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Name: Yevhen Shcherbinin
Joined: Dec 27, 2020
Last Post: Dec 27, 2020
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From: Ukraine
School: Richelieu lyceum

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Dec 27, 2020
Undergraduate / My success - who you are - University of British Columbia Personal profile essay [2]

Hello everyone! I'm an international student from Ukraine, and I am applying to UBC currently. Can you give feedback on my essay, please? I will be grateful

Tell us about who you are.


How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why.


My friend once told me that I am a person, who easily succeeds in everything. These words sounded nice, but they hurted me because it wasn't the type of person which I want to become. In my mind, someone, who is good at everything, isn't significant in anything. Although, they were fair: the person, who said it, was my classmate, and I truly cope with the curriculum without problems and have the best grades in class, not putting more effort, than other students do. I continued thinking about it and eventually concluded that this is my strong side.

Not spending so much time on what most do, I can invest it into spheres, which develop me and are engaging and valuable to me. One of these spheres is Economic science: I do researches and participate in competitions. In particular, I took second place at the All-Ukrainian Economics Olympiad. My hobby is Irish dance, and I can devote my time to this exciting process.

I am a participant in the lyceum's parliament, where we are launching useful for school projects and protecting interests of students. When I see an opportunity, I try to help people by volunteering. For example, I helped with building a school for special needs children «Mozayka».

Eventually, I will use all my potential when I face a real challenge. And so I will be able to successfully study even in such a high ranked university, as UBC.

Thanks again!
meugen   
Dec 27, 2020
Undergraduate / The practical values of Liberal Arts - WESLEYAN ADDITIONAL ESSAY [4]

Hi!
In your place, I will split the first paragraph into two separate to make it easier to perceive. I also think that you should mention applications of your BA to some jobs, how it would help you do that job better, for example, to the job you mentioned in the beginning, or about opportunities which BA will open you. It will help you more fully connect your text to the question about the practical value and skills because questions you are talking about like Who we are? are pretty abstract