Writing Feedback / Exerting consumers' interest to purchase over products by advertisements [2]

Today, the high sales of popular consumers goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, advertisement plays an important role in business marketing, even it can decide what a company will survive or close from business world. As such, many companies are popular to use good advertisement for promoting their products to consumer, although consumers do not really need these products. Therefore, I believe that advertisement is key factor to sell more products of companies. However, consumers should be selective in purchasing the products on advertising to avoid more disadvantages.

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Writing Feedback / Increasing wider horizons by working or travelling before learning at university [NEW]

Good preparation before starting university studies is considered as an important activity for students. As such, lots of countries around world encourage young people to work or travel after finishing in high school to improve their knowledge. Therefore, I believe that this trend can add young people's experience which is probably useful for their studies at university, although this can cause young people to forget some lessons which are ever learned in high school.

According to this topic, working or travelling improves young people's knowledge. For example, some graduated students work in factory. This can make them to know concerning the real life of adult. Also, if young people prefer traveling, they can learn different languages and cultures. As a result, young people can increase their wider horizons which can develop students' abilities before beginning to learn at university.

However, young people can lose some material of subject in their high school. The result shows that 75 % of students in first year at university are difficult to follow what they study in class since they forget some knowledge of subjects in high school. They also have to learn repeatedly about the materials which they forget. As a sequence, people are worry to their studies at university.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although working or travelling gives negative impact for young people, it will not outshine benefits of working and travelling after graduation in high school. Therefore, I believe that young people should explore their abilities to have considerable experience of working and traveling to prepare their studies.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of reasons for study and employer support based on different ages of people [NEW]

The charts give information regarding the reasons for study according to age of students and the number of employer support by age group and both are measured in percentages. Overall, what stands out from the charts show that the percentage of people under 26 is the highest of percentage in both charts and the lowest percentage of employer support is people's aged 30-39.

With regard to the first chart, the highest percentage reason for study is students' under 26 for career at 80% which is 70% higher than for interest at the same aged categories. It is followed by people aged 26-29 at approximately at 69% for career compare with some 25% for interest. Next, people's aged 40 to 49 have the same figures at 40% whereas, the percentage for interest of people's over the age of 49 is higher than for career at 70% and 18% respectively.

Moving to a more detailed analysis reveals that people's aged under 26 is the highest of percentage of employer support at some 65%. Whereas people in the age of 26-29 have 50% of employer support as the second highest percentage, elderly people follow this trend at approximately 45%. In addition, with about 38% people in the 40-49 age group are fairly low, it is nearly similar pattern with people of 30-34 ages at 35%.

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Writing Feedback / The number electricity production by fuel resource [2]

The charts give information regarding the number electricity production by fuel resource in two different countries between 1980 and 2000. Overall, what stands out from the charts describes that Australia had the highest of electricity unit by fuel source for Coal, whereas Nuclear Power was the most dominant of electricity production by fuel resource in France in 2000.

In 1980, from 100 unit of the total of electricity production by fuel resource, Coal in Australia was the highest unit of fuel resource amongst others at 50%, which was half higher than France's Coal. It was followed by Hydro Power as the second highest of electricity production at 20 units. While Australian's Natural Gas had the same number as Hydro Power, Oil was the lowest of electricity production in Australia. In contrast, France had more Natural Gas and Oil than Australia, although France's Hydro Power was lower than Australia's.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the chart reveals that noticeable changes of electricity production was Nuclear Power in France. It experiences a dramatic rise over the next twenty years at 120 of 180 units of electricity production in 2000. Likewise France, Australia's Coal increased significantly in 2000 at 130 units. Next, Hydro Power, Natural Gas, and Oil in Australia were not more dominant than France's.

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Writing Feedback / The percentage of national expenditure on five different countries [2]

The table gives information regarding the percentage of national expenditure on different items in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002. Overall, what stands out from the table shows that the highest percentage of food/drink/tobacco and leisure/education was in Turkey. While Italy was the highest percentage of clothing/footwear, Sweden was the lowest percentage of food/drink/tobacco and clothing/footwear.

According to the table, at 32.14% Turkey was the highest percentage among others in the expenditure for food/drink/tobacco, it was followed by Ireland at 28.91% which was around 10% higher than Spain at 18.80%. Next, Italy and Sweden had similar percentages of food/drink/tobacco at 16.36% and 15.77% approximately.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that Italy had the highest figure of clothing/footwear at 9.00%, whereas the percentage of the same categories as Italy are Turkey, Spain and Ireland having similar percentages at each 6.63%, 6.51% and 6.43%.

In addition, of all countries was under 5% The highest of leisure/education category was Turkey at 4.35%, while Sweden was at 3.32% as the second highest. Then, following this trend was Italy (3.20%), Ireland (2.21%) and Spain (1.98%).

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Writing Feedback / Growing personality by live experiences [NEW]

Research indicates that the characteristic we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in life. which do you consider to be the major influence?

Many significant factors can influence people's personalities. As such, some people argue that people's characteristics are more dominant to lead people's personalities that life experience which people may have. This is because the characteristic is internal factor of people which is difficult to be fought. While it is true to some extent, I would argue that the experiences of people's live can change people's personalities as people take much information from environment where they live, which can change the way of people thinking.

With regard to this topic, the characteristics have much more influences on people's personalities. This also will make people to have a particular identity in their lives. For example, the first Indonesian president, Soekarno, is known as charismatic leader since he can hypnotize many people if he speak in front public and also can lead people to follow what he wants. As a result, people's personalities can grow with the characteristic which people were born.

On the other hand, people can build their personalities by experiences in their lives. To illustrate, people who have good education tend to think out of the box as educational environments where people study have influenced how they think, decide or do an activity. As a sequence, new knowledge and information which people take of environment where people live will be possible to change people's characteristics before.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although the characteristic really influences people's personalities, people's experience is mainly factor which develop personalities of people when they grow up. Therefore, I would argue that people must be aware to get experiences for improving their personalities which can ensure people to survive in their lives.

Writing Feedback / The number of marriages-divorces and marital status in the USA [3]

The two charts give information regarding the number of marriages and divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000, whereas the second chart shows the number of marital status of adult Americans in 1970 and 2000 and it is measured in percentage.

Generally, what stands out from the charts illustrate that the number of American people getting married and divorces shows a downward trend over the periods and married adult in USA was the highest percentage of marital status among others in both years, while the lowest number of marital status was the divorced in 1997.

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Writing Feedback / First stage is to gather bottles in the recycling center. The process of recycling plastic bottles [3]

The diagram gives information regarding how plastic bottles are recycled. Generally, what stands out from the diagram illustrates that there are some stages to recycle the plastic bottles beginning from collection of plastic bottles as the first step, the process continues until the pellets are ready to sell.

With regard to the process of recycling plastic bottles for new uses, the first stage is collection of plastic bottles in recycling center. Next, the plastic bottles are separated from other types of containers such as glass and metal, these are sorted by color and are pressed into bales (around 7,000 bottles per bale) in the next following steps before the plastic bottles are picked up by transportation to place where the reclaimer process is.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the diagram reveals that in the last step there are some differences in recycling sort of plastic bottles. Firstly, diversity of bales are broken apart by a bale breaker and plastic is shredded onto flakes whereas it is washed, rinsed and dried for flakes. In addition, some of flakes are melted and put through extruder while pellets are formed before the pellets are ready to be sold to manufactures to be used to make fibers carpets and clothing, nonfood containers and other products.

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Writing Feedback / Developing public transportation for reducing at least protecting pollution [NEW]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public transportation systems in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution. Do you think it is better for government to spend money developing public transportation or developing new kinds of cars?

Global warming is the most important problem around world. One of the majors causing this is pollution which produced by over using private cars on the roads. As such, some people believe that government should spend much money to develop public transportation system, so the pollution can be reduced. However, others argue that development of electric and other types of cars are better to be developed by government to take less pollution. Whilst it is true to some extent, I believe that the development of public transportation is one solution to preserve world from climate change.

With regard to this case, government who develops new kinds of cars does not give solution as this just adds the number of private vehicles bought or owned by people and makes the problem unable to be overcome. In addition, the main cause of pollution is not because of sorts of transportation but over using and capacity from the vehicles is the most significant one which causes an increase in burning of fossil fuel of private mobiles.

On the other hand, it is more essential for government to spend much money to build public transportation. This is as government can change people's lifestyle which prefer private cars than public transportation. For example, government develops an excellent public transportation system which can make people quitter and safetier in using transportation if they travel to somewhere. As a result, people have other alternatives of transportation and encourage them to protect driving private cars.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although developing electric or other kinds of cars is possible to reduce pollution, making public transportation can ensure pollution to be quite less reduced. Therefore, I would argue that government should be appropriate to develop public transportation to overcome pollution and also can control people who are really keen on driving and collection private mobiles.

Writing Feedback / The process of producing wood pellets [3]

The diagram gives information regarding on the process of making wood pellets for heating buildings. Generally, what stand out from the picture describes that there are eight stages of producing wood pellets from beginning selected material of pellets as the first step to the pellet at the ready to be sold.

With regard to the first three stages, the material of wood pellets which called sawdust arrives from sawmill. Afterward, the sawdust is hammered into fibers of uniform length in a hammer mill to produce fibers, and then the fibers are dampened with steam before it is processed by machine.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the diagram reveals that in the second five steps, fibers are forced through holes in a pellet machine, forming into pellets before the pellets are cooled to loose dust which is vacuumed off in the next steps. After that, the pellet has been ready to be packed into 18 kilo (140 pound bags) and can be distributed to be sold.

Writing Feedback / Changing children's lifestyle by exploring the natural world [3]

Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature?

Nowadays, modern technology changes people's lifestyle. Because of this, some people now prefer spending their time to relax and enjoy their lives. However, others argue that children should play in the nature world to take more experience. Therefore, I believe that it is really important for children to explore wider environment to improve children's social skill.

With regard to spend time indoors, children have limited environment to explore their talent. For example children just know playing computer games instead of playing an outside activity with other friends. Consequently, children grow up with different behavior or custom from places where children live.

On the other hand, taking to the nature world can change children's way of life. This is because children can imitate lifestyle of adult around them after the children make close relationship and observe adult's behavior. In addition, children also are used to challenge which they face so that, this condition encourages children to be more independent.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although advanced technology makes quitter to stay at home and can get some benefits from the technology, children must have social skill which can make children to survive with life challenge in the future. Therefore, I would argue that parents should encourage their children to play in the nature world to improve children's ability.

Writing Feedback / Learning about different languages in as early age as possible [2]

All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

Nowadays, foreign-language skill is important for people around world. As such, lots of people believe that children should learn about language from other countries beginning in the earliest grades because it is the appropriate time to have long-term memorizing. However, others argue that it is not good enough to force children to study foreign language as children cannot follow the second-language subject. Whilst it is true to some extent, I would argue that it is better for children to begin learning about foreign language in the earliest grades to have good language skill for their live in the future.

With regard to this case, children have excellent brain to learn about foreign language. The recent studies demonstrate that the best time to pick up new language is when children still young as early as possible. This is because their brain can remember various vocabularies in different meaning easily and fast. As a result, young children will be benefited to take experience of studying the language in long time.

On the other hand, the earliest young age gives negative impact to children spending their time to study their second language. For example, children in the earliest young age just study other languages from local teachers without having to communicate with mother tongue of languages which they learn. As a consequence, there is no doubt that most of children do not have good fluency to speak the second language well.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although studying foreign language in the earliest grades gives children challenge, the benefits of learning about foreign language will not outshine the challenge. Therefore, I personally suggest that parents have to encourage their children to study languages from different countries since they are still kid to have brilliant abilities to master the second language for their future.

Writing Feedback / The figure of household internet access in different areas in a European country [2]

The graph gives information regarding to the number of the household internet access in two different areas in a European country between 1999 and 2004 and it is measured in percentage. Overall, it can clearly be seen that although both locations were in upward trend of household internet access, the percentage of household internet access in urban/suburban area experienced a significant increase. On the other hand, a slow rise of rural location was over the periods.

With regard to this trend, the figure of household internet access of rural/suburban was rise. In 1999, it stood at approximately 15% which was around 12% higher than the household internet access of rural area. Following of this, the number of household internet access in rural area rose twofold at 30% in the next year. Whereas, during 2001 and 2002 it increased at 40% to 50% respectively, it inclined again slowly to about 55% in 2004.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the graph reveals that, in rural area, the number of household internet access witnessed a gradual rise. It was from at about 3% in 1999 to at around one in twenty in 2000 and this trend continued in the following years before the figure reached a short peak in 2002, at half of the whole percentage. After of this, the percentage of household internet access in rural area just rose steadily by approximately 2% in 2003 to finish in 2004, at more than half.

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Writing Feedback / Degrees granted of some subject in the National University during 1990 and 2010 [3]

The chart gives information regarding to the number of degrees granted in lots of subject at the National University from 1990 to 2010 and it is measured in percentage. Overall, it can clearly be seen that the computer subject matter tended to increase over the periods, Business field experienced a gradual decrease. In any case, Medicine and Law fluctuated over the timeframe.

In 1990, the number of degrees granted of Computer science subject stood at 30% and it increased to 40% over the next ten years before the degrees granted of Computer science was the most predominant at 45% at the end of periods. In contrast, the degrees granted of Business field which was the same point as Computer in 1990, at 30%, saw a gradual fall by 10% in 2000 to finish at 15% in ten following years.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from chart reveals that the degrees granted of Law and Medicine has fluctuation trend. As the lowest degrees granted, the percentage of Law subject was at less than a fifth in 1990 and it was a rebound rise at 15% over the next twenty years, after the degrees granted of law witnessed a slow rise at one in ten in 2000. Furthermore, Medicine field was at a quarter of degrees granted in 1990 and in 2000, it inclined slowly at less than a third before degrees granted of Medicine saw a rebound decrease at a quarter in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / With regard to the average of living cost in two different cities [3]

The chart gives information regarding to the average of living cost in Riverdale and Cape Alicia city compared to the average of national living cost. Overall, it can clearly be seen that in Riverdale city, Housing is the highest amongst others, whereas Utilities is the most expensive in Cape Alicia city.

With regard to Riverdale city, the highest of living cost is Housing, at 19%, which is nearly threefold higher than cost for Health Care, at 7%, while Clothing takes 5.5% of the number of living cost as a whole. In addition, the average of living cost of Groceries, Utilities and Transportation have a similar pattern at 4.7%, 4.5% and 4% respectively.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the chart reveals that Utilities is the highest of Cape Alicia city's living cost, at 1.2% and then the second highest is cost for Clothing, at 1%. After that, other forms in Cape Alicia city take the average of living cost under 1% such as Groceries at 0.5%, Health Care at 0.8%, Transportation at -3.8% and Housing at -3.8%.

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Writing Feedback / Being better life by advanced technology (IELTS Task 2) [2]

Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Advanced technology changes people's lifestyle. As such, lots of people believe that people living today are better than one century ago, which lived in limited facilities. Therefore, I would argue that sophisticated technology nowadays ensures people's lives quality thanks to do their activities easier and faster than before.

With regard to live in the past, almost people used limited facilities. For example, if young people in wanted to play football, they would go to dirty field as their places to play sport because there is no modern field around their areas, which is good enough for them. As a result, it is difficult to explore young people's talent because of minimum facilities.

On the other hand, people in the day and age live in complete modern technology. This causes people to able to improve their lives quality. For instance, nearly all modern people have mobile phone. By using mobile phone, people can keep in touch with their families and friends in far away every time. Furthermore, people also can access internet to help them to do their activities like for GPS to get around areas if they suddenly travel to somewhere. As a consequence, modern technology makes people to do their various activities fast.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that the developing of technology transforms alternative ways of people to live, which is greater than people in the past. Therefore, I believe that in this century, people have good abilities to survive in their life due to technology and should use the technology with care to others.

Writing Feedback / The chart informs the number of Bulgarians moving to different countries based on level of education [5]

The bar chart informs regarding the number of Bulgarian inhabitants wanting move to foreign countries based on three graduated categories: higher, secondary and primary education, measured in percentage between 2002 and 2008.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the number of people with secondary education who want to live in another country was the highest amongst level of education whereas the figure for primary and lower education experienced upward trend. On the other hand, the percentage of people having higher education had a gradual increase in the fourth first year of period before it dropped dramatically at the end of period.

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Writing Feedback / Positive effect of being international student will not outshine the demerits of it (IELTS Task 2) [3]

More and more students are choosing to study in another country for higher education. Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

Having great skill is the most important ability for human lives. As such, studying abroad is becoming trend for many students today, particularly because of the merits which lots of people believe that overseas universities offer better courses and teachers more experts with their fields. However, unfamiliar cultures and missing families are some challenges which can cause scholars unable adapting to new place. Therefore, I would argue that although students taking study in foreign countries get the negative impacts but the disadvantages will not outshine the advantages of being international students.

To regard with the positive effect of learning overseas, many excellent subject matters can encourage student to have extraordinary ability. As such, students can focus on a specific field which fits their talents and their goals in the future. In addition, skilled teachers ensure scholars to take deep knowledge completely to get more job opportunities in profitable companies whilst having close relationship to different foreigners is another benefit which many learners can receive.

On the other hand, the drawbacks of this trend are difficulties to survive living overseas. With different cultures in new environment, students must fight hard to adapt to rules of surrounding places where students are staying as it is impossible learners can finish their studies well without good adapting abilities. Moreover, another trouble of being foreign students also can be gotten because of living far ways from families. This condition can cause homesickness which will disturb scholars to focus on their activities in international countries.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that learning in foreign universities can broaden students' knowledge even though there are some demerits of this. Overall, I believe that good preparation both mentally and academically to learn overseas will make students to succeed in their studying in another county.

Writing Feedback / Learning about foreign countries by watching and travelling [3]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Learning about different countries has been trend in globalization era. As such, lots of people argue that people nowadays can improve their knowledge much more about international countries by watching TV programmes and movies from the most comfortable location in their home than visiting to overseas which can spend a lot of money. Whilst this is true to some extent, I would argue that understanding foreign language cannot be done with looking both TV and films, people just can know it via travelling to foreign countries to practice directly with mother tongue of other countries which they visit.

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Learning about different countries has been trend in globalization era. As such, lots of people argue that with TV or movie, people nowadays can improve their knowledge about international countries from their home. This is because nearly all information of foreign countries are available on television and this way is believed rather than visiting abroad spending a lot of money. Whilst this is true to some extent, in fact, not all form of other countries can be found in film. I would personally believe that people must travel to overseas if they want to study foreign habitat as for knowing it, people have to directly observe how inhabitant behavior is there.

Mostly, either television or movie shows various lessons, which one of them is highlight of foreign countries. For instance, some televisions in Indonesia often broadcast a movie about state of other countries such as Arabic culture and history. As a result, lots of Indonesian people really understand how the real people cultures is in Arabic country even some of them can imitate the culture in their live in Indonesia like using Arabic custom. Furthermore, many TV programmes in Indonesia also perform using other countries languages so that some Indonesia inhabitants are very fond of following it. This means that by looking film, people can make progress for their lives.

However, this way is difficult to study people habits in many countries because various forms of habits are in every country. Taking Hollywood film as an example, there are many people habits of western countries portrayed in the Hollywood. Although people often watch film of Hollywood, they cannot see what is different each habit as in movie there is no clearly explanation of foreigner habits. Consequently, travelling is one solution only for people learning foreign habits in different countries. People must live in around foreigner and make relation to them while people also pay attention habits of foreigners. This method is more effective than watching television.

The aforementioned evidence that reveals that even though both television and movie can be a good alternative to learn about foreign countries, visiting abroad encourages people to get more experience of many countries. Therefore, I would argue that people should know what is the most effective strategies for understanding about other countries.

Writing Feedback / Trending of high class building [2]

Some people believe that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

Towns and cities having various imposing buildings have become trend nowadays. For some people, this condition can grab public attention as magnificent building can attract many companies to invest in the towns. However, others believe that the different building designs will destroy the towns' scenery, because designs and forms of buildings are truly slum. Therefore, I would argue that it is really important to preserve the building keeping beautiful and clean for making quiet environment of the cities.

With regard to impressive of the buildings, either the towns or the cities can be known as attractive tourism industry. Taking Dubai, one of the towns in United Arab Emirates, as an example, in a 2005 study on this topic, finding showed that 30% of tourist coming in Dubai since they are very interested with the unique buildings there.