Writing Feedback / IELTS- parents give children TV/PC game to make them quiet,Give your solutions and reason~ [7]

Some parents find no time to spend with their children. They give them television and computer games in order to keep them quiet. Give your own solutions and reasons.

The parents are always playing the significant roles in children grow up. Not all the parents know what is their children really needs, or they may have no time to teach or play with their children instead of bought TV or PC game to their children to keep them stay at home safely and quietly. In my point of view, it is not a good way for children's growing up. The parents have to pay more attention on their child carefully and patiently in order to give them a good beginning of future life.

It is undoubted that almost all the children keen on video games, and some video game maybe could help children learn something. But it still brings more negative effect to the children. Firstly, keeping focus on TV or computer screen for a long time may damage children's vision. And lacking outdoor activities is not good for their physical healthy. Secondly, too much concentration on games may lead them ignore the other things, such as lack communication with their parents or forget go to bed or even not have a dinner on time. Some games which contain violent and bloody may seriously mislead children's personal value and make them to do the wrong thing.

Here are some advices that I suggested if the parents have not enough time to care their children. The parents could encourage children's good interesting or hobby, for example, if they likes play basketball, the parents could suggest them to enjoy the sports club to enhance their sense of cooperation. Or encourage them to participate in church or community activities or volunteer jobs, it good for children to improve their communication skill and social responsibility.

In conclusion, it is important that how the parents educate their children, because the way that the parents teaching will affect children life very much, if the parents wish their children have a better future, they'd better have good plan for their children not just leave them to TV or computer games.

Writing Feedback / IELTS- competition and cooperation , which one is important for children? [7]

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Competition and cooperation are both essential skills for people to live in this world. Someone believe it's better to put their children in a competition environment early to adapt current society, but others say that cooperation is the most significant skill which children have to know well. In this essay, I will talk about both side and give my own opinions about them.

Competition is undoubtedly good. First of all, it will push us to do better and better, for example, compete between companies is always good to customer to get better quality products and services. For children, it helps children to learn new knowledge or skills of preparation of their future life. A second point is that competition helps children can get lots of experience, no matter winning or losing, they can get confidence.

However, only focus on competitiveness is not always beneficial for children. To begin with, young children are naturally egocentric. Therefore they have to learn how to feel other people's feeling and help other one. No parent want their child become a selfish man, isn't it? In addition, group work is a good way to teaching children communication skill and sense of responsibility. We are now live in a highly-interdependent knowledge society, it is hard that one man can cope with everything, no matter how brilliant you are, work as a team always the best and effective method to getting a success.

In conclusion, it is almost impossible to separate these two features of our lives. Competition and cooperation are potential elements in our blood, they are most important factors to us to establish current world, and children have to learn both of things well.

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