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cupnoodle123   
Dec 23, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Grandpa matters' - Stanford What matters to you and why? [3]

Good essay :) But the prompt asks WHAT matters...

So maybe you should say that filial piety or caring about others matters to you, and for Why: show that you find caring about others important because of what your grandfather has taught you in life...

HOpe this helps, and please also look over and critique my essay "Elderly + Church" - I'd really appreciate it! Thanks
cupnoodle123   
Dec 23, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Classical economists' SOP for Graduate admission Msc Economics [3]

Whoa, is there a word limit for your essay...?

Just note: at about 650 wds, a college essay usually loses the reader

- The first paragraph is superfluous, you don't relate it back to yourself at all, so basically its just an info paragraph, which doesn't suit the prompt: I suggest you cut it out or integrate parts of that to ideas that show who you are/your opinions/your reactions

- Same wit the 2nd paragraph: do not write a research paper!! if colleges want, they can look it up on google and stuff...use every sentence and paragraph to answer the prompt, stick to it

- Much of your essay is just info...it doesn't show who you are except that you happen to know a lot a lot of knowledge about stuff, But that doesn't show your applying that knowledge to understanding and what prompt asks for

Hope this helps. Please, Please look at my essays too!! Especially my "Elderly + Church" common app essay, below. Thanks, I'd appreciate it a lot:)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 23, 2011
Undergraduate / 'travel to anywhere I want' - Extracurricular Essay [25]

I think what is missing is the Action that makes an extracurricular activity good...so far you just say you love to read, all the "places" and ppl you meet in books, and how those things have greased your imagination

Is there any way you could expound upon how this affected you, besides just inwardly? Per se, did you discuss it in depth with friends or cross into the realms of friendship after having a deep talk with your English teacher about it? Did it make you see stereotypes about today's culture, and then helped you revise the way to talked to others? These things would really make reading sound like an extracurricular, you know, "beyond the curriculum" and into the read world.

Oh, I would love it if you (and anyone) could read my Common App essay: "Elderly Center + Church", Thanks and I hoped this helps excel your essay further, because you have a great essay:)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 23, 2011
Undergraduate / Stanford Significant Exp: Elderly Center + Church [6]

Please offer your comments on this everyone! Thanks in advance...

Also, it is about 560 wds right now. Just to be concise, I hope to make it 500 if possible. It would be great if you guys tell me which parts seem superfluous:) Thanks a bunch!

Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

I was at church when I heard my parents share their dream of starting an elderly center. My mom said it was "an opportunity and desire from God," but I just groaned at the prospect of being sucked into helping them with this undertaking. Within a few months, they rented a commercial complex and renamed it "Enoch Center". The room's drab appearance seemed fitting for its purpose: to serve elderly. What a unique, divine provision, I thought smugly. Such humble beginnings: a table, cheap plastic chairs, free shelves discarded by others, and a divider to split this big box of a room into two.

I felt even bigger unbelief when my church urgently needed a new building to move into, and decided to move into the tiny Enoch Center. I expected this setup to be temporary and felt rather embarrassed for my church in the meantime. But it surprised me when I saw my church members, both young and old, eagerly help each other lift furniture all around the place. This teamwork of made me rather proud of my church. But though the place now looked decent, I would not have expected that I would come to treasure this building as my second home.

The complex was so small that it was possible for a person to be able to see everyone else in the same room, at any given time. Sometimes there was such a crowd, and hardly space to move about. But instead of anger, there was only laughter, joking, and friendship surrounding me. We all became so close, figuratively and literally, for there was no room not to be; the kitchen was also the office for two pastors, as well as the kids' classroom for Bible study. It was a similar situation throughout the complex. Thus, parents, kids, elderly, and college students all mingled together frequently. We overcame any shyness that could exist. I do not think a picture of a happy family on Christmas could have made me envious when I had this family every Sunday, and it made me grateful to realize that.

Over the five years that my church stayed at Enoch Center, I learned to be a more selfless server of others. Since my parents also managed the senior center, I would be frequently called to help them. On Sundays, I and my friends learned to vacuum the carpet, clean the toilets, and tidy the rooms after church ended. Eventually we simply enjoyed serving our church family in any way we could. I and the other girls helped teach Sunday school to younger kids, and the boys performed "men's work" for the church. Especially as a high school student in the prime of teenage years, when one could either choose to mature or rebel, growing in this church community helped develop my character permanently. Seeing how far my parents' dream has come, I no longer "despise the day of small beginnings" (Zech 4:10) because they can belie the positive turn situations may soon take. After this experience, my trust in God is stronger and my care for man is deeper, and out of a struggle has come great reward. I am glad my parents did not fear humble beginnings or share in my initial mockery. They showed me that conditions on the surface should not scare me away from pursuing a dream that feels right.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I want to be different and go to college' - experience and its impact on you [11]

I think this is great:D especially about the classroom equalizer part :)

Maybe also change the last sentence "I want to be different" It sounds pretty generic...which the rest of your essay has not been, so you should make it powerful to the very end!

If you don't mind, also look at mine!

ALSO this essay would be great for the American College (or was it Scholarship) Foundation's "Why a College Education is important to me" scholarship essay question - the q is something along those lines :) You should go for it, deadline is not too late!!!!
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / 'students doing community' Stanford: Extracurricular or Work Exp- Kiddies and Violins [5]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

We are Students for the Arts, StARTs. We are high school students doing community service, dedicating our time to further kids' education, answering the call to fight the budget cuts of programs in schools. Each week I and my buddies in this club carpool to a poorer inner-city elementary school to teach musical instruments and arts. The kids are always overly energetic, but also undeniably passionate to learn violin every time I visit. Despite lack of resources they have so much potential. I try to make their light bulbs flicker on to connect learning with future importance. My friends and I do this club to give kids the choice to learn music, so that those who want to can learn, without financial difficulties. Now, I am co-president and organize the classes each week. I love expanding the classes and volunteers, but my real reward is seeing my classmates, even those who dislike school, turn into bigger people and purpose-driven teachers around these kids they are attached to.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / 'about coffee addiction' - Stanford - Roommate Essay [4]

Your essay's story is fine...

The only thing I felt is that, I feel after reading others' roommate essays, everyone likes to tell their personal likes or hates...their addictions or their fears...or whatever

The thing is..I don't want to room with a coffee addict and I definitely don't want to give my college years to helping a roommate overcome addiction, UNLESS the coffee addiction part was just one big/weird quirk of that person, but in the end it is that person's personality I really enjoy and respect/admire, etc

I think many ppl forget: this essay is not really for your future roommate...It may never reach any student's hands. It is for the admissions reader, and All that you want them to know about you, you should write about

Give them a complete picture of you...what can you expand upon in terms of your extracurricular, leadership, streght of character, patience, perseverance, etc And use your favorite objects like maybe even Coffee and use that to say something like "Every morning, you can expect to whiff a different fragrance of coffee bean. Those smells that remind me of my own father each morning, and how I used to drink a full cup with him, and imagine myself as the great man he was in my eyes. Coffee in the morning always represented the preparation for a great productive day, and even on Saturday mornings should you be wide awake, I'd be glad to spend the day with you, with no time to lose. If you have any history test, I'd be able to help you memorize locations. Just say the place and I'll name the coffee bean that comes. " I think that way, you'd be relating more to the reader...and also Showing your Traits (very productive, efficient, a friend who is willing to help others study, creative with his memorization techniques, sociable, very loving to family and probably loving to roommate...)

Ya, but these are just my thoughts :0) I hope they help you!

And if you can read my essays as well...I would really appreciate that too :) Thanks!
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / "seek knowledge even as far as China" Exchange Program; Personal statement [8]

First of all, my name has an 'h' --> sarahhh

Just kidding :)) just pretending to be a jerk :\

Ok so:
The essay should be between 200-250 words and should provide a clearand detailed description of :
* your interests and personality
*your academic objectives
* your goals related to your field of study and personal development
* The reason why you wish them in USA and how it relates your interests and future objectives.
I could just say...if you wanted just go through this list in order and explain each...like bam, bam, bam, bam . Of course you can do it artfully as well, but it is also very very important to be Clear what your answer to each is, don't be scattered

Okay, on your own, Isuggest you do this:
See the colors I have colorcoded for each point? (and the last one is italicized) Well, you should go through your own essay, and color code every paragraph the belongs to each color. For example: everything that talks about your interests and personalities should be red...

Once you are done with that, make sure that there is a proper amt of each color (meaning you have answered all four parts in this essay)

Unorganized: If you have several colors mixed within onr paragraph, you'll know that your points are very scattered in different paragraphs...try to keep them together, unless for some reason you decide to mix it up a bit on purpose (but make sure it is still Clear)

Yup, that's all. God Bless ! Hope this helps :)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / 'That car is moving!' Pomona Admissions [7]

thechoice.blogs.nytimes.com/2011/10/28/your-common-application-essay-uncut/

The new york times explore this topic of word limit...But check out the blogs after it... professionals make really help comments about it

Basically, the most important blog i read said that Above 650 Wds, you start to lose the reader ( which makes sense to me, I mean we're still kinda just kids...what do we have to say that could be interesting enough for >700 wds...)

:) Ya
cupnoodle123   
Dec 22, 2011
Undergraduate / Stanford Letter to Roommate "Teamplayer" [8]

Sure! No problem...hehe maybe come message me when its up too:)

And thanks...don't worry though, mine started as a mess...you can still see some of it by the way the flow is a bit jerky ...but brainstorming and stuff really helps :)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 21, 2011
Undergraduate / Stanford Letter to Roommate "Teamplayer" [8]

I appreciate all your comments:) Let me know what you think of this...I wrote it as one fat paragraph because, well, that's the way it has to be pasted into the common app :)

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Dear Roommate: During the car ride here, I passed the time talking to my brother. It made me reflect how growing up with him has taught me humility, maturity, and selflessness. We've actually come a long way to respecting each other more as friends in and outside school. I know it'll be the same for you and me. The violin next to you; it represents teamwork to me. In church worship team, I would improvise guitar chords into beautiful violin harmonies to match the music. I was part of that team and I knew helped the band sound great. You'll find a team player in me, not a perfect one, but a passionate one. Speaking of passion, do you like to eat? At Chinese restaurants I have fun ordering food in my Americanized accent-Chinese. In the past, I couldn't communicate fluently with others in Asia, which motivated me to learn Chinese just to regain that piece of my culture. I look forward to the fun we'll have if we try cooking the cultural foods of our different houses, though I must warn you: I know how to eat my culture's food far better than I can even begin making it. Don't worry about feshman-15. I enjoy being outdoors, whether jogging alone, or playing group sports with my friends. Nature's irregularity, if not beauty, captivates me and makes me enjoy being outside. I do love long strolls on the beach, or anywhere, for that matter, and I'd get outdoor exercise with you any day. As for food for thought, I can't wait to read college-level fiction. I like talking about books with others, even just to discuss which characters we find dumb. With our massive intellects, our discussions could end up truly profound. Just for starters: Wuthering Heights or Jane Eyre? I say Wuthering Heights; girl, not even Jane could outdo a character like Heathcliff, but feel free to differ. If "Two is better than one", then being roommates already makes us 100% better. If "When one falls, the other can pick him up," then I'm glad we'll later understand a lot more what this means.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 21, 2011
Undergraduate / My love for guitar - Common App Activities Essay [9]

Good experience, but Ithink you should talk more about your reaction and any kind of growth/development you gained from all these events...cuz so far it just reads kind of like a list, to me

I'd like to know if guitar playing gave you any emotional edification and why...if it gave others that...how it kind of shaped your world from your eyes...because many people play guitar and if I were a famous guitar player Icould also make a list of really cool guitar gigs and accomplishments...But, it is about how you feel and your own feelings with your guitar experience and the creativity/style/artisticness in it that makes you stand out even with such a widely played instrument

Hope this helps, don't mean to sound harsh:)

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Can you also look over my essays and tell me what you think? Thanks!
cupnoodle123   
Dec 20, 2011
Undergraduate / "seek knowledge even as far as China" Exchange Program; Personal statement [8]

You still need to say more about your interests and personality...because the college is very intent on knowing YOU as an original person :)

Pakistan is rich in natural resources but unfortunately our industries aren't fully devolpe. You should tie this in more with what it has to do with you...not a random free sentence /at least, it seems random if just stuck in like that

I think you should focus on one field of study...its a bit scattered: you say you like bioprocesses and then you like chemistry (you say these two in different paragraphs also...which makes it scattered as well)

**Just organize your thoughts in a more neat way..THe ideas are good I feel and they make it quite interesting, but ya...work on that organization :)

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Do you mind also reading over my essays? They are below, the "What Matters to You/Beauty" and "Intellectual: Internship" Thanks!!
cupnoodle123   
Dec 20, 2011
Undergraduate / Stanford Intellectual Experience: SilverPlus Internship [5]

Hi! Can you guys read this over and let me know what you think about, anything you like/don't like about it. Thanks for all your comments in advance :)

Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development.

As a child, I wanted to be a ballerina, a writer, or an inventor. I always had the vision of designing and creating the next new things that people would love and utilize. In my imagination, I would consider how to make flying cars and portable houses. Because I always just saw the end invention, the process of making it always seemed a bit enigmatic. The desire to be an inventor and the concept of what an inventor was followed me throughout high school. When I took AP Chemistry, AP Alchemy flew out my head as I discovered how every process in the natural world could be explained and measured with numbers and calculations to make very logical sense. In a way, technology also lost some of its mystical appeal to me.

When I was a child, I would find my father's engineering office a boring place with a lot of wire and equipment resembling dialysis machines. But in high school, when I reentered that similar world during a summer internship at SilverPlus Inc., the wires and computer chips had meaning. My intern project was to develop a complex program, which ran on a microcontroller, to make it drive a piezo speaker. I enjoyed programming for its math, but this assignment seemed beyond my level. An engineer taught me the techniques of simplifying a complex piece of code by testing it in smaller chunks, until at last I began to analyze it. I realized that the mystical "engineering genius" I expected of brilliant engineers was their creativity in inventing simple techniques to gracefully solve nested problems. After weeks on this project, I tested my program and made it send voltage currents through the speaker. I saw the voltage waves appear on the oscilloscope and heard the speaker's clear sound with the probe; it was like seeing my creation's pulse and hearing its voice. It mystified me that something I helped invent on a computer could work in real life. I felt that the process of inventing something was probably always more amazing than the end invention itself.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 20, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I shoot things' - Activity Essay for M.I.T. [7]

also be careful...i think that painting, drawing, sculpture, even words and other sorts of art can also freeze time for viewers...so ya:)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I shoot things' - Activity Essay for M.I.T. [7]

:( i was hoping you really did shoot things when i first read the subject line...it made me laugh:) cuz i first thought of a BB gun or shotgun lover

but ya nice hobby you wrote of ...But ya, don't end with a sentence that makes a statement about "us", you should talk about you
cupnoodle123   
Dec 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Beauty' - Stanford What matters to you [4]

Thanks guys for the comments:) Jenny, I made some changes with your advice...do mind seeing how my essay is now? and let me know what else you think - Thanks!

i also made some changes to the last paragraph, but not big ones, hope it still flows nicely

What matters to you, and why?

Being a girl, I think it is inherent in me to love beauty. I like pretty Japanese erasers, cute cartoons, and also fine clothes, stylish hair, nice appearances. At school I cannot ignore the looks, fashion and outward beauty all around me. Typically, the pretty girls win the praise of good-looking guys, and the other way around.

Yet outward beauty was not my greatest trait and I set myself out of that game by default. I could rage against the shallowness of outward beauty, but that would only reveal the bit of regret that I did not have it as much as other girls. Many times I would have enjoyed the comfort of having a pretty face and features to be confident about, whether at school or among strangers or in this society that valued good looks. It used to bother me greatly, as I would look in the mirror and wish for this and that, and notice how my mild scoliosis kept my figure from being closer to ideal by today's standards.

Yet when I gazed at the beautiful people, I sometimes saw a jarring contrast that diminished their outward beauty. I knew many pretty people at school who did not say or do pretty things, and were not pretty to be around. I saw starlets in magazine ads whose familiar gorgeous faces only reminded me of their obnoxious, crude, or proud characters. Though my friends are not all beautiful, they are beautiful to be around, and when I am with them I know I would not want to trade away my character for outward charm. In my Bible that I read how God judges the heart, the inner person of someone, and not people's external looks. I realized that true, unfading beauty comes from the inside and only becomes more beautiful as a person ages, because of the additional wisdom she has gained through life experiences. It is the kind of beauty everyone was born to have, unlike physical beauty which is set in at birth. I know and am happy that I can still pursue genuine beauty, because I do not think I could ever stop caring about being beautiful.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 19, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Beauty' - Stanford What matters to you [4]

Hi, please give me you guys' feedback on this essay...

Thanks in advance, everyone for your help!

What matters to you, and why?

Being a girl, I think it is inherent in me to love beauty. The topic of beauty has always attracted me. As with beautiful art, I am drawn to fine clothes, stylish hair, pretty appearances. At school I cannot ignore the looks, fashion and outward appearances all around me. Usually, the pretty girls win the praise of good-looking guys, and the other way around.

Yet I know I am not one of them. So I am out of that game by default. I could rage against the shallowness of outward beauty, but that would only reveal the deep regret that I cannot have it as well. I also wanted the comfort of having a pretty face and features to be confident about, whether at school or among strangers or in this society that valued good looks. It used to bother me greatly, as I would look in the mirror and wish for these eyes to be bigger and the neck to be thinner, and notice how my mild scoliosis kept my figure from being closer to ideal, in today's standards.

Yet when I gazed at the beautiful people, I sometimes saw a jarring contrast that diminished their outward beauty. I saw that many pretty people at school did not say or do pretty things, and were not pretty to be around. I saw starlets on television and magazine ads whose familiar gorgeous faces only reminded me of their obnoxious, crude, or proud characters. I look at my friends, and though they are not all beautiful, they are beautiful to be around. Then I read in the Bible how God did not look at what people looked at, for people judged through outward appearances, but God judged the heart, the inner person. I realized that true, unfading beauty comes with a good heart and only becomes more beautiful as a person ages, because of the additional wisdom she has gained through life experiences. It is the kind of beauty everyone was born to have, unlike outward looks which are set in at birth. I know now and am happy that I can still pursue beauty, genuine beauty, because I do not think I could ever stop caring about being beautiful.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / 'the value of a liberal arts education' - Short Answer: Why Colby [4]

This essay is good, but I feel that if you expounded more about that time at Colby, it would really make the difference for your essay between good and really meaningful :) My own curiousness: Did you meet any cool ppl at Colby? Like Colby college students or others? That might be nice to talk about too. :)

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Can you also look over and sort of give me feedback about my two essays: one that is the Common App main essay "Paradoxical Christian" and the other "Letter to Roommate - love, CHinese girl" ones

I'd really appreciate it, thanks!!

cupnoodle123   
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / Stanford: LETTER TO ROOMMATE- love, Chinese girl [2]

Basically, to me I love what I have written, it seems to encapsulate me perfectly, but unfortunately it is about 600 characters over the limit...

Please help me know which parts are best to cut down or cut out. :) Thanks!!

Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

In every way, I am a Chinese girl. My cultural exposure in the US for the past fifteen years I have been living here is mixed with my family's style of Hong Kong humor, and basic Asian-ness. Just look at my shelf and you'll find the myriad of English books, right beside the several series of Cantonese and Mandarin comic books I have. While legitimate Chinese texts are still a bit of a struggle for me to read, I adore my Hong Kong cartoons that are written in the dialect and slang of modern Hong Kong and capture the humor and mannerisms of the people there as well. I have many books of an older Cantonese comic series, called Lao Fu Zi, about a stereotypical Hong Kong old man who makes Chinese traditions and modern culture in Asia seem very humorous. I actually love Asian stereotypes and they're not offensive to me because I have learned to appreciate my culture. I find stereotypes hilarious because they are sometimes very true about me, the cultural values passed down to me, and my Asian parents. I watched Ping Pong Playa, a 2007 movie about a Chinese boy undoing Chinese tradition and stereotypes while, ironically, being forced to be a Ping Pong teacher. After about five years, the stereotypes were still so accurate. The movie's motto was "Don't Just Win, Destroy" and I laughed at that reflection of my culture's stereotyped "Tiger-mom"-driven ambition, which actually arose from Confucian values for working hard. I admit I fit some stereotypes: I enjoyed AP classes and sometimes only took them because normal classes covered too little material to keep me interested, I play the violin, and if I'm not, I wish I were a master at chess. But I must say I love my life in America. I like how my friends have their own tastes. At school I have friends who love photography, Tumblr, the internet, and these interests overlap with one another. It got me interested in the internet, beyond just search engines and information, and even though people advise kids to stop living their lives through the internet, I can't ignore how much of people's creativity and bizarre talents is passed through the net. It's not just an internet café, it's an art portfolio that everyone can add things to, and every art can be wildly different from the other. On the internet, I can watch Chinese news and improve my Chinese speaking, keep up-to-date on news about others, finally learn what dubstepping is, or watch the concert-master's violin solo on YouTube and try to mimic it. So I have to face it; only living in my world can get boring sometimes. Can't wait to meet you.
cupnoodle123   
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / Common App main essay: 'Paradoxical Christian' [3]

no no, that really helped...actually I also felt that way...I was sorta framing my 2nd paragraph around the prompt, which I think doesn't fit what I am trying to say, and so I think I will come up with a "topic of my choice"

and sure I'll look at your essay :)
cupnoodle123   
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The Nerds' - USC Engineering Supplement [5]

DesiGirl

I think your essay is awesome, very unique voice. I've read both of your essays; they quite blow me away :) I think I would be able to offer more critique if you also put the prompt in, because as far as language/style/grammar goes, it's really good...

Only, I don't know the prompt, so make sure whatever your write about answers it fully too.

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Can you help edit my essay too? I would really really appreciate that! It's called "Common App Essay: 'Paradoxical Christian" "
cupnoodle123   
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / Common App main essay: 'Paradoxical Christian' [3]

Hi, can you guys give me feedback on my essay, because I'm pretty at a loss of what to think of it,
I'm mainly emphasizing church as a huge influence in my life as I've grown up, and kind of want to show how church made me engaged in lots of activities; it wasn't just a religious duty like sitting through preaching and stuff...

Thanks :)

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PROMPT
A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

Or maybe I should have it fall under this prompt:

Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

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ESSAY

It was ironic, that though I loved my church and half my identity was formed there, the term I was most uncomfortable with being labeled was "Christian." Because it seemed like it was painted one color, a word too opaque to reveal how dynamic was my faith in my life and how colorful it really made it. Outside church, I almost hated terming myself 'Christian', because of all it connoted. Always whenever I told people outside who were not Christian that I was a Christian, it always evoked the image a young girl, extreme, uptight and lacking interesting hobbies. My friends respected me and the way my person was shaped by my religion, but when I sometimes excused myself from an activity because of a church function, they might shake their heads and teasingly say, "Why are you so church-active?" As I was younger, I was taken aback by the reactions of my friends from school and kept my church life pertaining more as an extracurricular than anything I would openly speak of in school. Only it puzzled me that though many kids at school and I shared common interests, senses of humor, and curiosity for the same stimulating subjects, I wondered that they couldn't also take interest in church as I did. For a church stayed as my area and they were content to not look into it.

Though later on I realized it was because they only knew of 'church' as cursorily and on the surface as I have been in constantly referring to it only by name. Throughout high school, my church underwent many changes, as we moved into a new community that was much more racially diverse. It was one of the chief reasons I loved church outreaches and its opportunities to meet people everywhere in the community and around the city. During one Halloween, our church creatively decided to set up a Halloween, Hallelujah Festival for the kids and their families living around there. On the day of the Festival, I was very surprised when I began to see some unknown faces of kids and families of various ethnicities approach our church lawn to join the amusement of our games booths, food and prizes. As I became more open in speaking to them, I found the community very amiable and as full of humor, youthfulness, and energy as we. Some of the new people we met also began joining our church as a result of the warm encounter and began to enjoy the whole rhythm of being part of church. The effect of this event upon me was similar to the ones the other church outreaches had on me. In every activity like these, I see how my church is only mysterious and perhaps uninviting to those who do not know what it was like inside the doors. Thus I began to be more open-minded and truly curious of how my own friends saw Christianity, and was surprised by their ideas when they shared with me. Some were misconceptions, such as the ones I had had about them. I began to respect my friends' opinions more and shared my own truthfully, and to my surprise, some even voluntarily joined me to church to participate in activities. This gave me the patience, to first understand the views of another before I judged them to be completely adverse to every form of religion, as I hoped they would also be to me before they judged me simply 'Christian' with many rules and perfect attendance.

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