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Nov 29, 2009
Writing Feedback / IELTS: The power of advertising depends on society and goods! [5]
This is my first try of writing essay in English. So I would be appreciate for any notice about grammar, words using and overall structure of essay.
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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. (250 words)
Do you agree or disagree?
My opinion is that the correlation between the influence of power of advertising and real needs depends on the society and goods. In the countries with strong economic and big GDP, the advertising tends to play a noticeable role. On the other hand, in the poor countries advertising has secondary role. Also, I think the significance of advertising variates from market to market.
In markets, such the high-tech or educational ones, the influence of advertising is clearly visible. The grows of sales in it derived rather by advertising and fashion trends then by real needs. As a live example of this phenomenon we could see that people usually change or significantly upgrade home computers every two years. There is no actual need to do that, because the most used programs do not need such upgrade. At least it's possible to use a four years old computer for routine tasks without noticing any trouble.
Such "fashion oriented" markets are mostly grow in countries with strong economic. The reason is that the people of more poor countries have to care more about food, cloth and things which are posed on basic needs. For example, in India or Africa where the individual consumer power of is 5 times less than in USA, therefore the vital problem is to buy enough food and give education to children.
More conservative areas such as food market are not influenced by advertising as much as other areas. The cooking habits of people are resistant to changes and it's not so easy to invent some new product there. I think people more focused on quality of food and don't pay much attention to advertising. At least when I buy bread or potatoes I don't look to the brand of conductor.
As for varying from country to country I don't think much difference presented in such conservative markets. Eventually the rice, bread and milk are the same everywhere.
So my point is that significance of advertising is lowering for goods which meet the basic need. As for more virtual need such as entertainment the high sales are more reflected the power of advertising than real need of society or quality of product.
This is my first try of writing essay in English. So I would be appreciate for any notice about grammar, words using and overall structure of essay.
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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. (250 words)
Do you agree or disagree?
My opinion is that the correlation between the influence of power of advertising and real needs depends on the society and goods. In the countries with strong economic and big GDP, the advertising tends to play a noticeable role. On the other hand, in the poor countries advertising has secondary role. Also, I think the significance of advertising variates from market to market.
In markets, such the high-tech or educational ones, the influence of advertising is clearly visible. The grows of sales in it derived rather by advertising and fashion trends then by real needs. As a live example of this phenomenon we could see that people usually change or significantly upgrade home computers every two years. There is no actual need to do that, because the most used programs do not need such upgrade. At least it's possible to use a four years old computer for routine tasks without noticing any trouble.
Such "fashion oriented" markets are mostly grow in countries with strong economic. The reason is that the people of more poor countries have to care more about food, cloth and things which are posed on basic needs. For example, in India or Africa where the individual consumer power of is 5 times less than in USA, therefore the vital problem is to buy enough food and give education to children.
More conservative areas such as food market are not influenced by advertising as much as other areas. The cooking habits of people are resistant to changes and it's not so easy to invent some new product there. I think people more focused on quality of food and don't pay much attention to advertising. At least when I buy bread or potatoes I don't look to the brand of conductor.
As for varying from country to country I don't think much difference presented in such conservative markets. Eventually the rice, bread and milk are the same everywhere.
So my point is that significance of advertising is lowering for goods which meet the basic need. As for more virtual need such as entertainment the high sales are more reflected the power of advertising than real need of society or quality of product.
