Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 ( numerous teachers who acceptance in ontario over 7-year period) [6]

WRITING TASK 1

The graph illustrates about numerous teachers who acceptance in ontario over 7-year period from 2001 to 2007. Overall, Frence-language teachers were more acceptance than English-language teachers. After that, there was a upward trend of Frence-language teachers. In contrast, English-language teachers was fell gradually between 2001 and 2007.

As can be clearly seen, English-language teachers were decreased extremely from approximately 72 percent in 2001 to 40 percent in 2003. After that, there was a slighty rose in 2005 by 3 percent. Furthermore, there was decreased moderately to 28 percent in 2007.

The graph also shows French-language teachers was fell sharply from 70 percent in 2001 to around 52 percent in 2002. Then, rose again in 2003 by 10 percent. After that, there was a fluctuated between 2003 and 2007. Finally, there was a peak in 2007 at 73 percent.

Writing Feedback / Writing test 2 (media prefer to make news about famous people such as actors, singers, etc) [3]

WRITING TASK 2

Nowadays, most of media prefer to make news about famous people such as actors,singers, and sports player. They decide to choose them because more attract viewers and readers. On other hand, numerous people who have best achievement and involve in many activity are seldom to show, they prefer to show calebrity's life. Honestly, in my view news about popular people is essential, but show unknown poeple who has good achievement is better.

In my opinion, calebrities became trending topics because their popularity, so media will show their life or relationship and it can cause media probably get more much money. Nevertheless, sometimes it can bad affect to audience particularly children. It can be happen, because media often make a bad news about scandals or cases which have calebrity, so when people even children see that will influence and follow that bad activity, it's very dangerous. Therefore, I think media should make other good news regarding unknown people.

As we know, numerous people who don't have popularity like actor or singer but they have many achievements. It can inspire many poeple, and edia should report about them. For example, Siti from bekasi she got scholarship to Germany because her achievements. She graduated from best university in Indonesia with best score, and because that she got scholarship to continued her study. She is very smart and dilligent, but if you know, his father's jobs is driver's motorcyle or we usually called ojek. It's very inspire many people. I think many people in this country like Siti and every people must know about them.

In conclusion, famous people and ordinary people are equal important. Media will get more profit because calebrity and audience will get advantages about good story from ordinary people. From all of them I think media better to make more news about inspiration people but still show about calebrity news because is important to their business.

Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) Study: The Rich Really Are More Selfish [3]

Pundits said inhabitants who has less money or low education prove from research that they have more compassion and empathy than their wealthy counterparts, according from psychological studies. In social scientist speak, "self-oriented behavior" is more likely to be exhibited by people with higher educations, excelent jobs, high incomes, and overall higher-ranking social status.The paper also claims that people with less education and less money tend to be more generous with what money they do have

Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) Only Rich Kids Should Go to College [3]

What is only wealthy kids can continue their study to college? It's like an weird question. Many evidence increase about that, if you must borrow money to pay for college choose to work than take a higher education. Perhaps that only the rich (or those who get full-scholarships and grants). So it seem that only rich kids who can continue their study.

Writing Feedback / (TED Summary) Robot that "show emotion" [6]

David Hanson as a robotic designer who has opportunity to shows his invention. He present a video to introduced a robot which has truly emotion like human. It can give various expression like smile, angry, and sad. It also can responded and recognized people surrounding. Although, there are many developed to make robot like that. He believe in the future, robot will has ability to understand your speech and feeling, and even can make relationship with human.

Writing Feedback / (Summary Article) This Is the World's Most Expensive City for Expatriates [3]

Recently, The company named Mercer which usually survey about the most expensive city in the world, launched new rank regarding that. They announced that Hongkong as the most expensive city for tourist and immigrant. The living cost in there was tremendous expensive including housing, food and entertainment. The company found that price of coffee in Hongkong approximately $8 twice as much as London ($4.40) and Tokyo ($4.00).

Writing Feedback / (TED Summary) We are worried about local warming in your laptop [3]

Yossi Vardi as a investor and prankster who has presentation about local warming from laptop can disrupt human's fertility particularly very dangerous for male. He initial give information that nowadays most of people only concern about global warming problem and ignore about local warming. Therefore, that problem become essential because numerous people don't know that when they put laptop on leg is harmfull to sexual healthy.