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Jul 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / The causes of living poverty and presidents of poor countries [5]

Do you know a lot of people living in poverty?Poverty is caused by some people. Thissituation is always a problem for poor people. They sometimes do not have any food to eat.

Therefore, some people die because of hunger. The purpose of this essay is to analyze three main
causes of living in poverty. The causes of this situation are the country's economic development,
waste of money and having a large family.

The first and immediate cause of living in poverty is lack of economic growth in the country.
Actually, poor countries do not have a good government. If poor countries use their underground
resources, they can be developed countries. Moreover, some problems occur because of president.
For example, some presidents lack management skills. Presidents should encourage their

The second cause of poverty is wasting money. Nowadays, if we give an example, people
waste a lot of water in their country. It is a very important issue in the globalizing world, so many
people die in the poor countries. People should prevent this situation.

The last and maybe the most important cause of poverty is having a large family. Some
African families have more than eight children, so people do not raise children. Moreover, some
children die because of hunger and lack of water.

In conclusion, unless presidents of poor countries solve this problem, they will not become
developed countries. .
Aug 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / "police office shouldn't carry guns" - do you agree or disagree with statement [3]

Guns may be considered as symbol of violence and power. An great power comes with great responsibility besides all these facts I personal think police officers must carry guns with them to maintain law and order. People may argue about dangerous and catastrophic effects but its a measure of safety for the public and for officers themselves.

To begin with safety is major issue with all us. Most of gangster carries strong weapons and they didn't think a second before using them. How the police officers can handle them without guns. For example last month a read a newspaper in New York Times about an incidence took place in downtown. The article mentioned that two officer died while protecting a child from a gang. They didn't use gun first but when situation went out of control they use gun in a defensive way. On other hand gangster keep shooting on them. This type of incident may more often and worse is police officer without gun.

In addition to safety guns also a thought as symbol of power. S ince B ritish came to A merica they only rule with gun. America got freedom back only with power of smart use of weapons.

No body follows law and order if they are not afraid of something. This has been proved in many psychological experiments and researcher hypothesized that sometime negative reinforcement make us faster learner. Hence guns can be used as negative reinforcement and we can train the society to follow laws in order to maintain peace full environment.

Well apart from safety and power all the police officers are sufficiently trained enough to use the gun only when no option left. Every office gives prior warning to victim before using them. For example when yesterday I went to market I heard lots of police car horns and sounds when I turned around I saw sheriff was given warning to man with a lady bag .H e was asked to not to move, to place his hands , to head turn around and on sit on knees. Sheriff was holding gun only to scare him or to make him follow his command. Sheriff didn't fire a single shoot while arresting him. Well people may think using guns as inhuman behavior but I think our officers are trained enough to use them only in extreme condition.

T o sum up I would like to mention can u imagine functioning of a teacher without board, a doctor without medicines same how a cope can work without gun. A lthough we can't ignore the fact of responsible use it only when required.

In my opinion, your essay is generally perfect because you choose different words and you supply subject integrity .