact, overusing of a common language encourages people to invent a new language as their new way of communication. While, that can be acceptable in several aspects, I firmly believe that it will have a lot of merits for helping communication amongst universal inhabitants.

To begin, maintaining English as an international language creates more large opportunities because of several reasons. First of all, most people in many countries have known about English. Thus, this condition makes people easier for promoting global trade in order to achieve more partnerships of business. In addition, people should not be hard to learn English because almost all states have applied English as a subject of curriculum in their education's system from the lowest level until the high one. Not only this, English is one of requirements when students want to enroll in most universities around the world. For this reason, it will be difficult for some students if they have to change another language as a requirement of enrollment.

On the other hand, the predominant problem of using a new language for global language is that it might affect damaging on cultural diversity and identity, especially for the ethnic minorities which caused languages in these countries suffering from extinction because people have to learn a new language for keeping the pace of life with a big burden. Taking Mandarin as an example, in 2015, almost all countries in South East Asian have had agreement with China to conduct free trade among them, so as that mastering Mandarin is a must for people to communicate with others in these communities, yet it will be a retrogression for developing countries such Indonesia. As a result, maintaining English as an international language is more effective than innovating a brand-new one.

To conclude, although inventing a new language as a global way of communication becomes an obligation for some communities due to their business, protecting one language as a way of international communication has some profits for societies.
mohjawahir   
Apr 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Proportions of travelers to England who visited art gallery, pavilion, pier or festival in Brighton [2]

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates changes the number of travelers to England for visiting four different attractions in Brighton and is measured in percentage from 1980 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, over the period as a whole the percentage of tourists decreased gradually in art gallery.

Pavilion and festival stood at a fairly similar level of between a quarter and less than a third in 1980, but while visitors of pavilion rose significantly over the following ten years, tourists of festival decreased steadily to around 25 % in 1995. However, they both then followed a similar trend, remaining stabled at 26 % (festival) and 31 % (pavilion).

Pier had a more erratic pattern of visitors than the other three attractions. In 1980, tourists of pier stood only at ten percent which was the lowest level than art gallery, pavilion or festival. Whereas art gallery rose significantly at 38 percent in 1985, tourists experienced a significant fall to 8 percent in the end of period.



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mohjawahir   
Apr 14, 2015
Writing Feedback / Life now is better than it was 100 years ago though people in the past were able to enjoy their time [2]

Life now is better than it was 100 years ago.

In recent decades, the advanced technology has made most people easy to gain what they want. Because of this, some people argue that life today is better due to achieving the highest standard of living than life in a hundred year ago where people were hard to obtain well education and much knowledge easily. If I were to choose, I would rather life in this day and age, than life in the past.

Achieving a high standard life is possible for all inhabitants because of several reasons. First of all, a number of indigenous people are able to obtain well education because most countries provide some schools with high qualities which students can get easily. Taking citizens in big cities as an example, most students there get better facilities such laboratories, so as that students can improve their skills quickly. In addition, there are many great opportunities for people to achieve success in their bright future because some corporations need more workers such a large industrial city which gives some occupations for citizens. Not only this, the high quality of technology has created good healthy for societies because the number of hospitals have used some good tools to look after the patients and it makes doctors easy.

On the other hand, life in the past can make convenient because they are able to focus on their works without any obstacles. For instance, most farmers enjoyed working in agricultural land with traditional tools. As a result, they do not get serious problems and they feel deliriously happy with their families due to making quality time with them easily whenever they want.

To conclude, although people in the past felt comfortable with their families and were able to enjoy their time whenever they want, people' lives nowadays are better as they can achieve a high standard of living and they should use the time effectively by helping machines.
mohjawahir   
Apr 14, 2015
Writing Feedback / Being better life by advanced technology (IELTS Task 2) [2]

With regarding to live in the past, almost people used limited facilities. For example, if young people in wanted to play football, they would go to dirty field as their places to play sport because there is no modern field around their areas, which is good enough for them. As a result, it is difficult to explore young people's talent because of minimum facilities.
mohjawahir   
Apr 14, 2015
Writing Feedback / The table provides the information which city is more expensive: Riverdale or Cape Alicia [3]

The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities as compared to the national cost-of-living average.

The table chart compares the cost averages of living in two different cities with the national cost average of living, and is measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that although the figure of housing is the most popular in Riverdale, it is the lowest level in Cape Alicia.

The highest level in this trend is housing which stood at 19 % and it is followed by the fairly popular which is only 7 percent. Also, there are three other kinds of subjects which have similar pattern, and it is approximately 4,5 % which is specifically 4 percent (transportation), 4,5 % (utilities), and 4,7 percent (groceries), then there is the fairly lowest in this level which is also 5,5 percent (clothing).

On the other hand, generally Cape Alicia has lower cost than Riverdale. Utilities is the highest cost which is 1,2 % while housing is the lowest one in this trend. Health care and groceries have a similar pattern that they both are only 0,8 % and 0,5 %. Furthermore, clothing is the fairly highest on this level which was 1 %, and transportation is the fairly lowest which is only - 3,8 percent.



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mohjawahir   
Apr 17, 2015
Essays / Applications essay assistance - how to start? [3]

let me try to give you suggestion : the first step : you might need to brainstorm your idea and then try to write your idea starting by introduction - body paragraph then conclusion.
mohjawahir   
Apr 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors [2]

Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world.
How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the modern life has created a number of children to stay more indoors due to totally meeting their needs for the bright future. Because of this, many children are more likely to spend a lot of time to study some subjects such foreign language at course after finishing their study at schools, but this automatically gets children less time to explore the natural world. Therefore, I would argue that it becomes more substantial for children to gain well education from natural environment than spending lots of time at homes for studying several subjects.

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mohjawahir   
Apr 18, 2015
Writing Feedback / The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country [2]

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had Internet access between 1999 and 2004.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the number of population who has access to the Internet of urban/suburban and rural areas in a European country during five years from 1999 to 2004, and is measured in percentage. Clearly, what stands out from the graphs reveals that suburban and rural areas increased steadily over the period. Noted, suburban areas record the highest percentage of all, and this figure shows significant percentage increases in the latter area.

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mohjawahir   
Apr 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / The priority is to minimize a high cost of people's budget when they want to go anywhere [2]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public transportation systems in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution.

Do you think it is better for governments to spend money developing public transportation or developing new kinds of cars? Why or why not? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, in many big cities around the world, private cars which produce many carbon emissions have become serious problems. As such, some people argue that governments should spend funding to build the number of public transportation systems in order to reduce pollution which affects a significant increase of global warming. However, others believe that it would be better if the city councils spend much money to develop electric and other types of cars which are believed to alleviate bad pollution.

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