Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

I want to write statement of purpose actually. Suggest me what should i do? adding or subtracting something? What if I add some line in front of it like

"I write to express interest in applying for the international master of research program in 'Earth science with focus on geophysics' in your institution. I have a strong desire to practice the research of Geophysics. When I finished High School I knew that I wanted to study any subject that lead me to do some research, but I was not sure which field of research would be the best. I did some study and found that studying physics is fascinating. I read about the Geophysics in that course, part of seismic evaluation, and the scope of Geophysics methods and I found it very interesting because mathematics is involved in the process. I loved mathematics since I was a child and the orderliness of mathematics in Geophysics was the principal factor which encouraged me to choose that subject.

While studying pure physics, I was very interested in the courses about Gravity and Magnetization. I am working in a project related to magnetic methods where we are looking for influence of some atom on some material for changing magnetic property. I am in charge of processing the data. "

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

What about this one?
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Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

I hope so.I Wish if i could be a better writer of various statement :P :). Take a look at this one:

I have a strong desire to practice the research of Geophysics. This is in-line with ...

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

is it ok ?

This is in-line with my career goals of becoming a top notch Geoscientist/ Research Consultant/Teacher. I need to know about earth and various planets ...

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

Yes, of course, why not? You are good at it. I like it. Also it will be very good for me

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

Truthfully it is great but they told me write about 750 words and give some questions about that statement to write about my past work and preparation about subject and academic plans and research on their university and how will it fill and help my career goals. Actually in there my future career is not indicated and also my preparation for that subject not also added other than that everything is OK brother. What are you say about adding 2nd paragraph and the last one?

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

What you think if we add this thing like that? It give's a view about my future work and also past. Also how i made preparation from start. But what am I thinking that the second paragraph's starting is little bit outlined.

The Earth's magnetic property changes with the spin of different material which is a liquid that is formed at its core. The gravity field varies with perturbation of mass on the earth surface. So, does this mean that gravity depends on the mass of the planet? What will happen if the materials in core are stopped spinning? Why materials in core are spinning? Is the temperature main reason behind this spinning? Is it also applicable for other planets? I want to find the truth behind these questions.

The undergraduate curriculum in pure physics at BBB university introduced me to a wide scope of subjects. Various courses like Electricity and Magnetism, Relativity, Classical mechanics, Quantum mechanics, Solid states, Geophysics etc. was completed with different methods of prospecting and interpretation. In that time, one of the professors taught us about relativity and geophysics and not only increase my curiosity but also made my focus on the gravitational and magnetic field greatly. He taught us some of geophysical and relativistic methods in his course including seismic evaluation and curvature coordinates and when I asked question about that he made a clear notion that if you want to understand about the magnetization and gravity properly, then you have to understand about the layers of earth or layers of that particular planet or thing and it's mass variety and difference of materials.

Based on my personal point of view, I decided to pursue research that would help me get closer the answers that I seek. Currently, I am working on some material with Prof. XXX at BBB University. As colleagues, we are researching about the influence of an atom on the magnetic property of an item. This research has helped me understand how magnetic property varies with different material combinations, which led me to understand the concept and results behind the liquid material spinning in core and partial melting solid in asthenosphere.

For research on geophysics, I found the work of Prof. FFF in your institution quite interesting in terms of its relevance in seismological evaluation and geophysics. It is my hope that, upon admission to your university, I will be given the opportunity to attend classes conducted by and work alongside Prof. FFF in furthering her research. I desire to complete research earth science and engineering with a focus on geophysics for my master's thesis.

Through Geophysics, I will be able to use a variety of instruments that rely on the principle of geology and physics to locate magnetic and gravitational features without having to disturb the earth and to do further study about the earth and different planet. This research demands innovative thinkers to come up with cost-effective methods of searching large areas of ground in the shortest time possible. Benefits of geophysicists include working outdoors for acquisition of seismic data, using the latest technological equipment.My career goal is to become a top notch Geoscientist/ Research Consultant/Teacher. Geophysics is a very tangible field for research and completing research and degree from your institution which will help me to find my answers and reach to my goal.

Graduate / Research on geophysics what explores fascination about the earth and planetary science [17]

Thanks a lot, Friend.