shoffman
Nov 27, 2009
Undergraduate / My extracurricular essay about Ballroom dancing [2]
I am writing my extracurricular essay for the common app and wanted to know if this sounded alright. Thanks for the feedback.
When the beat starts it enters my ears with a slow-quick-quick and my senses are off on a journey anchored by my feet, as we walk on water across the dance floor. When I dance I get lost in a world where I have the confidence to do anything, but this is not how I started out in the fifth grade. Back then I was learning the basic steps, but soon I would be learning how to carry myself and how to express my personality through how I moved on the dance floor. The teachings of ballroom dance have also left the dance floor, as I have become more willing to engage in conversation with strangers and have also developed a certain kind of rhythm in my writing. Ballroom dancing is not just about technique, it is also a way of life and for me, self discovery.
I am writing my extracurricular essay for the common app and wanted to know if this sounded alright. Thanks for the feedback.
When the beat starts it enters my ears with a slow-quick-quick and my senses are off on a journey anchored by my feet, as we walk on water across the dance floor. When I dance I get lost in a world where I have the confidence to do anything, but this is not how I started out in the fifth grade. Back then I was learning the basic steps, but soon I would be learning how to carry myself and how to express my personality through how I moved on the dance floor. The teachings of ballroom dance have also left the dance floor, as I have become more willing to engage in conversation with strangers and have also developed a certain kind of rhythm in my writing. Ballroom dancing is not just about technique, it is also a way of life and for me, self discovery.