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Posts by samilli
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samilli   
Jul 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / Any means can be taken to attain a worthy goal;GRE Issue [4]

Nice essay, good examples and strong argument. I especially liked your connection to Swami Vivekananda. Maybe add one more sentence to the conclusion saying why both reaching goal and how it is reached are equally important, just to restate/justify in a few words the whole point of your essay.
samilli   
Jul 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / SAT: Do changes that make life easier not necessarily make them better? [8]

Technology has changed and impacted the world so tremendously that humans cannot spend their everyday lives without it. While these advancements have made life as we know it much easier, they have not necessarily made it better.

One of the most renowned technological weapons, and probably the most deadly, is the atom bomb. The atomic bomb has made the Allied countries lives' easier by quickly ending World War II. However the atom bomb has not changed anyone's lives for the better, especially not for the Japanese. The long term effects of the bomb are even worse than the bomb itself because it exposed the Japanese to radiation poisoning, cancer, and later death.

Factories have made lives easier because they efficiently produce products used in everyday lives on a large scale. However, factories have not changed lives for the better. In fact, they have made lives even worse due to the pollution caused by factory emissions.

Even though technological changes advancements in weaponry and machinery has made many lives easier,it has definitely not changed anyone' s lives for the better because the harmful long-term effects those changes come with.
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