Writing Feedback / What are factors which are related to academic success in high-school students? [NEW]

As a high-school student, getting your distinctions is the pinnacle of our tedious academic endeavors. Thus drowning ourselves in textbooks and piles of notes is what most of us resorts to do. However, an imperative questions should be asked ; does strenuous and long hours of studying truly guarantees the distinctions that we need and ultimately success in our life? Or otherwise, there are many other factors that contribute in determining the academic success as a student?

First and foremost, it is an undeniable fact that one needs to study and do work conscientiously to improve on one's results. However, getting distinctions can not simply be achieved through long hours of staring at diagrams or regurgitating lines from textbooks. One needs to fully contemplate the subject in hand before one is able to answer questions regarding the matter. As a high-school student, the challenge that emerges would be to understand abundant materials within a short period of time before the examination. Therefore, the requisite skill is to be able to select important points and elaborate on it. Making mind maps and doing research from external sources may prove to be helpful in helping one to have profound understanding of the subject. Thus, innovative ways of studying is a factor that contribute to academic success.

Another factor which is often dismissed as unimportant would be parental support. Although in today's generation, high-school students no longer depends on their parents to ask for academic guidance, parents must still play an active role in doing whatever means necessary to provide moral as well as incentive support. For example, arranging tuition lessons might help their child to understand subjects taught at school which might be confusing at times. However more importantly, in times of discouragement and low spirit, parents should be by their children sides to encourage them. By doing so, students will be further driven to achieve success as there are people who are support them at all times.

Romantic relationships also proves to be a chief factor in relation to academic success of high-school students. Undeniably, these times are the age where we are most emotional and hormone-stimulated, thus romantic relationship is omnipresent. However, relationships can be beneficial or detrimental to one's academic endeavors. For instance, if the couple encourage one another to study and share their notes, the relationship in fact help them improve their studies. However, what more commonly found among high-school students is relationships becoming a distraction fro work and studies. Committing to one person undoubtedly take up lots of times and adversely time for studying must be sacrificed. The problem that usually ensues would be unattended works and falling marks. Therefore one needs to be able to manage time well to keep the balance between relationships and academics.

In a nutshell, academic success is affected by many external factors, however ultimately it depends on oneself. how one can manage time and efficiency of studies is the most crucial factor in achieving academic success.

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Writing Feedback / one word essay on time & quality of our life. [4]

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As our surroundings evolve into a fast paced and contemporary society, we are immersed in the mad rush to be more efficient and effective in our way of doing things from transportation down to communication. Surely these are made possible thanks to the advancement in technology which allows us to save as much time as we can. However, does saving time really made our life better and fulfilling? Or otherwise, this obsession of saving time which is indoctrinated in the minds of our generation in fact deteriorates the quality of the things that we done, or even worse, quality of our life?

One of the most ubiquitous practice to save time which seems to be favored by today's generation would undoubtedly be multitasking. Ever since the advent of sophisticated gadgets such as laptop, Ipad, and netbook, various jobs can be done simultaneously at the same time. Typing, listening to music, making calls, and doing research on the internet can be encapsulated using the same gadget. Therefore this practice does seems to save up valuable time for us to do other things. However, we have failed to realize the downside of multitasking, which is the lack of concentration as we can only give a portion of it for each task. Adversely, each task was done without any deep thinking or attention ascribed to it. It is not surprising then to see the quality of work deteriorates.

Meanwhile, what do we do with the valuable time that we so desperately tried to save up? If one claims that it can be used as time for relaxation, then one need to be corrected. We did not even enjoy those times as our leisure moments, but instead continue to work conscientiously regardless of anything. The rushed lifestyle that we adopted to have changed the way we perceive time. We are put in a rat race where the rule that applies is the fastest one to finish will acquire everything. Hence time saved is no longer appreciated but used for work and more work. Even worse, some assume that time used to straddle on the park, reading novels and enjoying fresh air is a waste of time. Upon observing this situation, one begs a question to differ, what then is the purpose of saving time if it is not appreciated?

The obsession with saving time also becomes the driving force of continuous advancement in technology. An example of it would be the introduction mobile phone which allows us to communicate easily using text messages or e-mail. Although this feature does make our way of communication by far more convenient, it has also diminishes the quality of conversation and relationships. There is no longer a need to meet face-to-face to share stories and laughter. Yet consequently the quality time supposedly spent with friends is instead replaced by interacting with a gadget. We may even develop to be a socially awkward person merely because we choose to save up time meeting up with someone. Hence, one can conclude that the obsession of saving time degraded our quality of life.

Thus, saving time should not be the foremost in everyone's mind as it does not always guarantee a better or more fulfilling life. Instead, sometimes it would also be good to slow down and give more attention to what we are doing, or our surroundings. Only then can we enjoy and appreciate the beauty of life.

This is just a free essay i made in preparation for my o level. I'm still a developing writer, so i would really appreciate some tips on my weaknesses. and please grade this upon 100. Thankyou so much!