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Name: Jainam Shah
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Last Post: Sep 23, 2018
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School: Woodbridge High School

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Jainam_Shah   
Sep 23, 2018
Undergraduate / An impromptu speech without any earlier preparation - my response for a problem [3]

Maybe you can change, "No, I was wrong," to another descriptive adverb like shockingly or surprisingly that can convey the sudden moment and feelings you had. You do a good job of showing and not telling. Also you can change if you want the phrase, "I decided to speak," to " My mind quickly conjured to speak on my struggle," as this phrase conveys that the speech was on spot.
Jainam_Shah   
Sep 23, 2018
Scholarship / QuestBridge Miscelleneous Short Questions for college application [3]

Hello these are short answer questions for my college application I have wrote that are capped at 35 words. I would appreciate any feedback on the answers

Miscelleneous Short Answer Questions



Tell us about one of your proudest achievements or moments and what it says about you.

One of my proudest achievements was receiving a B in AP English and Language Composition. This may seem counter-intuitive as many would expect higher grades to be considered achievements, but in this case not for me. Prior to my sophomore year, I had pride that I received all A's and vowed that I would never receive a B. At the end of my first semester, as a sophomore, I saw my final score was not enough to earn an A. For the first week of my winter break I spent mulling over my grade, but the second week I realized that this mindset would lead me to failure solely. I decided to rather rejuvenate for the rest of my break and use this as a learning opportunity for next semester. From this point on I didn't go to class to earn an A, but rather to actually enjoy the material and work hard. Overtime, this new mindset led me to have a better mental state and I began enjoying all my classes without a fear of not getting an A.

What is your favorite subject to study, and why?

Science has been my favorite subject. The mathematics and critical thinking necessary has led me to failure multiple times, but that failure helps me to persevere. The journey from failure to achievement keeps me motivated.

What are your favorite books and/or movies?

My favorite book is Holes as it depicts a story of a shy boy whose experiences I can relate to. My favorite movies are Interstellar, The Matrix, and Mission:Impossible-Fallout

What is your favorite source of inspiration?

Steve Jobs is my favorite source of inspiration as from his battle with pancreatic cancer he has taught me that there is nothing to lose in life and no reason not to follow your heart.

How do you spend a typical weekend?

On Saturdays I do the laundry, vacuum the house, and finish any homework I have. On Sunday's I visit my temple to volunteer, and at night I write in my journal and watch TV.

What is the compliment that you have been paid that you are most proud of? Who gave you the compliment?
I am most proud of my mom saying, "I am proud to raise you," after I took care of my ill grandmother while my mom was in the hospital.

After a challenging experience, how do you rejuvenate?

I rejuvenate by taking a nap to relax my brain or listening to some pop music to clear my mind of any tension. Then I am ready to be productive.

What would you contribute to your future college campus community?

I would form a MCAT tutoring club where anyone can prepare together for this admission test without feeling the need of spending their money on expensive preparation classes.
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