Undergraduate / My dream of becoming a corporate lawyer. Columbia - Why this major personal statement? [4]

I feel you did a good job at answering the question, and gave a clear reason as to why you picked your field. The only thing I can suggest is maybe switching up the order of the paragraphs, or adding in transition sentences if the word limit allows. Right now, it feels just a tad bit choppy. But that's just being nit-picky; other than that, I think it's a good essay.