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Name: Maryam Bakr
Joined: Dec 31, 2017
Last Post: Jan 16, 2018
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From: Egypt
School: El-Salam secondary school

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MariamBakr2001   
Jan 16, 2018
Writing Feedback / Essay: Describe what you usually do in your leisure time. [5]

It's good enough, so I don't have much advice to correct it, but I have some suggestions for you if you want a higher score.

- You should try to write more words. Your essay is just too short and not strong enough.
-there're some mistakes such as:
Except -->Except for
Coming there -->Coming here
MariamBakr2001   
Jan 15, 2018
Scholarship / An activity, complicated issue - two short personal statements answers [2]

Personal Statement's Questions With Answers



1-Describe an activity that you pursue or a personal interest (Avoid the temptation to list everything that you have ever done. We want to hear about what matters to you most.)

-->I trained myself how to play the violin using the internet and self-learning, this was a great adventure and gave me a passion for knowing more about music, with time, violin became my favorite hobby.I am exerting more effort, to be capable of writing notes and playing in Opera Concert. I watched an online course about the philosophy at Harvard University called " Justice" it generated a belief that equality and justice may be different from one person to another, This session has increased my sense of acceptance of the others' opinions and attended a workshop about philosophy in AUC last summer.

I admired computer science and wanted to know more about this part of science, I searched for it and decided to learn how websites built I started learning how to code online lately.I took courses in coding online in Udemy and Codecademy, I've learned HTML and CSS.(149 words) (max 150)

2-Choose an issue that you think people lack an understanding of, and explain it.

-->Extremism.
Extremism has become part of the daily life, rarely spends a day without happening in some part of the world. What people ignore or don't give it an interest that extremism occurs since childhood when a young boy bullies someone else reflecting aggressive behavior on him which makes the bulled boy suffers from the psychological conditions as suppression. That makes the community less productive and full of people who can't move on or overcome their fears. I want to spread awareness about this problem to make parents extra aware of the strange actions of their children. I believe people need to lean towards acceptance of the differences and diversities of each human being and should learn that change will not happen without showing solidarity and tolerance to others while offering them what maybe they were not lucky enough to come by during their own knowledge.

(146 words) (max 150)
MariamBakr2001   
Jan 13, 2018
Writing Feedback / My own ways to improve the life in my hometown [5]

That's a great topic, but there are some mistakes let's check them.
specific reasons an examples to support your answer-->Use specific reasons examples to support your answer
has severe impact -->has a severe impact
the public aware about the importance -->the public aware of the importance

[s ]and cause long term effects. --> and cause long-term effects.
MariamBakr2001   
Dec 31, 2017
Undergraduate / Women empowerment what why and how [3]

What about your background and/or interests makes you competitive for this particular program (please be as specific as possible)? What will you contribute to the group? How do you expect this experience will affect your future academic and professional career? How will it affect you personally? What would you most like to share with Americans about Egypt and your culture?

being a worthwhile participant of this program



Observing the successful women in the world, I am lead to believe that I can accomplish something valuable and make my life more significant for myself, as well as the others around me if I put the knowledge and skills I have obtained over the years to good use. The inadequate education system was not the only obstacle I had to overcome I am a girl from a family suffers hugely from ignorance. I lacked support, inspiration and suffered from gender discrimination through my way it required extraordinary determination and efforts for the society to accept me. And due to lack of financial resources, I worked part-time which lead me to experience the disturbing reality. It is not less than a miracle that today I am enrolled in Medical school, it shows how much I am a hard-working and self-motivated person. I stood tall against all, I have experienced that your struggle pays you back, it blossomed the good in me. I consider myself to be an energetic, hardworking and ambitious individual. Partaking in a teamwork as both a member and a leader has improved my teamwork skills, leadership, proficiency, and communication skills. I volunteered for helping in renewing Al-Tahrir square after 28th Jun revolution. I volunteered for helping in hospital on 30 June revolution. I participated in MSAU ( Model simulation of African Union ) learned a lot through interaction with people from diverse cultures. Besides all these activities I am among brilliant students of my batch. Academically, I aspire to be at the top in my field. Therefore I do not want to limit myself to the current degree, instead, I want to explore the extent of my field through participating in different programs such as this, which will help me develop my social and educational skills and reform my abilities to perform even better. So that one day I could be a part of something even better, which will hopefully serve the society in a best possible way.

My ultimate goal will be to work for the betterment of those women who are still denied of their basic right in education. I saw how much the women in my society are underrated and abused through their lives. To be a female means stereotyped to be mothers and housewives with no right in education it is the native of this society, I saw what happens to many ambitious young girls when they fought those beliefs they got hurt by their families who did not allow such challenging actions. I spent time with abused girls during my work with a group from my college to increase awareness about FGM (Female genital mutilation) I devoted a plenty of my time to this idea and I have faith in it I want to develop it, I saw myself in them I felt their anger at the injustice in the world and their resolve to put an end to it. Those girls were suffering tremendously instead of being educated they were being imprisoned in a cage of illiteracy, my work with them has broadened my horizon. They have inspired me in so many ways. I want to tell their stories to help the world to hear their voices.

As the US is one of the world's greatest nations traveling there and understanding their methodology of working something out, will help me in developing my own technique to support in my society, I am enthusiast about the idea of defining my homeland. I come from a mixed background, as I did not live in the urban area all my life which will help me to deliver the most detailed picture of my country. Egypt has a rich historical background which is underestimated. I want to share all about the history of women in my country, and how much they fought for their rights. Moreover, interaction with heterogeneous community will have a positive effect on my personality, my whole life, and career, and Therefore I believe it would be an ideal platform for me to go beyond the limits and experience something different which will boost up my creativity, my visit will serve as something very positive with regard to women empowerment.
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