liz012
Jul 29, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS T2 View on shopping becoming a hobby instead of a routine domestic task [4]
Hi, this is my writing for IELTS task 2. Thanks for taking a look, it means so much to me!
Nowadays, shopping is no longer a chore but a hobby. In the past, people only spend money on daily necessities. However, as time goes by, people's standard of living has improved, shopping no longer limit to necessities but can be or pleasure. Though there are some drawbacks to this trend, the positive impacts are far more remarkable.
Shopping as a hobby means that people are putting more money into buying extraordinary things. It in turn favours international trading. Businessmen strikes to provide innovative and new products to customers. Subsequently, it creates more jobs. For example, fast fashion has taken the fashion world by storm. It creates large demand for affordable clothing, which can only be made in less developed countries where the cost of labour is the least. Nevertheless, it provides job opportunities and help these impoverished countries to keep up with the development of other countries. Moreover, it can be a life changer to these people by improving their livelihood.
Furthermore, i provides the exchange of cultures. Some people spend money on artifacts as a hobby, it may not be of practical use but it definitely carries history and culture. The image of the Tower of London appears on various keychains and T-shirts across London. Imagine how many tourists will be intrigued to learn the history of the Tower of London because of these souvenirs all round the city due to the demand of shopping for leisure.
To me, the change of shopping culture brings more positivity than drawbacks. There is never a change that is perfect and acceptable by all but I do believe this change in the nature of shopping is beneficial to us on the long-term.
Hi, this is my writing for IELTS task 2. Thanks for taking a look, it means so much to me!
To what extend do you think shopping becoming a hobby instead of a routine task in the past is a positive trend?
Nowadays, shopping is no longer a chore but a hobby. In the past, people only spend money on daily necessities. However, as time goes by, people's standard of living has improved, shopping no longer limit to necessities but can be or pleasure. Though there are some drawbacks to this trend, the positive impacts are far more remarkable.
Shopping as a hobby means that people are putting more money into buying extraordinary things. It in turn favours international trading. Businessmen strikes to provide innovative and new products to customers. Subsequently, it creates more jobs. For example, fast fashion has taken the fashion world by storm. It creates large demand for affordable clothing, which can only be made in less developed countries where the cost of labour is the least. Nevertheless, it provides job opportunities and help these impoverished countries to keep up with the development of other countries. Moreover, it can be a life changer to these people by improving their livelihood.
Furthermore, i provides the exchange of cultures. Some people spend money on artifacts as a hobby, it may not be of practical use but it definitely carries history and culture. The image of the Tower of London appears on various keychains and T-shirts across London. Imagine how many tourists will be intrigued to learn the history of the Tower of London because of these souvenirs all round the city due to the demand of shopping for leisure.
To me, the change of shopping culture brings more positivity than drawbacks. There is never a change that is perfect and acceptable by all but I do believe this change in the nature of shopping is beneficial to us on the long-term.
