EF_Kevin
Nov 29, 2014
Graduate / "IT Career guidance and the advent of Cloud is paramount to change GDPs for poor nations" [3]
The story cannot change problems, but maybe your story includes experiences that prepare you to solve some them..
Having acquired a couple of International certificationstoo , my ... It's good if you go through the essay and delete all words that are unnecessary/unhelpful, like this one.
...decision to embark on an MBA at Varsity XXX will cement my... Nice use of the word cement, good idea.
... thoughts and vision to change economically challenged businesses and countries at large.--- Can you be more specific? I think this is where you can improve the whole essay. Don't just say you want to help 'improve'... instead, give specific examples of what you'd like to do.. solutions you propose based on your research and experience.
Again, delete unnecessary words: During my work experience lhave discovered...
Good luck with this!! It's impressive.
My story is short but it can change the problems poor countries are facing.
The story cannot change problems, but maybe your story includes experiences that prepare you to solve some them..
Having acquired a couple of International certifications
...decision to embark on an MBA at Varsity XXX will cement my... Nice use of the word cement, good idea.
... thoughts and vision to change economically challenged businesses and countries at large.--- Can you be more specific? I think this is where you can improve the whole essay. Don't just say you want to help 'improve'... instead, give specific examples of what you'd like to do.. solutions you propose based on your research and experience.
Again, delete unnecessary words: During my work experience l
Good luck with this!! It's impressive.