brownhopeful
Nov 14, 2010
Undergraduate / "the definition of a workaholic" - Yale Supplemental Essay Advice [7]
So this my supplement essay for Yale any advice, grammar corrections or organization tips would be welcomed!
Prompt: You have already told us about yourself in the Common Application, with its list of activities, Short Answer, and Personal Essay. In this required second essay, tell us something that you would like us to know about you that we might not get from the rest of your application
Lately, I've been thinking about my life and how it has passed by me by. It seems like only yesterday I was in the 4th grade coloring turkeys for the Thanksgiving holiday. Now I'm a senior at Branford High School who just got her first college acceptance letter. Overall, High school is great for me. I have countless friends, leadership positions and good grades; on the other hand, I have one regret about my high school experience. I was always moving too fast to truly enjoy it.
Ever since freshman year I've been enthusiastic about applying to, getting accepted to and ultimately preparing to attend college. During my sophomore year I started to research different colleges and join mailing lists (although I've always wanted to go to Yale). Throughout high school I placed all of my energy into preparing myself for future success. Now as I look back on my high school career I wish I had focused myself on what was happening in the present moment and slowed down to enjoy high school instead of constantly focusing on the future. At my Freshman Orientation my dear friend David Chadwick told me "High school goes by so fast, don't blink or you'll miss it". I did not understand until now how true those words really were. I blinked, and now I'm a High school senior who recently received her first college acceptance letter. However, I'm not the only one in America who constantly focuses on the future and never slows down to just experience life. In fact, many of my fellow Americans have made the same mistake I have. Mistakes like my own are made because every aspect of American culture is focused on speed and development. With developments have impeded our ability to slow down, appreciate life and has created the class of people known as workaholics. A workaholic is one who feels an incessant need to work and achieve success, no matter what the cost. My mother and I would both satisfy the definition of a workaholic. We are both so involved that we often miss what is going on around us.
Henry David Thoreau once remarked "Why should we be in such desperate haste to succeed, and in such desperate enterprises? If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer" (Walden). I'm not so sure that hear the beat of a different drummer but I do agree which what Thoreau says in this particular quote. I find it unfortunate that as a society we cannot slow down and truly appreciate the present moment. However, if I can realize the error of my ways while still in high school then the rest of society can as well.
So this my supplement essay for Yale any advice, grammar corrections or organization tips would be welcomed!
Prompt: You have already told us about yourself in the Common Application, with its list of activities, Short Answer, and Personal Essay. In this required second essay, tell us something that you would like us to know about you that we might not get from the rest of your application
Lately, I've been thinking about my life and how it has passed by me by. It seems like only yesterday I was in the 4th grade coloring turkeys for the Thanksgiving holiday. Now I'm a senior at Branford High School who just got her first college acceptance letter. Overall, High school is great for me. I have countless friends, leadership positions and good grades; on the other hand, I have one regret about my high school experience. I was always moving too fast to truly enjoy it.
Ever since freshman year I've been enthusiastic about applying to, getting accepted to and ultimately preparing to attend college. During my sophomore year I started to research different colleges and join mailing lists (although I've always wanted to go to Yale). Throughout high school I placed all of my energy into preparing myself for future success. Now as I look back on my high school career I wish I had focused myself on what was happening in the present moment and slowed down to enjoy high school instead of constantly focusing on the future. At my Freshman Orientation my dear friend David Chadwick told me "High school goes by so fast, don't blink or you'll miss it". I did not understand until now how true those words really were. I blinked, and now I'm a High school senior who recently received her first college acceptance letter. However, I'm not the only one in America who constantly focuses on the future and never slows down to just experience life. In fact, many of my fellow Americans have made the same mistake I have. Mistakes like my own are made because every aspect of American culture is focused on speed and development. With developments have impeded our ability to slow down, appreciate life and has created the class of people known as workaholics. A workaholic is one who feels an incessant need to work and achieve success, no matter what the cost. My mother and I would both satisfy the definition of a workaholic. We are both so involved that we often miss what is going on around us.
Henry David Thoreau once remarked "Why should we be in such desperate haste to succeed, and in such desperate enterprises? If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer" (Walden). I'm not so sure that hear the beat of a different drummer but I do agree which what Thoreau says in this particular quote. I find it unfortunate that as a society we cannot slow down and truly appreciate the present moment. However, if I can realize the error of my ways while still in high school then the rest of society can as well.